#oboreru

I liked gluttony on its own and pride in relation to other media. But wrath's concept really intrigues me. "man who trusts people who dont like him more then people who do". Peak pathetic villain.

My artwork from 2025

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Drowning (WIP)

Oboreru is very specifically about Subaru not just concluding that people don’t care, but that they will actively betray, torture, and try to kill him even if they look at him with a smile on their face. It basically turns him into a feral animal that isn’t really Alive but also does not want to die. BTZ doesn’t really reach the qualifications for that very specific scenario.

But yeah, the “burden” part…

Please have Pridebaru as the comic relief no one takes seriously, and Slothbaru trying to help in between showing everyone pictures of his kids for the 15th time today

I’m gonna assume that these IF!Barus got sent back in time with all their. Issues.

Ayamatsu: They’ve kinda got to take him seriously enough to make sure that he doesn’t Do That again, and it’s not really comic relief anymore if he’s Right There and not just something out of a bad fanfiction. But — yeah, they might be able to. They’ve just got to get it through his thick skull that the world he is in is real and populated by real people whom he should be treating with respect. This isn’t something that would happen immediately, and they’d probably need to keep him under lock and key, but they might be able to figure it out eventually.

Oboreru: They capture him and release him into a maximum-security cell decorated with a large bed, plenty of blankets and pillows, and an army of soldiers right outside the door. If they can make Subaru feel that this room is safe and secure, then they can eventually use it as an anchor from which he can be escorted out and slowly readjust to the world around him. Wrath!Baru main problem is that he is this paranoid mess of a man that is constantly afraid of being betrayed, and his main threat to them is his Pleiades organization. If they can put him in a position where he can’t leverage his criminal organization against them (because it doesn’t exist), then they don’t have to worry about him killing them and can focus on helping him recover. And if they can construct an environment that is quiet, secure, and predictable, then recovery may indeed be possible.

Sloth:IF: Honestly Sloth!Baru never even really did anything wrong, his only real sin was that he could never come to terms with what happened that day he left. Even if he had never gone back in time they could help him: just get him in therapy to confront his inner demons and realize that 1) the Witch Cult was not his fault and 2) him running to the other side of the world to live a long, safe, and happy life with Rem is EXACTLY what Emilia would have wanted him to do, and he doesn’t have to feel guilty about keeping himself safe. The main issue is honestly that if he goes back in time he loses his wife and kids and — the grief from that would legitimately break him.

Kasaneru: I actually think that things can still be fixed in canon!Kasaneru. Nobody is dead, and so things can still be fixed, because healing is always possible so long as you’re not dead yet. I actually really like the idea of Greed!Emilia learning about RBD and — instead of letting it break her further — finally finding the strength to grow and break free of her chains on her own, leading everyone against Subaru so that he can finally be forcibly resigned and put to rest. In a time-travel scenario, meanwhile, their main issue is keeping Greed!Baru away from anything he can use to kill himself and making sure someone is watching him at all times as they force-feed him therapy about the value of his life. Constant surveillance and plenty of security measures and they indeed might manage to pull it off. —And also they’d need to destroy his connection with Echidna, if possible.

1. Lmao, one of the reasons I was actually really excited to see your fic is because apparently is EXACTLY what some people want from this premise. You’re gonna get a lot of fans, hopefully. They should find your fic pretty easily: by putting it in the [Inspired By] section on AO3, you actually managed to link it DIRECTLY to my current fic! Don’t think it gets any easier to find than that…

2. I think that the structure of the plot so far is very well done and also well-paced. My main criticism would probably be that there’s a bit of a lack of punctuation — namely commas and periods — as well as a couple minor grammatical errors, and I think that just trimming that up a bit would elevate everything you’ve written REALLY quickly. If you want more information about the specifics of that, message me privately and I’ll show you what kinds of changes I would suggest.

I can’t really give a lot of feedback about the premise itself because it’s so different from what I tend to write, lol, but I think it’s pretty good so far. My main suggestion just for using a setup like BTZ is to keep in mind that there are always two conversations going on at once: everyone thinks that they are saying and hearing something different from one another, and every train of thought that they’re following has to be believable from their point of view. It’s a bit of a tricky balancing act, because it relies a lot on how context shapes the meanings of words and phrases, but it’s basically the crux of the whole situation. I think what you’ve got works so far, though.

Also, you’ve mentioned before that you really like how immersive my writing style is (thanks btw :D). The trick to how to do that is actually deceptively simple: make heavy use of the five senses. Draw out what the POV character sees, smells, hears, feels, tastes, and it’ll automatically immerse the reader into your writing a lot faster than they might be otherwise.