#sa review

Yeah, hey it’s TR! Lol it’s been a minute so I had to backtrack to figure out your old username. CD has already started this one from a little while ago so I’m just here to bring the last of it home.

World: Alternia

Name: Feyarr Ridawk

Yep, I remember! Something about this feels…bird-y? Which given that your theming is inventing and reptiles we might need to step it back a little. How about Mandar Ritalc? Mandar because inventions are associated with fire, which made me think of fire salamanders, and because of Mandark in Dexter’s Laboratory. Ritalc still retains a similar lexical flow to the original last name but is just a mixup of Lacertilia, which is the suborder of lizards.

Meaning: none, this is part of the ongoing series of my first fansession

Age: 6 sweeps

Gender: male

Theme/Story: Feyarr’s whole theme is inventing and lizards. He fills up space with worthless trinkets and devices, and his hive is so messy and booby trapped that even his moirial can’t get through without accidentally hurting himself.

I don’t know if you’ve seen She-ra and the Princesses of Power, but going a sort of vaguely Entrapta route with this character could be fun! You’re trying to build up a Bard of Space here, and Bards of Space are going to restrict movement. Like, literal, physical movement. Passively, of course, they’re not standing there and holding anyone hostage, but traps and such are a great way to communicate this feeling! 

Space is also embodied by a sort of patience that you would want to challenge here. He’s a bard of space, so he’s destroying that sort of big-picture, let it flow mentality and actively chasing after things. Think of an impulse to do things Now, creating before he has a good idea of what he’s doing, being overambitious and thoughtless and often getting people Stuck because of his behavior. Mostly literally, but other times more metaphorically. 

Goals: Redesign if needed, reworking of the character, the usual.

Strife Specibus: flailkind. he’s pretty clumsy with it, but has personally decorated it so he wants to keep it.

Having a personally decorated weapon is a really cute idea that I appreciate, but I also am not quite sure if a flail really fits the theme you’re building here? He’s an inventor, not a knight. I almost feel like you should use something like a Trapkind where he has some inbuilt thing. Or maybe even something that’s just like what?kind, that functions in a manner similar to jokerkind or Vriska’s dicekind where it just does some nonsense. 

Fetch Modus: He has to break down “walls” to get the item.

If he likes building traps, I can see him trying to make it difficult to get in. Maybe he could have a Laser Trap modus where you’re supposed to use a certain pattern to get in, but if you mess up you get boobytrapped. Makes it really difficult to use under pressure! The last thing you need in a near-death situation is to get caught in a trap! 

Blood Color: indigo

Symbol and Meaning: Sagigo (EZ)

Handle: twistedExplosion[TE]

You haven’t gone a lot into his love of destruction here in his profile, so I don’t know how I feel about explosion being his major name association. BUt I don’t want to take it away entirely…. How about:

wrecktifiedInnovator [WI]

Wrecktified pays tribute to the idea of rectifying or rebuilding something, while also nodding to wreckage/destruction. There’s an added benefit that wrecktified in informal parlance also means “A response designed to stop bad behavior, which paradoxically produces more of it,” which feels fitting. Innovation is fairly straightforward! 

Quirk: randomly puts things in caps for EMPHASIS! >>-> separates sentences with that thing there.

i think it would be fun if he stARTED CAPITALIZING IN THE MIDDLE OF SENTENCES. like he’s building uP TO SOMETHING. you have to create a foundation before you can aDD THE PIZZAZZ. I think the separation with his symbol can stay, though! 

Special Abilities: None, besides super strength like other indigos.

Lusus/Guardian: lizarddad

I almost want to recommend something more trapping-related. Trapdoor spider? Orchid mantis? 

Interests: building, taking apart, fixing things, building traps, extreme sports, destruction, and did i mention building traps?

Appearance: 

Personality: Feyarr is an unpredictable and reckless troll. He wants to both build and destroy anything he can, but does care deeply about his friends safety- but often doesn’t notice when things aren’t safe. His friends aren’t as into his interests, but pretends to be to please him. His moirial has a huge flushcrush on him, but the feelings are not returned.

Dancestor: Komesc Ridawk, the rogue of space

Ancestor: the Animator Tristone

Lunar Sway: Prospit

Title: Bard of Space

Land: Land of Black Holes and Frogs

Thank you!!!

I didn’t really have much at all to add to what CD already said here, so let’s just run through a quick redesign:

We’ve got some work to do on this sprite. I see Tavros’s eyes, Terezi’s mouth, and Equius’s tank and shorts. One on its own would probably fly, but all together this starts to look a little procedurally generated. I tried to keep the spirit of your design intact. Let’s go top to bottom.

Horns - I loved the idea of both of them going the same way, but I wanted the shapes to be a little more distinct and less curved.

Hair - It just needed a little more mess and volume. Edited from a fan-troll template with tufts to echo the symbol.

Eyes - I took another fan-troll template and basically smushed it on top of the existing eyes.

Mouth - still wanted to go for a toothy look. I was going for something a little Randall from Monsters Inc.

Outfit - used a fan-troll template to turn the top half into overalls, which sufficiently conveys “inventor” without making him an Equius clone.

And that’s everything! Hope this all helped.

Well he's European, and his name is Frank, so how would he not show his Frankness

Alright SPOILERS

World: Alternia

Name: Anandi Marana

Meaning: once again, none :( she’s an old troll.

Anandi is a real human name that’s relatively well known, so I think we should move away from that to… Apsind? Which is a discombobulation of Spinda. You’ll see an explanation down below. For the last name, what about Cotsch? As a mixup of Scotch, a reference to Hopscotching. I know it’s kinda a big changeup of names, but it’s probably worthwhile considering Marana is a Place In Arizona. 

Age: 6 sweeps

Gender: gender fluid, will be referred to as she for now to prevent confusion.

Theme/Story: Anandi’s main theme is jade who wants to be free, which is the same as most other jades actually. Funny. As well as childhood games and toys like jump roping, bubbles, and jacks. She often got punished misbehaving when she was younger, and always being told what to do and where to go and how to act. She used to listen, and just go with flow, but when she started meeting other trolls she changed, and tried to make her own freedoms.

So a big theme you have going on here is a kind of childishness/interest in childish games (which makes sense because she’s a kid) and her outfit design almost looks sportlike, like a basketball player’s clothes, so combining those two observations, I think an interesting thing to add to her themeing might be like… professional Competitive Fiduspawn Player 

Maybe in an almost… Jared Hess’ “Nacho Libre” sort of narrative. She loves the grubs and wants to take care of them, but she dreams of bigger things (and bigger paychecks), too! But fiduspawn is such a lowbrow game and she’s a semi-noble! So she’s gotta forge her own path and become the Masked Fiduspawner. 

It’s just a fun extra narrative layer on top of what you’ve already got going on.

Goals: design would help a lot, I’m not happy with how she looks. General overview is good too!

Strife Specibus: jumprope kind. Trust me, it can be a weapon

Fetch Modus: Jacks: she has to pick up the items like playing a game of jacks to put them into her modus.

How does she deposit them? Just tossing jacks? 

Blood Color: jade

Symbol and Meaning: virun, sign of the eager

(My recommendation would be:)

( VIRUS, SIGN OF THE ADAPTABLE) Handle: destructiveBubbles[DB]

How about plushyFirebrand? Plushy as a subtle reference to Host Plushies and firebrand calls to mind more Excitability and Change drive than ‘destructive’, which sounds hostile. 

Quirk: replaces i with ! And uses lots of exclamation points.

You could also make her have xx’s on both sides of her messages to represent Jacks. 

Special Abilities: none

Lusus/Guardian: none, she’s a jade

Interests: games such as jacks, jumprope, hula hooping, and so on. As well as taking care of grubs!

Appearance: I really don’t like this sprite, but I’ve remade it too much already lol

Personality: Anandi is a cheerful and stubborn troll, having changed a lot since she was a younger jade. She wants to make her own destiny, and have the freedom and confidence to do so! She tries to inspire the other jades in her cloister, as well as her online friends. She acts brave and selfless most of the time, but in a panicked situation she can get quite scared and meek. She’s kind to all, which is part of her jadeblood nature. She will do anything to help, even if it includes breaking the rules.

(This, really, is a Prospit character. A Prospit character who’s recently decided to become a revolutionary, but a Prospitan nontheless. The cheer, the destiny references, the lack of facades… I could go on.) (Not all Dersites are freedom fighters. Trizza Tethis, of Hiveswap, is a Derse/Blood player. Dersites rail against things, true, but wanting to change society/the path you’re on is not exclusive to them.)

Dancestor: Arekha Marana, the seer of breath

Ancestor: the Huntress, a rogue jade who didn’t want to live a docile life if caring for grubs and instead became an assassin.

Lunar Sway: Derse

As SA discussed above, I think she’d make a better prospitan. She has the adaptability and mutability of a prospit friend. She’s also emotionally reactive and doesn’t necessarily think things through thoroughly, which is the hallmark of Derse. 

Title: Maid of Breath

I don’t know if she has the same narrative structure as a maid… I’d almost be tempted to say witch? Have we said witch for one of yours yet? Keeping classpects straight in big collections of characters is so hard when they’re not your own. Well, if we haven’t said Witch yet, I’d probably say witch. 

Land: Land of Sky and Towers

Design Party!:

I just neatened things up, added some more details and like, unique fashion pieces (jacket time!) and then gave ‘er eyebags and updated the symbol! 

Thank you! You always do such a great job with these.

I’m glad you think so! Thank you for sharing! <3

Hello!

Name: Abelie Gwenyn

Meaning: bees

(Nothing- Nothing else here, friend? No meaning besides bees? Not a thing. There’s overcommitment to gimmick, and then there’s having nothing but the gimmick.)

Blood: Yellow

(Well, Alternian Bees are not yellow, but purple.)

(So she doesn’t have to be yellow! In fact, making her purple would be an interesting development…) Sign: Gemicorn

(SIGN OF THE ANARCHIC) (I am going to design her around:)

(CAPRIBORN: SIGN OF THE MALIGNANT) (It even looks like insect wings!) Lusus: a giant and fuzzy bee (contemplated a bear because honey)

(Moving her to Purple gives her move opportunities. I’m thinking a Giant Queen Bee Larva- part of Abelie’s prowess as a beekeeper is trying to keep this giant, kind of useless lusus fed with royal jelly properly, as she tends the hive and bees that the lusus has grown around itself.)

Trollian Handle: attentiveAntennae[AA]

(This is cute and I’m in favor of keeping it. Gonna make this a bit more sinister later on.)

Typing quirk: replaces all “s” sounds with “zz” and uses the emoticon %:) and other variations

(This is good, scans easily and isn’t a nightmare to type.)

Weapon: a blow dart gun with darts coated in poison honey (she brews it herself)

Special abilities: wings

(We do know that this is a thing trolls can manifest (and their godtiers all having wings to me implies it being an evolution of the troll form but..))

Outfit: a white scarf over a black t-shirt, and underneath that is a black tank top. She also wears a yellow striped skirt, and slippers. (Check CD’s design breakdown later on!)

Personality: Abelie is an overly optimistic but always frightened troll, having been constantly warned since she was young about her dangerous wing mutation. She’s only 6, but has lived in isolation for most of her life, and is quick to attach herself to anyone who she encounters that is kind to her. She’s been told that she’ll die if she goes out in public with her wings as well as other warnings, but sometimes she ignores those warnings. She has a job as a beekeeper, selling her honey online through the drones. Since she can’t really go in front of the drones, her lusus delivers the honey for her.

(I don’t really think you’ve built a Rage player at all here. There’s no chaos, no inner turmoil that she’s bringing to the surface.) (Let’s take parts of your current story and weave it into her new purple prose:) (Born with a latent mutation that fully developed as she got older, Abelie has been hiding her whole life- wrapped behind veils of clothes and Chucklevoodoos. Hiding herself physically as well as emotionally, Abelie tends to her hives and to her lowblooded friends- sometimes physically kicking them into overdrive to do what she wants (or thinks is best for them). Knowing that if she were ever caught, she’d be culled instantly, Abelie nurses a venomous hate deep within her for the Church of The Mirthful Messiahs, who seek to subjugate the lowbloods and cull any who threaten the “perfect” homogeneity of Alternia. Queen Bee’s gonna take them all down a peg.)

Ancestor: the Beetamer

Lunar Sway: Prospit

(I have moved her to Derse to better emphasize the Hidden Mutant angle- she’s someone naturally inclined to hide herself!)

God tier: Maid of Rage (Main suggestion: Prince of Rage)

(If you want her to be a Maid, she has to actively create and become rage. She has to have enough burning emotion in her that it pours out and spreads around her. Maids of Rage create paranoia, rage, and fear directly. They inspire these things just by existing within a session. They have to learn how to work with that and use it to their team’s advantage.) (In my writeup of her, I have her written as a Prince, the Active destroyer. This is accomplished by her going after the Messiahs and the subjugglation system.)

Fetch Modus: Honeycomb- she must place each item inside of a hexagon, waiting for it to pupate before taking it out

(Cute.)

Land: I’m not quite sure yet, I’m sorry!

I think that’s all of it! Sorry if I missed anything. Thank you!

Design Time!

World: Alternia

Name: Erenyx Erixck (Try saying that 3 times fast)

Age: 8 sweeps

Theme/Story: Since her hatching, Erenyx has been very intelligent. Unfortunately, she’s also batshit crazy. Erenyx gives off an aura of “not quite there”, often randomly staring off into the distance and generally acting weird. She’s very into hypnosis and mind control, trying to command lower blooded trolls with varying methods and success. 

Local Mod With Psychotic Symptoms Here: Please Stop Making Characters Whose Entire Gimmick Is “Not Being All There.” I hope this doesn’t come off as rude, but I want to teach you how to be a stronger writer. It’s not as scary or edgy as you think it is and it is 100% of the time more of a stressor for the person who has the condition than for anyone else. 

People who are most often stigmatized with the “““batshit crazy”““ label don’t want to harm others and experience significantly higher rates of violence directed towards than the general population because of stereotypes like these! Staring off into the distance and “acting weird” aren’t villainous traits. They’re just how people are sometimes. The “crazy genius” is a strung out trope that’s just shorthand so you can get away with not writing character motivation! We’re gonna dissect your girl like a frog specimen and take out her tender Character Traits to build her back better. Bionic frog. 

So to give you a stronger starting base here: If you want a troll to be a bad person, make them a bad person. It’s so much more interesting than them being randomly “crazy” and wacky. Make them malicious, and not because they’re ~not all there~. We’re gonna call New “Bionic Frog” Erenyx a bastard because she thinks she’s better than other people. She was born with strong psionics and she thinks that means she’s a cut above the rest, she thinks they should respect her and like her, and that’s why she wants to control others. 

(Cosigned as another mod with psychotic symptoms like… it’s not a great look. Also: Everyone on Alternia is terrible for the most part. It was DESIGNED that way in-universe. It’s a planet of hormonal teenagers who are encouraged to murder their friends and neighbors for kicks. You don’t need a “batshit crazy” smokescreen to just write a terrible fantroll. Vriska already exists, and she doesn’t have anything like that.)

Goals: Due to her, let’s say, interesting personality, Erenyx has no friends. So, she reasons, why not hypnotize lowbloods to become her friends? (I thiiiiink you misread my section on Goals: These are for you and us, not your fantroll’s ambitions (though nice information to have). I’m going to do this as a general review in lieu of anything specific.)

Strife Specibus: Yoyokind. It’s got a swirly pattern and spikes, naturally.

Fetch Modus: I never bother to think these up, it’s more trouble than it’s worth honestly. (Lowkey agree with you there- I’m horrendous with these. I do think something to help flesh out this spiral motif might be fun? Impressionism, maybe? Some late-Picasso looking art and she’s gotta find the items in it?)

She could also have to solve a maze or labyrinth to get out. Or you could go with something that plays on the Cobra angle and do a snake charmer joke with her playing a pungi. 

Blood Color: Gold

Symbol: Actually, I haven’t decided yet. I don’t know why, I just never get round to it.

You could probably rip a symmetric chunk for a pattern like this and have a pretty good gold symbol on your hands.

Handle: mesmerisingOptics [MO]

Quirk: Undecided

If she loves to seem purposefully confusing, you could mix up her words. Organize her sentences in a way that people usually don’t. The best example I can think of this is… I used to follow this RP blog a while back, amusedmuralist, and the way sentences are structured here is what I’m thinking. “Waste your lowly selves not the time allotted you.” 

A generally ‘better than thou’ attitude and insults/put downs can go a long way, too. 

Special Abilities: Various methods of hypnosis, most of which aren’t very good.

Lusus/Guardian: Cobra Lusus

I do like this a Lot but what about . Kaa. She could face the common troll problem of having a lusus that needs to eat other trolls, and she needs to trap them to feed her snakemom before her snakemom gets hungry and turns on her! 

Personality: As stated above, she’s not exactly the most sane troll on the block. Likes to dish out weird threats to innocent passerby and giggle to herself for no reason. Likes spirals. (This is barely even window dressing on a personality- you’ve made her theoretical, stereotypical mental illness her whole character. You’re overcommitting to a pretty bad gimmick, to be frank.) (To quote the EZ Gold Signs: “Gold Signs are interested in a wide variety of topics, so they tend to be Jacks-of-all-trade, and can have trouble dedicating themselves to just a single hobby or career. They have a tendency to be high-energy, and can stress people out, including themselves.” This may be a good place to start for a character like this.)

And as I’ve said above, she believes she’s a cut above the rest. She could be a little on the cruel or at least inconsiderate side, a better-than-you type. She could look down on other blood colors and the like. Another gold fact from the EZ is that golds love The Hustle, they like making bank. You could play on a manipulation and control angle and instead of relying on a bad mental illness stereotype, make her an extortionist playing mental health professional? Come to her Hypnosis Clinic, she’ll definitely help you get a good night’s sleep/work through your trauma/cut that chalk eating habit! [Fails to brainwash you] 

Interests: Hypnosis, obviously, and other methods of controlling people. Spirals, swirls, other similar things. (You say Spirals and my first thought is early game Uzumaki. Maybe she has an interest in strange art? Really underground, indie shit that the Highbloods would NEVER see as equal to their epic sculptures and Clowns and stuff.)

Actually, I want to step a layer deeper here. What are spirals traditionally associated with in homestuck? C h e r u b s. And what is there evidence of on Alternia? Giant Snake (Cherub) Corpses. And given that the purples worship the merciful messiahs, I’d be unsurprised if spirals actually featured rather heavily in Clown Church Religion. Erenyx could have an interest in art history on top of an interest in modern perplexing imagery. She could be interested in finding the deeper meanings. She could think that she, in all her GENIUS WISDOM, understands this art and the meaning behind it better than anyone else and that she’s unlocked some hidden truth that means she deserves to be in charge. 

It could also be a sparking point for her interest in hypnosis- maybe her psionics don’t actually lend themselves well to mindcontrol, but she’s trying to jack into whatever force allows purplebloods to Chucklevoodoo.  

Lunar Sway: See symbol.

She’s a prospitan if I’ve ever seen one. 

Title: See lunar sway. (I think if hypnosis is her game, she’s probably a Heart/Mind inversion player. Actively messing with people’s brains, passively messing with their souls and identities.)

Yeah, cheesy as it is, I’d rule her as thief of mind. Or witch. One of those. 

And design corner time: 

Hair: I cannot believe you gave me a spiral character and didn’t give her SWIRLS. I had to just embiggen the hair a little more. Big hair on alternia is associated with the Condesce and thus power, so having a big spirally mess of it? Screams Better Than You. 

Face: I adjusted her mouth’s position mildly and changed the glasses to cherub colors as a reference to that cherub comment I made up there, but you could change them out for any appropriate themeatic colors- she didn’t have any Accents before! 

Outfit: I changed her outline and sweater color to go for something lighter, so the hair would stand out from it better. I added a conceptual symbol for her! Golds don’t wear patterns, so her socks are solid yellow now. I also fixed up her shoes by bringing in tavros’ sandals to edit. You don’t need to draw out individual toes on a sprite form wearing shoes, or else the area gets visually complicated! 

World: Alternia! Name: Frozia Kaaste! As is typical for me, I used a generator, but the counselor liked the name xD Plus I think her last name being Kaaste is kinda funny

Age: Like, seven or so? less than Vretex, more than Pirzes

Theme/Story: Frozia is an idealist above all else. She truly believes that the bloods should be equal and tries to use her status as a violet to help them, but often goes about it in rather performative ways. Vretex often chastises her for this, while insisting she ought not try because it’ll hurt her. Regardless she keeps trying. She discovered the Signless’ ideals when exploring old abandoned locations and fell in love with them, not exactly thinking about how illegal it is to be a supporter of him, even now. She fashioned herself her own signless symbol and wears it on the same necklace she wears her sign. She tends to take in mid and low bloods if they need a safe place to stay, which is why Pirzes felt safe going to her with the wigglers. Despite the fact that the more she does, the more likely the heiress will notice- As she is a violet- she makes no attempt to hide anything she does, as she believes her status will excuse it all in the eyes of the law, and ignores Vretex’s point that, well, no it won’t.  Goals: Pretty much everything!  Strife Specibus: Not sure?  Fetch Modus: Yeah, don’t know Blood Color: Violet! Symbol and Meaning: Aquarist! It’s the woman I kinda half based her off’s extended zodiac

(SIGN OF THE RENEGADE)

Handle: maaybe something like idealisticOctopus or something silly? Quirk: She types casually, with little to no punctuation or capitalization (other than names,) and begins every sentence with an equals sign! Special Abilities: just the general violet resilience and such Lusus/Guardian: I was thinking a walrus like thing? like a fully aquatic walrus or something. a significant chunk of her hive is above-water though so. something that’d feel like it’d have more “traditional” values though

(There’s a Homer Simpson quote about riding a walrus to work that I’m getting vivid flashbacks to with this.) Interests: Frozia enjoys spending time with her blockmates, listening to others talk about their interests, painting, exploring ruins and such, helping people- that’s a big one- singing, caring for wigglers, robotics- pretty much she finds the interests of her friends and takes them as her own to better connect with them! plus she’s fascinated by “lowblood culture” (HmmmmHMMMMM there is a core of character here that I like. I think she needs a little bit more… something? Maybe just one thing that’s soley her own, maybe something that she’s struggling to find time for because she just LOVES her friends and foundlings, but is lowkey stressing her out.)

Meaning: Surname means fish, first name doesn’t have one. She’s part of the original twelve I was inexperienced with making.

(Awwww, babywriter trolls! I remember the first one I wrote, who was also originally a Life player, now that I think about it…)

(I’m gonna say right off the bat that she’s gonna need a bit of a whole core replacement, or rather, an insertion of a core. She’s got the skeleton of a character, but none of the meat! Let’s give her some fluff.)

Mod CD here just for a few additional notes. You know how I love trying to justify names that have no meanings. I discovered that in one of H.P. Lovecraft’s old stories, there’s a land called Zar where “dwell all the dreams and thoughts of beauty that come to men once and then are forgotten.” So I think we can justify this name along with some ideas SA posits later. Go with the flow, even if it means forgetting your dreams!

Blood: fuchsia

Sign: Pisci

(SIGN OF THE DRUID)

(My thoughts for her sign lean more towards…)

(PIMINO, SIGN OF THE EMPATHETIC)

Lusus: Gly’go’dyb

Trollian handle: diligentSeafoam[DS]

Typing Quirk: capitalizes z, replaces e with -E

(This is good, easy to scan and type.)

Weapon: a custom designed trident

(Checks out with what we know of the Batterwitch’s caste.)

Can I recommend adding a flag to the trident? It doesn’t change the function of it in any way, but it’s a nod to the design note of you basing her outfit off a color guard uniform. 

Special abilities: none except canon fuchsia blood ones

Outfit: I actually based this off of the color guard uniform at my school when I first designed her. The half skirt and long sleeved shirt with tights. She also has a small crown too, as seen in this version.

Personality: Zariak is a silent brooding type, not wanting to form attachments. She knows she’s going to die when she’s 9 sweeps, and doesn’t want to think about it. She also knows she has to kill multiple lusii daily to keep her planet from being destroyed, and she hates it. She cares about these random trolls lives and how she ruined them, but like hell she’ll show a weakness like that. She’ll just pretend she’s the average heiress. Go with the flow.

(I think part of what she’s missing here is that Fuschia air of mystery? As well as that bad-praxis part of Fuschias where they WANT to do things, but often fail at actually DOING them. Maybe she needs to be a bit skittish around lowbloods or something? Not in the “they could hurt me” way but in the “oh my god what if I break one?” the way a lot of people are when unexpectedly handed a baby. Don’t want to drop it!)

Lunar Sway: Prospit

(I think keeping her Prospit is a thing that would be good for her. Though her broodiness and mask of “just your average tyrian” is very Classic Derse. Make her true self shine through a little more, even when she’s just trying to pathologically go with the flow.)

Prospit dwellers also tend to be the more mutable and go-with-the-flow types. Remember, dersites are prone to rebellion while prospitans are prone to acceptance. There’s also the Destiny conception- Zariak has already decided she’s doomed to die and believes this is the natural course of things. This is a destiny idea that ties her to Prospitan tendencies for sure!

God tier: Knight of Life

(I see where the Knight is coming from. This is actually a really brilliant class for someone like her, who has the DESIRE to go out and help people but is holding herself back. Knights (like Karkat, Latula, and Dave) also have a habit of hiding their feelings behind glasses and facades, regardless of their Lunar Sway.) (Life Players meddle even when they don’t think they are- just look at our Heiress Trio of Jane, Feferi and Meenah. I’m not sure that Zariak has that kind of pushiness that life players really do. If anything, I’d wonder if she’s a Doom player, ESPECIALLY with that Ghosty land you have planned for her.)

I’ve gotta agree on the Doom front. She’s someone who is overwhelmed by all rules and standards, but the Inevitability around her. She feels crushed by her fate and all that underlying reciprocal developmental energy is stuck inside. She has to push past her hiding and crack into that Rogue of Life inverse. 

(This means her Sgrub path would be in learning how to weaponize that fatalism she’s carrying into something that she save her team with! Passively use her privledge and energy that she’s carrying around to enact things like policy change! Or game-breaking loopholes!) Fetch Modus: unsure as of now

(Maybe… spearfishing? Oh! Or like Go Fish? Something silly and ocean related? She’s missing some interests, which is where I often get my Fetch ideas from.)

I know I’m knocking on the color guard thing a lot, but I’m kind of tempted to bring it in here, too. Special routine for items? Special routine for items. 

Land: Land of Ghosts and Rocks

(Are the rocks part of the Quest? Because Rocks and Ghosts sounds more like a Land of Adjective and Quest title.)

The sprite is over a year old I’m so sorry. But thank you for looking at this!

And here with my design notes!: 

I wanted to keep the same basic design elements you’d mentioned, but in general try to make her both a little more Generic Heiress, since that is the kind of role she’s desperately trying to project. I made her skirt pink so she could rep her blood color a little more openly, added some cool detailing to the now black tights, and gave her that Long Fuchsia-Caste Hair. 

Braids were a common feature of Color Guard Uniform, but I didn’t want to futz with that too much/make her design busy, so she gets a pulled back tyrian stripe implying a low ponytail instead. She got her crown, too, and some Traditional Fuchsia horns. 

Name: Adryyell and Adrienne. Adryyell is a variant of Adriel, meaning god’s majesty, and Adrienne… frankly was picked to fit the name themes for cherubs, i forgot what it means.  (Maybe this is personal bias but… they both flow well off the tongue and fit what little we know of Cherubs, so I’m all in favor of them.)

Age: Around 10 or so in human years (Tiny!)

Appearance:They have the standard cherub appearance biologically, but Adryyell when awake generally wears a lime green hoodie and dark green pants, with nothing much distinguishing him. Adrienne wears a bright red sweatervest, black dress shirt, and the same pants. She helpfully captchalogs Adryyell’s sweatshirt for him, usually.  (I can just IMAGINE the “where’d you put my sweatshirt!” arguments. Hard enough having a sibling that goes through your closet- imagine having a sibling that IS your closet.)

Strife Specibus: None, it’s against their “rules” and Adrienne frankly doesn’t trust Adryyell with a weapon. They use their claws and teeth instead.

Fetch Modus: Same as seen in canon, juju modus

Blood color: Adryyell is lime, Adrienne is candy red.

Symbol and meaning: None, actually, feel free to suggest!  (Hear me out.)

(Lambda is NOT ONLY the Half Life Symbol, it’s also a common symbol in mathematics and computer science, and is even on both ends! In physics, lowercase lambda is shorthand for wavelength, and in evolutionary biology, it’s often used to refer as the number of offspring likely produced per generation… such as your 2 for 1 special of Cherubs.) Trolltag: Adryyell’s is youthfulYearner, Adrienne’s is illustriousInterloper (I like this a lot coupled with their quirk- as English has that “sometimes y” bit for vowels, and I is often the closest in sound to Y.)

Quirk: adryyell replaces all i’s with y’s, adrienne replaces all y’s with i’s (So like “syzes” and “iello”)

Special Abilities (if any): None, not really anyway

Personality: Adryyell is kind and caring, though he has a very miniscule grasp on social stuff, not to mention comes off blunt and rude in conversation. He struggles with understanding humans, or anything outside of the rules he and his “swap” have, and is generally very confrontational. Adrienne is cold and calculating, yet comes off as friendly and much more polite than her “swap.” She understands social motivations etc perfectly, and uses this to her advantage. She however is very protective of Adryyell, and made their rules to ensure both of them will survive until adulthood, and they’ll see which one of them predominates.

Interests: Adryyell is mostly interested in exploring, maybe fighting occasionally, and eating, not having much other than that. Adrienne is fascinated by human psychology, and delves into pretty much everything like that, exploring the psyche and everything. They both do love games, though

Title: None, actually!  (From what LITTLE we know about the Rules for Sburb Cherubs, the Red one is Time and the Green one is Space (this is just a Sburb thing in general too- check Dave/Jade and Kanaya/Aradia). Logically since one of them must die, they’d play a one-person session, so one is a Lord and the other is a Muse. Theoretically. The details are hazy since Cali/Cali are our only canon Cherubs and they didn’t have… normal circumstances.) (CD pointed out that since you’ve got baby cherubs here, if they entered The Medium NOW, they wouldn’t be at the developmental stage to kill each other, so that they would likely be counted as a two person session: meaning they could create a viable world…)  (They also posit that if they killed the other’s dreamself on their questbed: would they be released from their Two Minds One Body Predicament? We just don’t know- but it would be fun.)

Land:Also none, whoops-