#corvidcoreofficial

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so it actually took me a few minutes to identify what was off, you've done a very good job and tbh if I saw this published in a graphic novel of some sort I wouldn't have noticed anything other than it's a very nice arts style.

but there are a few minor tweaks that could be made.

A good way to identify issues in a drawing is to take a different color and draw over it, in pink I identified the major forms of her body as well as finding the centerline, and then in green I started looking at what could be tweaked, now a good portion of what I changed is can very a Lot between styles, so this is more of a suggestion tbh.

The biggest concern was that her head was a touch to far to the left, which is honestly an incredibly easy mistake to make. the way her sleeves dont sinch in at the cuff is also a bit off, most poofy sleeves get their shape from that cuff so that's what our brains are used to. and the final big issue was that her skirt doesn't connect to the belt all the way around, it poofed out on her right side from much lower down. beyond that everything was small touches, pulling her ear up a little bit an pulling her eye a little closer to the side of her face were both optional. the bridge of her nose felt like it needed a little more space to breathe (ha ha). I added a third point to her crown which might be completely wrong but it felt right if that makes any sense. and the last big thing I'd want to change was trying up the neckline a little and changing which way her belt curved, I went more concave you went more convex, both work but I feel concave gives her a bit more form.

An important thing to note is that I rarely follow my sketch exactly when I edit, as things get pushed around and adjusted, what looks right changes a bit.

and now the final comparison, Over all I think you did a fantastic job. not just with the drawing but with the colors and character design as well.

I KNOW LMFAOOO i was like ‘yeah i guess they could all be a good couple all three of them’ and now im like, oh so Kai sure does fall into Adams arms a lot huh ����

Of course! Don’t worry about it, it’s a really hard to read video and the text colours are pretty eye-strainy. I’m gonna publish this for the sake of others who struggled with it as well! 

The text goes as follows:

>HELLO?

>YOU

>ARE YOU DIRK?

>ENTER RESPONSE HERE

me

no

>WHO ARE YOU THEN?

david

>STRIDER?

oh jeez i think i know where this is going

>WHERES DIRK

asleep

>OH

why do you wanna know anyways

who are you

>I’M...

AH, NO I DIDNT GET ANY COMMENTS

THANK YOU

this is super super sweet wtfff ;w; im so sad i missed the first one