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1. Strip Away Their Last Defense

A breakdown only lands if the character has nothing left to protect themselves with. Take away the coping mechanism they’ve relied on — their pride, their control, their relationships, their denial, or their hope.

The breakdown isn’t caused by pain. It’s caused by the loss of what kept them standing in that pain.

2. Make the Trigger Small but Devastating

The moment that breaks them should often be quiet, personal, and specific, not just the biggest explosion. A single line of dialogue, a realization, or a tiny betrayal can hurt more than the obvious disaster.

3. Let Them Resist the Fall

Don’t drop them instantly into collapse. Let them try to hold it together first. That resistance creates tension and makes the fall feel earned and painful.

4. Show the Internal Shatter Before the External One

Start with the internal fracture — the belief that dies, the truth they can’t ignore, the hope that finally gives out — then let the external breakdown follow.

5. Let the Breakdown Change Them

A real breaking point permanently alters the character. After this moment, they don’t return to who they were before — even if they heal.

✦ Sensory Cheat Sheet for Writing Breakdowns

Use 2–3 of these at most so the scene stays sharp and not overloaded.

Physical Sensations

Chest feels tight, hollow, or painfully heavy

Hands shaking, numb, or clenched too hard

Throat burning, closing, or unable to form words

Sudden weakness in knees or limbs

Feeling too hot or too cold all at once

Emotional Sensations

Sudden exhaustion rather than loud sadness

A sense of “what’s the point anymore?”

Feeling disconnected from their body or surroundings

A sharp wave of shame, guilt, or self-loathing

Emotional numbness replacing intensity

Mental Experience

Thoughts looping uncontrollably

A single devastating realization repeating in their mind

Trouble focusing on anything except the pain

Feeling like time has slowed or stopped

A sense of being very small, trapped, or exposed

Behavioral Tells

Going silent instead of crying

Laughing at the wrong moment

Snapping at someone who doesn’t deserve it

Making a reckless or self-destructive choice

Withdrawing completely from others

Environmental Mirroring (Optional but powerful)

A room that feels too quiet, too loud, or too small

Harsh lighting or deep shadows

Weather that contrasts their emotion (sunny during despair, storm during numbness)

A comforting object that now feels meaningless

✦ Final Tip

A breakdown isn’t about how dramatic the moment is — it’s about how personally devastating it is for that specific character. The more tailored the pain is to their fears, flaws, and desires, the harder it hits the reader.

So Tenzo and Naruto both technically have Hashirama's chakra right? What if Naruto could tell? And then he assumes they're related because other people with similar chakra are related.

I'm just imagining a wee little Naruto being So Excited when one of the Animal Guardians around him Feels similar to him the way no one else in the village does. Everyone else had family or clan or just other people they were similar to and Naruto has nobody and he's all alone and Different. He asked Jiji about his parents and got a non-answer. And then! This Animal Person who is kinda-almost like him appears! And this is awesome because the Animal People don't even hate him!

He wouldn't be all that phased by the refusals at first because Tenzo tries to let him down gently, but I imagine even Naruto would get the message eventually and it would be so sad.

Then Kakashi would figure out what's going on (descifering Naruto-isms is a challenge, especially since Naruto doesn't know other people can't Sense what he senses) and then he gets confirmation from another sensor. Lo and behold! They have freakishly similar chakra! Even though they couldn't possibly be related!

While elders are floundering over genealogies (Minato's specificaly) Kakashi gleefully takes this opportunity to shove Naruto in the arms of an actual guardian! Who happens to be someone he trusts implicitly, thank god. And the elders can't even protest too much because Moukuton could also keep Kyuubi in line.

Cue domestic shenanigans? Tenzo, the science experiment/black ops child soldier/person who has only ever seen normal family life as a literal murderous stalker now has to raise a child! A really weird child who has cared for himself so far and doesn't appreciate the restrictions of someone who knows Military Discipline and literally nothing else. Poor Tenzo would be so bad at it, but he would dedicate himself with bull-headed earnestness.

Finity I promised myself I wouldn't ramble about this au when I posted it but look at what you did you enabler

So, if Naruto is a baby sensor utterly convinced his and ANBU Cat's similar chakra means they're related, then it stands to reason he would find ways to sneak in places he shouldn't to spend time with his only family member.

“They’ll kill us…” “I know.”

“We can’t keep doing this.” “I know. But I don’t know how to stop.”

“This is going to get is both killed.”

“We have to go. They know, we have to go right now.” “What? What are you talking about?” “They know! About us! They know!”

“What if we left? Maybe somewhere else we could just… be.”

“Isn’t this thrilling?” “And absolutely moronic? It really is.”

“We don’t owe anyone an explanation.”

“Relax, no one saw me.” “How can you be sure?”

“Is all this worth it?” “You mean being with you? Because for me, it absolutely is.”

Don't refer to the roles as lee and ler. I think it takes the reader out of the scene, as the community has made these words up. There are better terms to use anyways. Also, by not using these, people from outside the community reading your fics won't be confused.

Every time a new person talks, MAKE A NEW PARAGRAPH. This is for all fics, but I see this a lot with tickle fics as there is a lot of dialogue switching. If I see a block of text that is half one character laughing and the other half is the other person talking, I'm not gonna read your fic.

I dig when some people write people laughing in all caps, but use it sparingly. Reading all caps for longer than a sentence makes the brain disassociate and I can't read anymore. It's a fun technique, but use it when it's needed.

This is a personal pet peeve of mine, but you don't have to follow it if you don't want to. Not everyone needs to do baby talk. If you have a character that is quieter or stoic that is tickling someone, they probably won't do much of baby talk. Make sure your character teases are appropriate and in character, unless you intend for them not to be.

There are so many different forms of laughter, but a lot of them aren't interchangeable. Envision what you think the laughter will sound like, and base your writing on that. But don't forget to have fun with it.

Writing is supposed to be fun. If you're writing fics and it feels like a chore for you, take a break. Write when you feel like it.

Take the prompts you want. If you get a prompt that isn't very descriptive, toss it or get more info. Make sure the person submitting the prompt knows what they want so you know what they want.