#sekah

Canon Plausibility

Definition: How well the plot and characters aligned with the original story universe.

Score: 4.50/5.00

A high score for this element indicates that the story blended into the original universe well. This includes the characters being portrayed as they originally were, and that the plot and/or any original characters aligned with the sense of the universe as well.

Reviewer comments: The author used a noncanon pairing, but adequately utilized the characters' personalities to react to the situation. Kurama isn't portrayed this way in the series, but it's not unimaginable by any stretch. Well done.

Relationships

Definition: Platonic and romantic interaction and development between characters interspersed over time.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the presentation of the interactions between characters created realistic and meaningful relationships that allowed the readers to connect with and understand the characters.

Reviewer comments: Yomi's perspective was very well-explained and his interpretation of Kurama's motivation was very key in understanding their actions.

Plot and Technical Execution

Definition: Interrelated content sequenced in the storyline, including subplots, presented in a grammatically accurate manner.

Score: 4.88/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the readers did not have a hard time following along with the storyline and that major situations were addressed logically. Additionally, there were likely few or no grammatical errors.

Reviewer comments: There was only one typo in the story and the plot advanced the relationship.

Conflict

Definition: Internal or external struggle presented throughout the storyline, eventually reaching resolution.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates a balance of presented conflict. The characters have taken a stance in a situation or addressed a pressing internal struggle. This has allowed for character development and reader interest.

Reviewer comments: The author used Yomi's internal struggle over his desires and pride as the entire premise, which was utilized well.

Originality

Definition: Uniqueness of the presented plot as relevant to the fandom.

Score: 4.50/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that enough unique content was presented, sparking readers' interest.

Reviewer comments: Nothing to expand on.

Dialogue

Definition: Quality and quantity of the conversation had throughout the storyline, including verbal and nonverbal communication.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that there was an effective balance in quantity and/or quality of verbal and nonverbal dialogue. The dialogue was well-utilized in furthering character or story development.

Reviewer comments: The few verbal exchanges between the characters were poignant and the tactful use of nonverbal communication that Yomi interpreted in his thoughts was fantastic.

Pacing

Definition: Appropriateness of the speed of the presented storyline.

Score: 4.67/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the pacing was appropriate for the storyline and that the readers were able to meaningfully experience the story without losing interest or being confused.

Reviewer comments: It was a short story, but it was still well-balanced in its pacing.

Front Matter

Definition: Appropriateness and instilled intrigue of the categorized preview information and summary.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the front matter was accurate and enticing. This may range from a well-constructed summary to appropriate categorizations for the rating or genres.

Reviewer comments: Nothing to expand on.

Additional Comments

Overall, what could the author improve most to make the story better?

Nothing.

Overall, what did the author excel at that really made the story for you?

The premise for the behaviors and reactions were logically based and explained in the story. This was key and really made the story believable. And the seduction/use of details in showing how Yomi sees was fantastic.

What was your favorite moment in the story? Were there any particularly funny or surprising moments?