Rosedust

I've been rewriting Diaries on AO3. I just posted ch2, so it's not very far along yet, but I'd love to get more eyes on it! I'm loving writing it so far. We got:

No more weird cringe moments

Aphmau's character gets a new name

First person narration

An author who knows some old school knight/gentleman's rules and uses that for evil

Idk, do y'all like Emmalyn throwing shoes? We got that too

Today Armenians were celebrating one of the most beloved national holidays, Vardavar. During Vardavar celebration people of all ages and “statuses” go out to streets and parks and start water battles. Nobody shall escape a good old bucket of cold water, so, if you want to stay dry, you should really try hard to display talents of tactical thinking and route planning >:D  

But in general it’s very pleasant to get watered, especially when it’s 42°c =3

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It is 1am

Everybody is asleep

“[x people] MUST reblog this” 2/10 I was already going to until you said that

“if you can’t reblog this we can’t be mutuals” 5/10 kinda funny because the person who added that is usually a complete rando. Still probably unfollowing whoever put this on my dash though

“you can reblog this actually” 1/10 no shit, sherlock. Did adding that to the post make you feel good, or something???

“people who like this post but don’t reblog it are all hypocrites looking for woke points” 8/10 extra points for creativity and for actually riling me up. That’s really not how tumblr likes work btw

break up your paragraphs. big paragraphs are scary, your readers will get scared

fuuuuck epithets. “the other man got up” “the taller woman sat down” “the blonde walked away” nahhh. call them by their names or rework the sentence. you can do so much better than this (exception: if the reader doesn’t know the character(s) you’re referring to yet, it’s a-okay to refer to them by an identifying trait)

blunette is not a thing

new speaker, new paragraph. please.

“said” is such a great word. use it. make sweet love to it. but don’t kill it

use “said” more than you use synonyms for it. that way the use of synonyms gets more exciting. getting a sudden description of how a character is saying something (screaming, mumbling, sighing) is more interesting that way.

if your summary says “I suck at summaries” or “story better than summary” you’re turning off the reader, my dude. your summary is supposed to be your hook. you gotta own it, just like you’re gonna own the story they’re about to read

follow long sentences w short ones and short ones w long ones. same goes for paragraphs

your writing is always better than you think it is. you just think it’s bad because the story’s always gonna be predicable to the one who’s writing it

Also, may I add:

Simple is okay. Simple is better than compicated.

If you don’t know the fancy word, there’s a 90% chance the reader won’t know the fancy word.

If you’re writing in your second/third/etc. language and you’re shy about it, don’t be! Be proud! You’re doing something amazing and your words matter

Names will come at some point. Having [character B] retrieve [McGuffin] from [location] during [holiday] is a-okay, don’t worry about it!

You’re still a great writer, no matter how many typos you make of what your writing speed is.

That’s it. Here. Have a quill for good luck.

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