#tempels sonnet

I climb the oak and hide from all For here I think not one will seek, Yet as I weigh my futures bleak She offers me her hand so small.

I keep on blinking both my eyes; She giggles at my disbelief, And when I blurt out hows and whys She offers me her hand so small.

Upon the pitfall of my grief She stands, nigh weightless and aglow. So small, yet strong; she lifts my palm, And if I want to, we can go.

I blink and come undone in calm; She offers me her hand.

angelsight - one proof of insanity setting my heart on fire is another i try again to find humanity so i will fall throughout the night’s grand song

you as blanket upon me and smother i curl and smoke - to the chest i return in dark wood smooth i close electric eyes and hope to dream of angels with that burn

(From May 3rd till May 16th *this prompt has been extended by a week)

Challenge: Write a Tempels sonnet

The Tempels sonnet is written in iambic octa- or pentameter, and follows the following scheme: 

a b b A - c d c A - d e f e - f A

The capitalized A-line rhymes with the first line, and is a repeated line. However, in the sonnet’s conclusion you remove the last two syllables of the repeated line, distilling it to its core to increase impact.

Examples:

Perhaps I’ll dream of trees

Her dancing spell

Helplessly addicted

her laugh, her voice (by @petrow.*) 

*Fantasize the chopped off two syllables at the end of the last line, because at the time of @petrow’s writing that specific condition hadn’t been established yet.

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The kind of man who walks with wind,

whose eyes conceal the sun within-

its radiant harmony never far behind.

I was caught in his light, defenseless,

overwhelmed by his molten skin

and the sacred rhythm we kept, now blessed,

its radiant harmony never far behind.

His eyes electrify soft skin

and encourage chemical souls to blend.

Yes I’ve met his kind before-

Sunlit muses walking among men-

The song we sing haunts the breath of the wind,

In each 'goodbye', a hushed, 'till when?' In that which we cannot exscind: The ‘us’ in ‘we’, preserved, predestined To meet among the stars again.

Where wanes renounced, the future found In life — by time, turned uncertain, Prevails the faith that we are bound To meet among the stars again.

Eyes closed doth seek the cosmic curtain Where perchance we'll see it lifted: In dreams wherein we live, nor die, So, hold on, where once we drifted.

Where some transcend, we'll choose to fly To meet among the stars.

(Preferred) Meter:  Iambic Tetrameter

Rhyme scheme: a b b A* - c d c A - d e f e - f A**

* The capitalized A-line rhymes with the first line, and is a repeated line. ** The last repeated A-line loses its last iambic foot.

I incorporated the repeating lines, because I love rondeaus and villanelles. I found the introductory stanza to be most satisfying with an ‘a b b a’ scheme as it has a sense of completion on its own, which fits it as the head of the poem. After that the body follows in an ‘a b a b’ scheme, interrupted by the repeated line, which I left out in the third stanza so the poem’s ‘reason’ stands out, and because it gives more power to it returning in the conclusion. However, in the conclusion you remove the last two syllables of the repeated line, distilling it to its core to increase impact.

Example: