Excerpt from my novel. It’s the very first draft but I’m curious: if this was the first paragraph, would u keep reading? Please bring on the criticism!
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Excerpt from my novel. It’s the very first draft but I’m curious: if this was the first paragraph, would u keep reading? Please bring on the criticism!

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Recently I’ve been thinking about how I introduce my story. That dreaded question “what’s you’re story about” has always haunted me and I need advice.
Usually I say the themes: it’s about three different types of leaders who all have enormous faults. There is one who leads with lies, one with fear, and the other with gentleness.
But I feel like that is a boring way to put it. Does anyone have advice on how to talk about/ sell their story???
Sometimes I have to laugh. This right here is not a metaphor but an actual sentence. Thinking about using these characters as a foreshadowing device tho. It would be so funny.