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AHH TY FOR THE ASK PRINCESS (Sorry for delay I needed to wait for AO3 to come back up and have time to pick out a snippet for F)
F: Share a snippet from one of your favourite dialogue scenes you've written and explain why you're proud of it.
Okay, this was stupid hard to pick because once you read your own stuff with this question in mind, literally everything sounds like garbage đ So I just went with something recent people seemed to enjoy. (For context: KisaSaku, Canon divergent, Yokai infested post-apocalyptic AU set about a decade out from early Shippuden. Shameless use of one tent and shared body heat tropes.)
With a tired sigh and a shiver, Sakura had begun to absently nod before looking at him with a sudden halt. Her eyes traveled up his barely clothed body, over to the tent, and back. âYouâre not going to put on clothes?â she asked. An adorably genuine, but very silly question. âNot even a shirt?â
His brows raised in clear amusement. âYouâre wearing it, Kunoichi.â
She rolled her eyes. âI assumed you had another.â
âOh, I do,â he said, looking highly entertained. âBut it got all nasty because someone decided to punch me into the mud.â
Sakura choked on a snort.
âYeah. Welcome to the consequences to your own actions,â he said with a flourishing, if not arrogant gesture to himself.Â
She sighed. As far as consequences went, sheâd definitely dealt with worse⌠not that sheâd tell him that. âFine. Letâs just go to bed,â she said, kicking off her shoes and ducking into the gloom of the tent.
âKubikirbocho can cuddle with Samehada if she doesnât mind,â Sakura muttered, already stuffing her sword next to Kisameâs.
âSheâs probably cool with it. Weâll find out if not.â
Sakura looked up at him with a weary smile. âWhatâs she gonna do, eat it?â
He smiled back with a shrug. âMaybe.â
âAh. Well,â Sakura sighed, shoving her pack into the corner by her head. âSamehada will have a very iron rich diet then.â
âHey, not bad, Kunoichi,â Kisame pushed his jaw out with an approving nod. âFreezing to death and sheâs still got jokes.â
âYeah,â she yawned, flopping onto her back and rubbing her eyes. âThanks, Iâll be here all night.â
âGreat,â he said, nudging her side with his foot, ânow scooch.â
âNo. Crawl over me. I want to sleep by the flap.â
âWhy, so you can get snatched up by another yokai with the hots for you?â
âI was hardly snatched,â she sneered up at him, most of its impact lost in the darkness.
âIt wanted to snatch you,â he asserted, looking down his nose at her like he was some sort of authority on snatching . âYou were very snatchable. Snackable even. Neither of which would have been the case if youâd just listened to me from the start.â
She snorted. She didnât mean to. She really wasnât in the habit of encouraging him, but that was kind of funny. âI was not snackable,â she grumbled, pulling the blanket up and sighing deeply at the warmth of it.
âYou were. I saw the way it was drooling all over you.â
"Oh, gross, stop.â Sakura pretended to gag, curling in on herself and tugging the blanket over her head entirely. âDon't remind me."
Kisame chuckled, âYou were like a steamed bun to that bitch.â
"You're just jealous she picked me over you."
"Pfft, no way. You were just an appetizer. She knew who the main dish was."
âGood lord⌠would you just get in here please?â Sakura flipped the blanket off her in a huff to stare up at him very seriously. âIâm freezing to death, if youâll recall.â
âOh, so now you just want to use me for my warmth,â Kisame feigned offense terribly, not even dropping his grin. âI see how it is.â
âThat was the planâyour planâyes.â
âOh, well if it was my plan then itâs probably a good one.â He promptly tucked inside, awkwardly fumbling over her as he kicked his muddy shoes off. His presence instantly tested the limits of the two person capacity.
As far as tests went, the tent failed.
âKisame,â Sakura wheezed, squishing against the edge of the tent. âYou are large.â
He had a joke for that but opted out. Low hanging fruit and all. He needed to up his game.
âIâm also warm. Get over here, Kunoichi,â he grunted as he rolled onto his side. Freeing up some space, he used it to reach out and loop an arm around her stomach. He tugged her back against him. Curled around her like a shrimp.
Sakura let out a startled squeak, launching into a fit of dissent. âOh my god , what do you think youâre⌠what do youâŚâ she found herself stalling, petering out as her base survival instincts began to override her pride. âOh my god ,â she sighed, lids fluttering as Kisame wrapped the blanket around both of them with a chuckle. âYouâre like a human boiler.â
"Human," he echoed, "that's mighty high praise coming from you."
âHow are you so warm?â Her fight had all but died and had a eulogy.
Here lies Haruno Sakuraâs dignity, backbone and fighting spirit. They were nice while they lasted. Sheâs warm now though, so thatâs something. If itâs any consolation, she will surely regret her decisions later. Something something, it's all very sad, may they rest in peace.
âWeâre not sleeping like this,â she decided aloud. Like that would counteract the way sheâd shoved her face into his bicep. She was currently using it as a pillow, by the way. Her nose burned cold against him. "This is just until I can feel my limbs again."
âSure, Kunoichi,â he chuckled, settling in.
A breath scraped out of her throat. âCan you not say it like youâre placating me?"
"Sure, Kunoichi,â he repeated in a mockery of deadly seriousness.
L: How many times do you usually revise your fic/chapter before posting?
More than I care to admit đ the scenes should be better, given the amount of revision tbh. I'd say 5-10 times on average for any given chapter. I'll do separate read throughs with each character's focus in mind, make sure I'm not missing anything. It's a tedious process that I love (this sounds sarcastic. It's not. I actually love editing and much prefer it to writing.)