or - Writing Good Character Descriptions
By now most of you have probably heard itâs a bad idea to list out all your characterâs traits at the beginning of your story. Thatâs true. Writing character descriptions like that takes the reader out of the story and - quite frankly - makes your story read like really bad, old school fanfiction.Â
Janine had ebony black hair and cerulean eyes that sparkled like moonbeams. Her most defining trait, however, was the curiously shaped scar on her left cheek.
The above is a fairly small chunk of text and perhaps a bit innocuous at first glance. But if you take the time to stop and describe every character as they enter the scene, your story gets bogged down really fast. This leads me to my first point -Â
Decide Whether You Need to Describe That Character
Not every character needs to be described in detail. Itâs enough to leave it up to the readerâs imagination when it comes to many of the secondary and tertiary characters that appear in your story.Â
Additionally, in many stories - especially short fiction - the characterâs appearance just isnât all that important. In this case you can get away with not saying anything about their appearance at all, unless thereâs something really striking about them that you want to point out for the sake of characterization.Â
Sprinkling Details into Your Text
In my example above, the really interesting detail is the scar I mentioned. Now - how do we actually get that into the text? Well, itâs up to you as the reader to find a reason to mention it.Â
âWhatâs a shame?â asked Janine, but I could tell she was already bracing herself for the inevitable.
âThat scar on your cheek. Youâre such a pretty girl.â The woman tutted. âWhat happened, if you donât mind me asking?â
Janine gave the woman a tight smile. âWerewolf attack,â she said - her usual reply. It was the was the same answer sheâd given me when Iâd dared to ask. That, and âfighting off a zombie hordeâ and âsword fightâ and a dozen other iterations of âI donât want to talk about it,â until Iâd finally gotten the hint and dropped the subject.Â
Comparisons and Contrasts Between Characters
Casually drawing comparisons between characters, especially in the beginning of a story, is a good way to relay a lot of information regarding description quickly and efficiently. It works especially well if youâre in the middle of discussing relationships because it can serve to highlight just how similar - or different - your characters are. Comparing/Contrasting characters does work best when thereâs a close established relationship between characters though - brothers, best friends, etc.
- It was hard to tell Julie and Casey apart at first. Only a couple of years apart, theyâd both inherited their motherâs blonde hair and their fatherâs infectious smile. But when you spent a little time around them, you started to see the differences.
- Andrew was used to being ignored when Titus was around. His friendâs dark skin tended to draw more than a little attention. It wasnât just that, though. Titus towered over him - over almost everyone he met, in fact.Â
Using Appearance to Mark a Character
This can be a do or a donât, for some of the same points Iâve already mentioned. First and foremost, it can be kind of obvious that youâre hammering in character description unless the detail youâre pointing out is really striking. Hair color is the go-to for this sort of thing, but honestly - itâs overdone. Unless your character has bubblegum pink hair or something else that really stands out you might want to hang on to your descriptors and find a better place to insert them into the text.
Additionally - remember that itâs easy to be insensitive or just plain racist/ableist/etc. when you use appearance to mark a character. Always think twice before making your characterâs defining trait re: appearance âheâs fatâ or âsheâs Asian.â
Iâll say this once: no mirrors. Do not have your character look into a mirror and describe themselves.Â
Now. If you really find it necessary to describe a POV characterâs appearance, how DO you do it? Well, there are the points above, which still work - dropping in descriptors as they become relevant, or a character comparing herself to someone else. But you get the added benefit of the character being able to quickly relay their thoughts and feelings about themselves to the reader in first person POV.Â
Example: It would be easy for me to say âI hate my body,â but I donât. I love it. I love every inch and every curve that God gave me. Some people canât deal with that - a fat girl whoâs proud of the way she looks. Thatâs fine. I just donât deal with those people.Â
âŚand there you have it. Thatâs not everything of course, but itâs a quick starter guide to help you begin inserting descriptions more naturally into your story. If youâve got any questions, feel free to leave them in my inbox or as a comment on this post and Iâll get back to you if I can.Â