Are These Filter Words Weakening Your Story?
After putting my writing on hold for several weeks, I decided to jump back in. I expected to find all sorts of problems with my storyâinconsistencies in the plot, lack of transitions, poor characterizationâthe works. But what began to stick out to me was something to which Iâd given little thought in writing.
Filter words.
What are Filter Words?
Actually, I didnât even know these insidious creatures had a name until I started combing the internet for info.
Filter words are those that unnecessarily filter the readerâs experience through a characterâs point of view. Dark Angelâs Blog says:
âFilteringâ is when you place a character between the detail you want to present and the reader. The term was started by Janet Burroway in her book On Writing.
In terms of example, you should watch out for:
To see
To hear
To think
To touch
To wonder
To realize
To watch
To look
To seem
To feel (or feel like)
Can
To decide
To sound (or sound like)
To know
Iâm being honest when I say my manuscript is filled with these words, and the majority of them need to be edited out.
What do Filter Words Look Like?
Letâs imagine a character in your novel is walking down a street during peak hour.
You might, for example, write:
Sarah felt a sinking feeling as she realized sheâd forgotten her purse back at the cafe across the street. She saw cars filing past, their bumpers end-to-end. She heard the impatient honk of horns and wondered how she could quickly cross the busy road before someone took off with her bag. But the traffic seemed impenetrable, and she decided to run to the intersection at the end of the block.
Eliminating the bolded words removes the filters that distances us, the readers, from this characterâs experience:
Sarahâs stomach sank. Her purseâsheâd forgotten it back at the cafe across the street. Cars filed past, their bumpers end-to-end. Horns honked impatiently. Could she make it across the road before someone took off with her bag? She ran past the impenetrable stream of traffic, toward the intersection at the end of the block.
Are Filter Words Ever Acceptable?
Of course, there are usually exceptions to every rule.
Just because filter words tend to be weak doesnât mean they never have a place in our writing. Sometimes they are helpful and even necessary.
Susan Dennard of Let The Words Flow writes that we should use filter words when they are critical to the meaning of the sentence.
If thereâs no better way to phrase something than to use a filter word, then itâs probably okay to do so.
Want to know more?
Read these other helpful articles on filter words and more great writing tips:
Filter Words and Distancing Point of View
The Reasons Editors reject Manuscripts
Filter Those words and Strengthen Your Writing
