#week5day2

::flicks back:: Wally Green? That’s an okay name, old man I guess, short for Wallace... no brain not Wallace from W&G :wheeze: and he’s trying to return something at the shop?????!?!??!?!?! That’s pretty annoying but boring.

Okay so I’m usually (particularly in editing) good at not putting in the emotion name so whilst that’s the idea I’m going to ramp up the sensory stuff a little more than usual so might be full of duds, but one can only try.

Uhhhh I was going to go with fear but since that is my permanent state of being it’s very easy to write for me - to easy everyone worried at all times. Going to make life miserable for myself. 

“What can I do you for?” Her chirpiness grated on the inside of his head forcing him to close his eyes to steady himself. Wallace placed the supermarket bag on the counter with great care - conscious he didn’t have the right bag for a store like this, he’d probably used it unknowingly for [x] waste.

[x]

“I’d like to return this.” [her confusion about the cardigan] “The tag’s still on it.”

“Do you have the receipt?”

“No. It was a gift.”

“A gift receipt would be okay?” Questions, questions, why were kids these days always asking questions when they weren’t needed? [X] never did that.

“I must have thrown it out...” He cursed himself again for admitting he’d thrown anything away, but he swallowed it back down. 

It had been in her winter wardrobe only for a week it must have been, but the combination of those lavender fresheners and that perfume that smelled of spring had rubbed off completely. His heart rose when he found it, the tears flowing freely for the first time, their son even leaving the room to make tea to give him the space, but burying in his face in it in thanks just brought her cruelly into the room, the kettle’s whistle [xxx]

SIGH I CAN’T  DO THE SENSES and write a scene at the same time they are two different parts of my brain at the moment

I even dialogue dumped ready to insert stuff later just to frame out the scene.

This was an interesting idea though - I did backspace a little when I was getting a little too close to stating outright what had happened. ALSO didn’t use the word (and didn’t think to use the word) numb haha.