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Canon Plausibility

Definition: How well the plot and characters aligned with the original story universe.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score for this element indicates that the story blended into the original universe well. This includes the characters being portrayed as they originally were, and that the plot and/or any original characters aligned with the sense of the universe as well.

Reviewer comments: The level of world building done in this has been phenomenal so far. The inclusion of illusions and their world is enmeshed so securely, like it has been there the whole time. Characters were also greatly portrayed as canon. Fabulously done.

Relationships

Definition: Platonic and romantic interaction and development between characters interspersed over time.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the presentation of the interactions between characters created realistic and meaningful relationships that allowed the readers to connect with and understand the characters.

Reviewer comments: I can’t rate romance yet because we haven’t touched on it much, but interactions between characters has been fun and understandable as things have been revealed. I adore the interactions between the illusions most of all. They’re all well-developed and enrich the story beautifully.

Plot and Technical Execution

Definition: Interrelated content sequenced in the storyline, including subplots, presented in a grammatically accurate manner.

Score: 4.75/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the readers did not have a hard time following along with the storyline and that major situations were addressed logically. Additionally, there were likely few or no grammatical errors.

Reviewer comments: There were very minor typos in the story, but few for over 75k words. Otherwise, the plot was very logical, but also very unique. As the story is still in progress, I’m very excited to see what happens.

Conflict

Definition: Internal or external struggle presented throughout the storyline, eventually reaching resolution.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates a balance of presented conflict. The characters have taken a stance in a situation or addressed a pressing internal struggle. This has allowed for character development and reader interest.

Reviewer comments: Since the story is ongoing, I cannot rate resolution in its entirety, but what has been done so far has been addressed more than sufficiently. The conflict throughout really made me want to keep reading and was exceptionally intriguing overall.

Originality

Definition: Uniqueness of the presented plot as relevant to the fandom.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that enough unique content was presented, sparking readers’ interest.

Reviewer comments: The uniqueness of the story and world that was presented is my favorite part of this. I’m been pleasantly surprised by the vastness of the illusions and how they’re a very different kind of being than demons, humans, and spirits. Their names are also really fun to understand and were well-utilized.

Dialogue

Definition: Quality and quantity of the conversation had throughout the storyline, including verbal and nonverbal communication.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that there was an effective balance in quantity and/or quality of verbal and nonverbal dialogue. The dialogue was well-utilized in furthering character or story development.

Reviewer comments: I greatly enjoyed the author’s take on dialogue with mind readers. The moments readers are seeing a character’s omniscient thoughts that are then addressed by a mind reader in the dialogue are handled so smoothly.

Pacing

Definition: Appropriateness of the speed of the presented storyline.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the pacing was appropriate for the storyline and that the readers were able to meaningfully experience the story without losing interest or being confused.

Reviewer comments: So far, I haven’t felt as though any scene has been rushed, which is rare. I’m definitely hungry for more, but satiated with the writing details as they’ve been handled thus far.

Front Matter

Definition: Appropriateness and instilled intrigue of the categorized preview information and summary.

Score: 5.00/5.00

A high score on this element indicates that the front matter was accurate and enticing. This may range from a well-constructed summary to appropriate categorizations for the rating or genres.

Reviewer comments: No comments.

Additional Comments

Overall, what could the author improve most to make the story better?

I’m not sure much could be improved, but I’m dying to know more about what will happen with Jadde and the illusions. I’m happy to re-review this once the story is finished as well.

Overall, what did the author excel at that really made the story for you?

World building has been handled SO well that I’m really impressed. I love being able to see these guys as canon with how well they’ve been woven into the story.

What was your favorite moment in the story? Were there any particularly funny or surprising moments?