production letter from bob justman on joanna, later called the way to eden, dated september 5, 1967 at auction. I found it difficult to read and tried to clean it up a little, but here's a transcript from what I can see.
I think there is a good premise contained within these few pages.
I think there are some areas opened up, however, that will need careful examination. I think it is well worth getting this property into work. It seems to have certain dramatic elements that would be useful in a "STAR TREK" and also it would appear that it would turn out to be an eminently suitable vehicle for displaying the talents of DeForest Kelley.
Areas to be discussed are:
Why does our "usually amiable Doctor" turn into a "fiercely protective father" when he sees that Kirk and Joanna are drawn to each other? Does he know that Captain Kirk is a libertine, or does he have the knowledge (due to the fact that he is the Ranking Physician on board) that Captain Kirk has contracted an incurable social disease? On the other hand, if Dr. McCoy has subconsciously repressed desire for his own daughter, we may be opening up a can of poss that would take some pretty delicate writing to handle.
Another area that will seriously need examination is the area of Joanna's anger against her father. I agree. Where has Dr. McCoy been all her life?
This premise should develop into a fine story. That fine story should be developed into a superior teleplay. It's going to take a lot of hard work and a lot of soul-searching for Dorothy to bring it to fruition. But I think it's worth the effort.
a page of the story outline for joanna, later called the way to eden, dated august 27, 1968 at auction, though this particular page is dated september 5, 1968.
LT. UHURA has picked up a distress call from a small planet where a tiny group of travellers has been stranded. Coordinates are locked on; and the bunch of six is beamed up to where KIRK, SPOCK, and MCCOY are waiting in the Transporter Room. The group materializing is bizarre -- 23rd Century Flower Children. Their dress, hairstyle, everything about them is totally removed from the orderliness of our Star Fleet personnel -- and in a way, almost alien. The lovely young girl to one side of the group (could be played by someone like Bobbi Gentry or Nancy Sinatra) looks over the three Enterprise officers, smiles cheerfully, and advances toward McCoy. "Hi, Dad," she says.
Spock asks cautiously if that is not an archaic slang greeting. McCoy replies tartly it is not. "This is my daughter -- Joanna."
The leader of this small band is a young man named SEVRIN. All are members of that lonely coordinated Earth group called "The Artists". (One of them could be Tiny Tim.) An outgrowth and projection of today's hippy/flower child philosophy, these young people are (at least vocally) devoted to peace and brotherhood and pursuit of art forms, the expression of which is as beyond STAR TREK's level as today's hip art is beyond ours. (NOTE: they are not dirty, no drugs or hallucinogenics, no mention of "hippies" will be made in reference to
