Welp.

Ignoring the complexities and well-established enmeshment of fascism in Western culture for the sake of simpler stories to inspire rising to this moment in history only builds fair-weather fighters ill-prepared for the rigors of revolutionary action. It also widens the rift between those newly awakened to the struggle and their neighbors that have lived it for generations (and have built and maintained systems of community support and resistance that have protected them for just as long).

okay. so. this is going to feel a little bit like a call-out, but in a “i have done this and will probably do it again” way, not a “you specifically are the problem” way.

because.....:

most writers don’t under-describe.

they don’t.

they over-describe, just… not the parts that actually matter.

and that’s where everything starts to feel off in a way that’s hard to explain but very easy to feel.

like you read a paragraph and go:

“this is technically fine. why am i bored.”

let me show you the pattern.

you will spend:

5 lines describing the curtains

3 lines describing the exact shade of the wallpaper

2 lines describing the way light hits the floorboards

and then when your character is:

about to lie

about to confess something

about to make a decision that will literally alter the trajectory of the story

you give it:

“she hesitated.”

and then you MOVE ON??

be serious for a second.

this is what i mean when i say you’re over-describing the wrong things.

it’s not that description is bad. i love description. i want to eat description. i want to live inside it.

but description has a job.

and its job is not “make the scene look pretty.”

its job is:

direct the reader’s attention to what matters emotionally.

so if you are describing something in detail, i need you to ask:

“why this. why right now.”

because if the answer is:

“i pictured it really clearly in my head”

i regret to inform you that your reader does not care. gently. respectfully. they do not care.

they care about:

what your character wants

what is getting in the way

what this moment means

everything else is background noise unless you make it matter.

here’s where it gets a little uncomfortable:

you are probably avoiding describing the things that feel harder to articulate.

like:

the exact shape of someone’s hesitation

the difference between anger and hurt in a single line of dialogue

the way attraction feels when it’s inconvenient

the moment a character realizes something they don’t want to know

that’s the stuff you skim past.

because it’s messy. and specific. and requires you to make choices.

so instead, you describe the room.

because the room is safe.

the room will not expose you.

the room will not force you to decide what your character is actually feeling.

and i get it. i really do.

but also: that’s why your scenes feel flat.

not because nothing is happening.

but because the important thing is happening off-screen.

let’s fix it. practically. no vague advice. i don’t do vague advice.

next time you’re writing a scene, do this:

pick one moment where something shifts.

not physically. emotionally.

a realization. a decision. a change in power. a crack in composure.

and then instead of writing:

“she hesitated”

you stay there.

you stretch it.

you get uncomfortably specific.

what kind of hesitation?

is it:

the kind where she already knows the answer and is stalling

the kind where she’s hoping someone interrupts

the kind where saying it out loud will make it real

what does it feel like in her body?

what does she notice in the room because she’s hesitating?

(see how now the description has a job. it’s not random anymore. yay)

this is the shift:

description should orbit emotion.

not replace it.

not distract from it.

not hide it.

orbit it.

another thing. and i’m going to say this very gently because i know how attached we get to our sentences:

if you can cut a description and nothing changes about how the reader understands the scene?

it was never doing anything.

it was just sitting there. looking pretty. contributing nothing to the emotional experience.

and we do not keep freeloaders in this house.

this doesn’t mean your writing has to be minimal.

it means your writing has to be intentional.

you can describe everything if you want.

but then everything you describe needs to be pulling weight.

it needs to be revealing character, or building tension, or reinforcing mood in a way that actually connects to what’s happening internally.

otherwise it’s just… decorative.

and decoration is not story.

so next time you feel like your scene is “missing something”

before you add more description

ask yourself:

am i avoiding the part that actually matters?

and then go write that part.

even if it’s harder.

especially if it’s harder.

anyway. that’s your gentle (not gentle) reminder for today.

go make your characters feel things on the page instead of hiding behind the wallpaper.

i’m watching you.

(in a supportive way. mostly.)

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