#demonstrate

4:30 came EARLY this morning.

We have a new collaborator!!! They are a vet who saw our post on FB, shared it to Reddit and all the other spaces! They might be there this afternoon with us again and they're going to be with us on 7/6.

It went well, mostly positive vibes with a couple of oh-so-brave ones who yelled at us or flipped us off. The signs held up well, too. A fun time was had.

[my friends in Augusta Ga demonstrating daily in front of military base to not follow illegal orders]

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It is important to not look away. Looking away is a natural impulse to being flooded and overwhelmed. Staying with a commitment to the truth and to being with and telling the truth is more important than ever.

Honestly, this phrase has been regurgitated so many times that sometimes it feels like it’s begun to lose its meaning, but I’m opinionated about it (more than any sane person should ever be), so I’m going to plaster said opinions onto my blog. Enjoy!

So the first thing is that when a lot of newbie writers (past me is getting lumped in too)  hear “Show don’t tell,” what they’re actually hearing is “tell, but with more words.” This is how you end up with phrases like “a small whoosh of air escapes her puffed cheeks, where it condenses into a little cloud, it’s presence a visual representation of her frustration” instead of “she huffs a sigh and shivers.” Both show that she’s frustrated or annoyed and that it’s cold out, but the first uses exactly four times as many words. Also, the first line was more telly than the second. I guess a key thing here is as much as you can, don’t “show” verbs by just saying them in a much more drawn out way. It has the opposite effect of what you’re usually going for. 

The next thing is that Show Don’t Tell is most effective when it’s about characters. This is because characters are layered in a way inanimate objects aren’t; their actions can indicate more details below the surface, or can add up to portray convincing and consistant characterization. Describing a character’s room - the place where they can relax and be the most themselves - is showing us about the character. Saying “the curtains were ugly” is showing us about the characterization of the narrator, who is, most often, a character. If you’re talking about how a character is moving through an environment, you’re indicating temperature, feel, etc, but you’re also showing us how your character is reacting to that. 

Say it with me people: it’s all about CHARACTERS!

(i told u i was opinionated)

Going into that a little farther, what Show Don’t Tell is really getting at is Demonstrate Don’t Tell. In other words, rather than blatantly tell us that a character is X over and over again, give us the evidence and let us put the pieces together. For example, saying that a character is heroic repeatedly makes them feel about as heroic as that soggy noodle on the cafeteria floor. But having the character save others instead of hirself on multiple occasions, especially when it would be much easier for hir to fit into the status quo looks pretty heroic. Or, if you have a character and you say over and over that xe’s really witty, but they never do anything witty, they’re going to look like a stagnant chunk of wood, humor-wise.