#edit mode

The bracelets. I really didn’t think it was that big of a deal, they are mentioned maybe three times in the entire book. Every single reader commented on the bracelets several times and I’ve just decided that particular plot point is more trouble than it’s worth.

Helene. There’s a chance I can rework some things to include her in a way that makes a little more sense. No one really seemed as excited about her existence as me, so if I have to save her for TFE, I will.

Apparently some of my favorite dialogue is “too friendly” for people who have just met. I don’t know if the overall sarcasm that my characters have is just not obvious enough or what. But I guess it has to go.

Hettie and Oliver are tied for least amount of POV chapters, which is also a bit of a problem. The story in TTW is Hettie’s (and Adrin’s). Fortunately, a prescription of More Hettie is just what I need.

Part of Fable Town’s actual intro vs my edit.