Kino_Hayashi

Once again, your panel flow is perfect as always. Iiiii actually have a degree in illustration. I don't get to use it that much anymore for chronic illness reasons rip but it does let me more pointedly gush about your work. ANYWAY I'm always really impressed by how well you storyboarders are able to, you know, make the story flow around just through composition and directional lines. I just think it's neat and you're clearly very skilled at your craft.

Really love the way that Kinger's body language slumps leads into like the scared surprise that Caine is giving in this first panel. The hand in the foreground over Caine does so much to like establish what's going on and I just think that's neat. I love Kinger's expression on panel two, really doing a great job of establishing the "we are talking about business now" energy

God, and the way you can tell in the next panel when Kinger looks back from the desk to look over at Caine, like, Caine is genuinely VERY upset by this. Like, you sell that fear and shock so well. Like, there's such subtlety. There's a lot of subtle acting in how you've drawn his eyebrows and mouth here, and the little lines around his eyes are also doing so much, and I just think that's neat.

AUGH and then the way you show the progressive sad emotions as Kinger goes to leave that side shot, and the way you capture just the lines on his eyes and his eyebrows, and the way that helps emphasize the mood and the shading here. It's just really neat and I'm destroyed. I'm destroyed and I wrote this. I know what's going to happen in it and I'm still destroyed. GOD the shot of Caine by himself, and you've done a little bit of shading in his eyes to really help emphasize, and God, he looks so upset and so scared, and I just want to give him a hug. Okay so the cut between Caine reaching out to Kinger as he leaves and Caine's hand in the past HITS SO HARD!!!!! It's just such a great visual way to depict the prose I wrote down without the words, and I just think that that is cool. Also, the hand reaching out is just really well done, very expressive. I'm absolutely losing my mind about your shape language on that red hand. It's just really good. HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH and then the little "don't go" and the way that like you made the font a little smaller to really emphasize that. And again, Kinger's hand reaching for the doorknob is just a really good hand. And then you can see the little surprise on Kinger's face and the way you use more circles in it to help emphasize that surprise is neat. And then the next panel, Kane's body language and the shot being from slightly above so we can see how he's kind of curling in on himself. And again, you have the glitches triggering and AAAAHHH it's so good! THE WIDE SHOT SHOWING KINGER AT THE DOOR I'M LOSING MY MIND IT'S EXACTLY HOW I PICTURED IT

GOD so the big shot showing Caine's expression as he starts to cry, and the way you make his teeth seem a little sharper to help, like, emphasize that big emotion, and he's still got the glitches. And again, God, shading adding so much here, the little bit of highlights in his eyes!! The shot of Kinger coming back. I don't know, man. The fact that you can't see Kinger's face, you can see the little bit of tears from where Caine's sitting. And again, like, body language here, so good. The little curve of his back and his shoulders and showing that little bit of tears does so much. And you can see clearly that, like, you can feel the apprehension of Kinger standing over Caine in this shot, and it really emphasizes, you know, he big, Caine small. Caine is the smallest he's ever been in this moment.

AND THEN KINGER SITS DOWN WITH HIM YEEAAAAAAAH WE DID IT

GOD CAINE sitting there on the bed with his little hands on his knees, and he's still got the tears, and he looks so sad. This is the most sad little Muppet man I've ever seen in my life. And the contrast of like the heavier lines on him while Kinger seems to have softened and he gets more soft shapes. Just, ah, so good. Also, I love the little bit of depth you gave to Kane's shoes. It's very good. Love the flow on. "Are you sure that's what you want?" This is a really strong composition. My eye really strongly goes from that text to Kinger's face to Caine's face. It's just listen. You could draw the little like golden triangle in there, maybe. Probably not. But you know, it gives me. It's good. It's good. I'm sorry. All I keep saying is it's good. I just really like it and I want you to know that I really like it in detail.

Oh God, Caine's expression in the "I don't want to be here" line. Listen, the shading you did inside his mouth here to really emphasize that depth is just good. And then you show his little teeth shutting, and oh my God, my heart. HIS LIL NOD AND THE WAY HIS HANDS SQUEEZE SHUT WHEN HIS TEETH SHUT AAA IT'S SUCH GOOD BODY LANGUAGE

Meanwhile, Kinger's expression has gone full like Midhell Manor, sitting and comforting someone, which, ah, yes, it's all I wanted.

The final shots with poor Caine actively shaking. And Kinger has finally softened, and he just promises, and then he just sits with him, and oh my god, it's so cute. Again, really love how your shading emphasizes the ending of these. It just, it always makes it feel like it lands, and I think that's really cool. I love them, your honor. They're my favorite. I'm so glad I wrote 55 thousand words just to get here just so I can write God knows how many more words before they can finally call each other "Dad" and "Son". We'll get there, but by God, they're going to earn it.