Me and my dear partner in crime đ have been enjoying writing these little snippets. Iâll be putting both our versions up for âcomparison.â My version was written after the OG, so credit is not all mine as always. Itâs amazing the different writing styles you come across. Writing is a beautiful art in itself. Please enjoy from the two of us:
OG Possible Opening for Unforeseen
Maria: Apri Gli Occhi, Mia Figlia (Open Your Eyes, My Daughter).
Mirabel slowly opened her eyes as asked. Lain out on the bed was an emerald green tablet. It glew with viridescent light, though Mirabel could just make out something on the surface.
Mirabel: It's beautiful, Mama.
Maria: This tablet shows the future of our family.
Mirabel: How did you get it?
Maria: Long ago, your Uncle Alonzo and I found a man out in the fields surrounding our home. Winter had started setting in early, a blizzard sweeping across the territory. The man was sick and delirious with fever. I could not leave him there. Could never live with myself if I did. Yet, when I reached out to help him, he held onto me and showed me his Gift. He showed me our family would grow...
Maria lifted the tablet up, revealing an image of herself and a newborn infant in her arms.
Maria: He showed me I would be a mother. But the father remained unforeseen. We took him in, nursed him as best we could, and he returned our kindness by staying on the farm to help us through our struggles. Overtime, I fell in love with him, despite his troubles. And he felt the same, despite his self-reservations. He asked me to marry him. And after we were wed, the prophecy he had foreseen came true. I became a mother. And he became your father.
Mirabel was in awe. Her Papa had foreseen her birth. He had magic: Something she had only heard about in bedtime stories and fairytales. That must mean...
Mirabel: Is Papa a witch?
Maria: Not exactly.
Mirabel: But how can he do magic? He has to be a witch. Only witches can do magic.
Maria sighed. This girl truly was her daughter: Curious, insightful, and persistent. No wonder Alonzo found her troublesome at times. Still, not like he was any easier.
Maria: Perhaps your Papa can explain.
She turned to face the door.
Maria: Come in, Amore Mio.
The door creaked open. Standing in the entrance was a figure, seven-feet tall and cast in shadow.
Maria: Your daughter wishes to know more about your Gift, my love. It is best she hears it from you.
With a sigh, the figure moved towards them. As he drew closer, the light from the bedroom candle dispelled his dark form. What was once a seven-foot tall shadow shrunk down to reveal a 5'4 stick of a man. Close as he was, Mirabel's father kept his distance from them, his face weary and concerned. He decided to sit on a small stool rather than on the bed.
Mirabel: Papa... How did you get your Gift?
Bruno: Long ago. Before you were born. Before I met your mother. Mi Madre, your Abuela, has this magic candle. It's flame would never go out. The magic of the candle had saved her in her darkest moment. A Miracle, she called it. When I turned five, Mi Hermanas and I were given our Gifts. And we used them to help others to honor the Miracle that blessed us. And years later, I met your Mama.
Mirabel: I'm turning five in a few days. Does that mean I'll get a Gift like yours?
Bruno visibly tensed when he heard those words. Both of his hands clenched. Eyes focused down on the hard wooden floor. Mirabel was confused. Why did her Papa look so upset? Maria took this as her cue to interject.
Maria: We do not know, Mira-boo. The magic candle is hidden far away. But if you do, it won't change anything. You are still a wonderful child.
Mirabel: But if I had a Gift like Papa's, I could do so much! Wouldn't that be a good thing?
Bruno:...I think it is time for you to rest, Mirabel. Tonight has been more eventful than I am comfortable with.
Maria: Ay, Bruno. Your father is right, Mirabel. We shall see what happens.
With that, Maria tucked her daughter to bed and kissed her goodnight. She removed the emerald tablet and walked out the door. Bruno followed after her, ready to close the door behind him when...
Mirabel: Papa?
Bruno: ...Si, Mirabel?
Mirabel: Are you worried my Gift will be... bad?
Bruno: ...We cannot be certain you will even get a Gift, Hija. You are far too young to be dwelling on such things. Lord knows I have too much these past few days. A Gift ain't something worth fussing over.
With that, Bruno closed the door. Mirabel laid her head on the blanket facing the candle on her nightstand. She sighed.
Mirabel: But if I had a Gift, maybe you could finally see me and not always be so far away.
She set her glasses down on the nightstand before blowing out the candle. With her back turned to the window, she didn't notice a small golden butterfly resting against the glass.
Possible Opening To Unforeseen (My version)
âApri Gli Occhi, Farfalla Mia. Open your eyes, my butterfly.â
In a dimly lit room, two figures sat on a makeshift bed. A mother and daughter sat together, the little girl in her lap on the bed.
When she did as her mother asked, both of their eyes were trained on an iridescent glowing tablet of green glass. In her glassesâ reflection shone the bright light, and in her eyes shared the same brightness as she gazed in awe at it. The image was hidden from view with the angle in which the tablet sat. Mere curiosity had caught her eye when the vague image had found it.
âWhat is it, Mama? Whereâd it come from?â
Maria moved some curls from her face and carded her hands in them, looking down at the tablet, reminiscing the memories.
âIt shows our familyâFrom the past looking into the future,â Mirabel shifted in her lap, looking up from below her motherâs jaw, interested in listening, âLong ago, your Uncle Alonzo and I found a man out in the pastures surrounding our home. Winter had started setting in early, a blizzard had swept across the territory. The man was sick and delirious with feverâand wounded. I could not leave him there⊠I would never live with myself if I did. Yet, when I reached out to help him, he reached back and showed me his Gift when we touched. He showed me our family would grow...â
Maria gently leaned forward over Mirabel and held the tablet up with both hands, then brought it into Mirabelâs own lap, looking over her shoulder down at it with her. Mirabelâs little hand grazed over the cool glass, over the three dimensional image that seemed just within reach.
It showed her Mama with a newborn infant in her arms. Maria traced the image along with Mirabel.
âSee there? He showed me I would be a mother. But the father remained unforeseen. We took him in, nursed him as best we could, and he returned our kindness by staying on the farm to help us through our struggles. Overtime, I fell in love with him, despite his troubles. And he felt the same, despite his self-reservations. He asked me to marry him after awhile, then we were wed. Some months later the prophecy he had foreseen came true. I became a mother. And he became your father.â
Mirabel seemed to be at a loss for words, bug-eyed with a slight grin. Her soon to be father in the past had seen his future daughter unknowingly. She realized he had magic: Something she had only heard about in bedtime stories and fairytales. That must mean...
âMama is Papa a witch then?â
âNo, silly, not exactly.â
Mirabel looked back and forth from the tablet to her mother in confusion.
âBut only witches could do magic, right? That means that Papa would be one!â
Ah yes, Maria couldnât help but remind herself that Mirabel was indeed her own daughter by her persistence, her intense curiosity, and deep insight. She recalled Alonzoâs grumpy mood after a short session just talking with her, but nonetheless he was still somehow patient.
âIâll just let your papa explain itâŠâ
Maria looked toward the door where sheâd told him to wait outside.
âCome in, Amore Mio.â
The door gently creaked open and in he came, long casted shadow following to presume his seven-foot frame as foretold in the fables. The lighting was very ominous it seemed.
âYour daughter wishes to know more about your Gift, my love. It is best she hears it from you.â
Maria gently takes the vision tablet and sets it aside so Mirabel can hop off her lap and dangle her feet over the side of the bed while Maria sits next to her.
With a sigh the figure moves towards them. As he drew closer, the light from the bedroom candle dispelled his dark form. What was once a seven-foot tall shadow shrunk down to reveal a 5'4 stick of a man. Close as he was, Mirabel's father kept his distance from them, his face weary and concerned. He decided to sit on a small stool near the corner rather than on the bed.
âHow, Papa?â
Bruno leans his arms on his knees and leans forward with his head to the ground.
âLong ago, before you were bornâBefore I met your mother, Mi Madre, your Abuela, had a magic candle. Its flame would never go out. The magic of the candle had saved her in her darkest momentâA Miracle, she called it. When I turned five, Mi Hermanas and I were given our Gifts. And we used them to help others to honor the Miracle that blessed us. And years later, I met your Mama.â
There was a short pause, so Mirabel decided to speak up.
ââŠI'm turning five soon. Does that mean I'll get a Gift like yours?â
Bruno froze, muscles tensing and flexing under his shirt when he heard those words. Both of his hands clenched into fists, eyes focused down on the hard wooden floor like a deer in the headlights. Mirabel was confused. Why did her Papa look so upset? Maria took this as her cue to interject and cleared her throat.
âWe do not know, Mira-boo. The magic candle is hidden far away. But if you do, it won't change anything. You are still a wonderful child. To both of us.â
Mirabel nearly jumped up on her feet on the bed.
âBut if I had a Gift like Papa's, I could do so much! Wouldn't that be a good thing?â She blurted excitedly.
Bruno furrowed his brows when he looked up at the two of them and cleared his throat, standing up.
ââŠI think⊠thatâs enough for tonight, Mirabel. Youâve had a long day and this is going on longer than Iâm comfortable with. Itâs time for bed.â
âAye, BrunoâYour father is right, Mirabel. We shall see what happens.â
With that, Maria tucked her daughter to bed and kissed her goodnight. She took the emerald tablet away and walked out the door. Bruno followed after her, ready to close the door behind him when...
âPapa?â Her little voice stopped him in his tracks and he froze again.
âWhat is it, Mira?â He looked her way with big eyes of dread.
âAre you worried my Gift will be... bad?â
He looked past her out her window where the clear view of their oak tree was illuminated by the moonlight.
â...We cannot be certain you will even get a Gift, Hija. You are far too young to be dwelling on such things. Lord knows I have been doing that too much these past few days. A Gift ain't something worth fussing over.â
Bruno resumed his steps and closed the door. Mirabel laid her head on the blanket facing the candle on her nightstand. She sighed deeply.
âBut if I had a Gift, maybe you could finally see me and not always be so far awayâŠâ she whispered.
She set her glasses down on the nightstand before blowing out the candle. With her back turned to the window, she didn't notice a small golden butterfly resting against the glass.








