the life and times of a small town suburbanite

..cue nail biting and hyperventilating...

#homeschoolproblems

you have a mild panic attack

of course they word it as 'it just sounds like your talking to someone. you should be more formal'

which translates to.. 'it sounds really immature and if i was the admissions officer i would not offer you a place at my school'

so it's back to the drawing board. trying your hardest to sound 'formal' which just means using a lot of big words and not very many contractions. because if your wearing a top hat then you obviously would not use the word wouldn't

then the proofing source gets it back for critique number two and tells you you need more detail.

cue frusteration and nail biting...

so you sit back down and read over the comments they have added to your paper and take another shot at it..and as you read through it you realize you sound boring and completely unremarkable

cue very large panic attack..i mean i'm talking breathing-into-a-paper-bag-shaking-mess-of-tears panic attack

people always say be unique, show your personality, don't let them forget you.

Although I'm probably not very good at that either so...