For end of year writing ask: What’s your favourite piece of description or narration?
thanks for asking! hard to reply although, description and narration aren’t my forte - I just sprinkle dialogue everywhere
It’s totally plot-spoilery, but the end of Gothy of the Cemetery, when the fairy tale style tries to conveys what happened and it gets lost in the way
Less spoilery, the factory scene of The Providence of Eric Bittle. Lots of researches here to try to describe the place as well as I could, and here is the beginning of the scene:
Eric and Shitty decided to check the factory first. Mr Bickerstaff had talked about wanting an article on the developing textile industry of the city, on all the factories growing and growing along the canal – so the following day, he was quick to agree with Eric’s proposal on visiting one, and Eric went immediately to the telegram office to send a demand to the director of the Zimmermann factory to come visit as soon as possible. The reply came during his lunch break; he was welcome the following morning to talk with the foreman and the director, but there would be no questions about the Jack Zimmermann situation, only about the factory.
That was good enough for Eric, who was just going to be here to look candid and divert the attention. He sent a telegram immediately to Shitty; all was going according to plan.
Apparently, as Jack’s friend and lawyer, Shitty knew the foreman and especially the director, and after the incident neither of them let him have access to Bob and Jack’s office in the factory, as there were sensitive documents in there. They didn’t have a key to access said office, but Shitty and his boss had been given one a few months back. The plan was for him to enter alongside Eric in the factory, slip away before Eric met with the director and the foreman, and for him to go to the office while Eric was interviewing them. He just needed to check if someone had gone to the office – which would have meant that Jack was alive and free to move, and he would probably have left a note too, because he knew that it was a place only Shitty could access.
Eric dared to hope the plan would work without any problem, because he for sure didn’t know what he was risking if they got caught in the middle of this stunt.
This morning, he was anxious when he went out of his apartment, he still saluted Mister Jacob in the stairs, who was coming back from the market, and Miss Elizabeth, still at her window. He walked all the way to Market Place, as usual, but instead of going in the building where the newspaper office was, he stopped at one of the stands to buy an apple to eat on the way, and he continued to walk North, along the canal. The factory was one of the numerous buildings that got built in the past years near the water; most of them were making textiles and clothes.
Honestly, in the fresh weather of October, Eric was regretting not stopping a carriage in town to bring him here. The factory was the textile factory the farthest North of all textile factories of Providence! It may have been only a difference of a few yards with the other textile factories, but truly, Eric didn’t care. He was not built for such cold temperatures! Ah, how will he be able to survive winter? His place was small enough that his bed was already basically in the fireplace, but he couldn’t carry a small fire with him at all times now, could he?