#twstnovel2

Chapter 13

Added to EN: "Ruggie said and slapped him on the back triumphantly."

(Ruggie has never been physically friendly with Leona in this way in the novels)

Removed from EN: "It seems that no one knew the former champion was to appear in the exhibition match."

Removed from EN: "Ruggie and Jack, too, move swiftly in response to Leona's glances."

Removed from EN: "Even in Leona's battered state, no one hesitates to obey him."

Original Novel: "It is hard to imagine that he has ever had time for merely watching sports, what with his strict schedule, back home."

EN Novel: "Maybe he'd watched Spelldrive on TV when he was younger…"

Original Novel: "Looking up into the spectator seats..."

EN Novel: "...as they looked up at their friends."

Original Novel: "'Easy for you to say.'"

EN Novel: "'You said it!'"

Original Novel: "Surely this is not a confrontation. It is the refreshing joy that is unique to playing a sport fair and square."

Chapter 12 (pt3)

Original Novel: "Really…?" Grim narrows his eyes. Behind him, Leona, Ruggie, Jack, and even Riddle are glaring at the headmage. 'Yes, absolutely. After all, it's the match that will open the event..."

EN Novel: "'Really?' Grim said suspiciously. 'B-but of course.' Crowley bobbed his head up and down. 'This game would launch the tournament...'"

Original Novel: "The thought that Deuce is being sincere makes Yuuya happy. If Ace is being sincere, all Yuuya can do is laugh, because it is so much like the two of them. Sincere or not, their reasoning does not matter much to Yuuya. What matter is that they are offering their help, and Grim is going to be able to join the tournament. There is nothing that could make Yuuya happier than the the members of the group that is always together being able to play together as well. Watching Ace and Deuce chat soexcitedly with Grim makes Yuuya’s heart feel light. He hopes, from the bottom of his heart, that the match will be fun not just for Grim, but for the two of them as well."

EN Novel: "Yuya was glad, whatever their motivations, that Ace and Deuce wanted to help Grim so he could play in the tournament. Yuya knew Ace and Deuce were also dying to play, and he couldn't think of anything better than all his friends taking to the field together. As Ace and Deuce talked excitedly with Grim, Yuya felt his own spirits lift. A swell of gratitude rose from the bottom of his heart to have such wonderful friends."

Original Novel: "He hates competing against other teams--other people."

EN Novel: "He hated competition, which was too much like fighting."

Across the manga, anime and novels, Crowley never refers to the prefect as anything except "Yuu-kun." The English-language adaptations can vary, however, with Crowley once saying "Ms. Hirasaka" during the Savanaclaw manga arc, and saying "Yuya" once in the Savanaclaw novel.

Added to the EN Novel: "Ace said, throwing an arm around his shoulder."

(Canonically, Ace has never had such familiar physical contact with Yuuya.)

Original Novel: "Now it is Yuuya who is on the receiving end of disapproving stares. He tries to push back, but he is outnumbered, and in the end finds himself having been made a member of the team."

EN Novel: "They needed him, and so he agreed to be the seventh member of the team."

Chapter 12 (pt2)

Original Novel: "Leona towers over Ruggie, but Ruggie glowers at him all the same. Ruggie lifts his head, exposing a prominent bruise upon his throat. I haven't forgiven you, you know.'"

EN Novel: "Ruggie glared at Leona. 'Don't think you've earned my forgiveness,' he said."

Original Novel: "'A stone?' Yuuya looks around. 'No, I haven't seen one.' Perhaps it is something that the headmage dropped somewhere. Yuuya asks if they ought look for it, but the headmage waves him off with, 'In that case it's no matter,' and walks away."

EN Novel: ""A black stone?' Yuya asked, looking around. 'No, I don't see anything.' Yuya asked if they should look for it, but Crowley shrugged casually. 'If you haven't spotted it, that's fine,' he replied as he walked off."

Original Novel: "Leona walks at a slower pace, bringing up the rear. Yuuya does not intend to speak with him; he simply worries that Leona may collapse at any moment."

EN Novel: "As they walked back to the coliseum, Yuya peered at Leona trailing behind them, worried that he might actually collapse."

Original Novel: "Ruggie follows with a self-deprecating, 'I've gotten soft,' acting as the more adult of the two."

EN Novel: "'I should've known better, too,' Ruggie said quietly, and then he laughed at the sulking Leona."

Original Novel: "Leona may understand, but he will not force it."

EN Novel: "Leona understood."

Original Novel: "They are both still frightening, but if he does not speak now, he will never be able to face Jack again."

EN Novel: "Even though they scared him, he knew he had to speak."

Original Novel: "Jack covers Yuuya's mouth. He is strong and his voice is rough but, strangely, Yuuya is not afraid."

EN Novel: "...Jack said, and slapped a hand over Yuya's mouth. Jack was upset, but Yuya was strangely unafraid."

Subject confusion on EN:

Original Novel: "Yuuya must look quite pitiful; Riddle glances at him with slight surprise. Then, he seizes the Headmage with a cold stare."

EN Novel: "Riddle looked disappointed and surprised, too. With exasperation, he said..."

Original Novel: "Realizing that this is not just someone else's problem, Leona and the others also give the Headmage stern looks."

Chapter 11

Original Novel: "If something is far away enough, you cannot long for it." EN Novel: "I didn't have to fret and stew without my brother around."

Chapter 12 (pt1)

Original Novel: "Jack grimaces at the thought of how that must have felt for Leona."

EN Novel: "How'd you like it if someone did that to you?"

Added to EN Novel: "The headmage told them that the school had decided to go forward with the tournament as planned. They wouldn't cancel it because of what happened."

Original Novel: "The injured people, the uproar of the procession, Leona's overblot."

EN Novel: "...numerous people had been injured, property had been destroyed, and the event had been marred by the parade stampede and Leona's overblot."

Original Novel: "Out of everything, the thing that concerns Yuuya the most is Jack. While it did turn into a confrontation with his own dorm, for more than a few reasons he seemed to have been looking forward to the spelldrive tournament more than anyone. Yuuya remembers how Jack's eyes had sparkled while he described Leona's prowess on the field. The tournament will proceed properly, just as he had hoped. But Yuuya feels terrible that Jack himself is not to be a part of it, despite all his anguish and hard work."

EN Novel: "At this point, Jack's situation bothered Yuya most of all. He'd fought against Leona and his Savanaclaw dormmates, and his help had been essential to stop their underhanded tricks. It didn't seem like he deserved the same punishment as his dorm-to be expelled from the Spelldrive tournament. In fact, no one had been more excited than him to be in the tournament, and Yuya was sad that Jack couldn't be part of it, after he had struggled so much and worked so hard to prevent Leona's cheating."

Original Novel: "Cater is on a broom, and headed straight for them. Behind him there are others coming into sight as well, with Trey in the lead. The shadowy figures grow larger as they approach. And it seems that Trey has yet to fully recover from his injury..."

EN Novel: "Cater was riding a broom toward them with several other people on brooms trailing behind. Cater landed first. Next was Trey Clover, who winced when he hit the ground. His injured leg was clearly not completely healed."

Original Novel: "And next to them is the Pomefiore student with whom Yuuya spoke about his incident."

Game-Prefect can say, “Let’s go interview the next victim" or “Thank you,” aligning with Yuuya, though Yuuya thanks Vil at Pomefiore instead of the victim in the nurse’s office.

Game-Prefect can say, “How is this any different from being beaten up?,” similar to Yuuya’s response of deciding the game is “straight-up bullying,” but while Game-Prefect’s other choice is “Enough already. Stop this!,” Yuuya declares that he will be going for help.

Game-Prefect can tell Jamil that they are inspecting the school cafeteria’s kitchen for safety or that they are going to him at the Headmage’s behest.

Yuuya does not say anything in the novel, with Cater telling Jamil they are working at request of the Headmage, instead.

Game-Prefect has the option of asking Jamil if he became dizzy or sleepy while he was cooking.

Yuuya does not ask either question in the novel. Instead, Riddle comments that Jamil must have gotten careless and asks if he was tired from spelldrive tournament preparations.

Game-Prefect can declare that the culprit is Ruggie or say, “The culprit is one of us!,” but in the novel it is Grim who says that their culprit is Ruggie, not Yuuya.

Game-Prefect can call Ruggie a coward or say that he is acting cowardly, neither of which Yuuya says.

Riddle calls Ruggie a coward in the novel, instead.

While Game-Prefect can tell Jack, “If you truly want to stop them, work with us” or “The most successful wolves hunt in packs,” Yuuya apologizes for his phrasing and gives the example of himself and Grim being at a loss until they received help from others, encouraging Jack to think of their situation as an alliance.

Game-Prefect has the option of asking Leona “Have you learned nothing from all this?” or “That doesn’t sound like remorse to me.”

A similar line is said by Jack in the novel (“You still haven’t learned your lesson?”), not by Yuuya.

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The majority of the Game-Prefects dialogue options (over 70 in Book 2) were not reflected in the novel, and those that were have all been collected here:

Chapter 10 (pt3)

Original Novel: "Leona knows exactly how to humiliate an opponent."

EN Novel: "Leona enjoyed humiliating his opponents…"

Original Novel: "'I shall watch him. You all evacuate now and take the other injured with you.'"

EN Novel: "'I shall watch him,' Lilia said. 'You boys go and evacuate those wounded in the stampede while we still can.'"

(Lilia is actually ordering them to help the Savanaclaw students wounded by Leona, not by the stampede.)

Original Novel: "Damn it…this!' He clawed at the collar, trying to tear it off, but it does not budge. It is far too powerful a spell for that. It is the crystallization of Riddle's effort, of the relentless training that he has undergone since childhood."

EN Novel: "Leona writhed and twisted like a caged animal. "How dare you—!" he howled as he tore at his throat to try to remove the collar, but it didn't budge. The spell, once successfully cast, was too powerful."

Original Novel: "Yuuya remembers what Riddle said when they were discussing Malleus: a good housewarden. A respected housewarden. Riddle has always longed to know more. 'I envied you, for how the students admire you.'"

EN Novel: "Yuya recalled what Riddle had said about Malleus. How he was a good, respected housewarden who inspired admiration and devotion. Riddle wanted to learn how to do the same, and apparently he regarded Leona that way, too."

Original Novel: "His voice is trembling. The winds are strong and his words are intermittent, but there is no doubting what he has said. Who could have realized just how deep Riddle's regret goes? Ace, Deuce, obviously Yuuya, and even the clever Cater certainly had no idea."

EN Novel: "Riddle's voice trembled. Yuya didn't realize Riddle could be filled with such regret. He hid it from everyone, even friends like Ace, Deuce, and Cater."

Original Novel: "It is what Riddle has wished for: what he wants to learn from Malleus, and to gain for himself."

EN Novel: "Yuya saw in their eyes what Riddle had said he wished to learn from Malleus, and now Leona."

Original Novel: "Riddle narrows his eyes, but makes no attempt to stop him."

EN Novel: "Riddle narrowed his eyes in concern but didn't stop him."

Chapter 10 (pt2)

Much like the EN game Leona had "hated" removed from his dialogue in a scene leading up to his overblot.

Later in the novel the same word in the same context was translated accurately.

Removed from EN: "One person's hands are nothing but skin and bone..."

Original Novel: "The sand dances through the air as though to protect him, with the very sandstorm itself that was raging around Yuuya and the others just moments ago now waiting, subdued, at Leona's side…"

EN Novel: "Then the raging sandstorm danced around them as if protecting them and curled up quietly at their feet."

(The English-language translation sounds as if the sand was protecting the group of Yuuya and the others when it was actually attacking them, protecting Leona himself.)

Original Novel: "A magic that turns things into sand. That is how Leona explains his unique magic. Indeed, the air around them is bone dry, making it hard to even breathe. Plants and soil, to say nothing of the moisture in the air--it seems to have all turned to sand. 'Magic like this exists?' Yuuya coughs."

EN Novel: "A spell that changed the world to sand. Indeed, the air was so dry, it was hard to breathe. Leona's spell sucked moisture even from the air itself. 'How can magic like this exist?' Yuya murmured."

Removed from EN: "It must be magic he rarely ever uses."

Original Novel: "Riddle and Silver shout 'Stop!,' but the sandstorm prevents anyone from getting close enough to intervene."

EN Novel: "Riddle and Silver shouted at Leona to stop, but a storm of sand attacked anyone who tried to wrest his staff from him."

Original Novel: "Yuuya shouted hoarsely, trying to stop Leona. Ace and Deuce turned toward him with shocked expressions, but his fear had burst loose--he couldn't stay still."

EN Novel: "His throat was dry, but the terror that had held him back had broken. He stepped toward Leona, determined to do something to stop him..."

Original Novel: "The wolf has white-silver ears tipped with black, and dependable, gleaming golden eyes. Both are unmistakably Jack's colors. There is no doubt about it--the wolf is Jack. The sight of a beastman transforming into a wolf was no illusion after all. Like Yuuya and the others, Leona seemed to be seeing this magic for the first time as well. Before the shock in Leona's widened eyes can give way to composure, Jack-now a wolf-lets out a low growl and lunges for him. Leona twists aside to evade the attack, but he fails to hide his hesitation."

Chapter 10 (pt1)

Original Novel: "Ruggie wears a smug smile, as though having reached his goal at long last. If one did not know what it is that he's done, a look of such genuine pleasure would be refreshing. 'Just like Leona-san's said, it's too late. Those Diasomnia losers must be wrecked by now!'"

EN Novel: "Ruggie said, smiling smugly. 'Leona's right. You're too late. Those Diasomnia guys are pancakes by now.'"

A description of Leona's housewarden staff had a reference to its beads removed from En, and the section itself was relocated to the beginning of the chapter when originally it did not appear in the story until Leona first accuses Jack of being a traitor.

Original Novel: "Ace and Deuce bite their lips and mutter about Leona's mockery. There they'd been, on high alert, and yet they had done nothing to prevent that horrible panic. They regret it extremely--as does Yuuya."

EN Novel: "Ace and Deuce bit their lips in frustration. 'Who's he callin' an idiot?' Ace grumbled, narrowing his eyes at the lion boy. Yuya knew exactly how his friends felt."

Removed from EN: "Ruggie's expression is hidden from Yuuya by the angle of Lilia's head, but with the sudden trembling of his voice, it is easy enough to imagine."

In the original novel (and game/manga/anime) Deuce consistently refers to his upperclassmen as last-name-senpai. This was localized in the EN novels as Deuce referring to all older students just by their last names alone, except in Chapter 10 where he refers to Cater by his first name, instead.

Sebek saying "humans" was written in the English-language novel as "people," instead.

Removed from EN: "While he does appear troubled, there is no hesitation in his stare."

Much like the English-language adaptation to the game, several characters had the word "boss" added to their dialogue when referring to Leona, despite not ever saying it.

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