Me and some of my friends came up with this script. (iâm currently hoping that trashboombanger will voice it)
Do you have any advice as to how to do panneling for it? Iâm pretty new to doing comics and Iâd really like to make this into one. Yours are SO good and your panel layouts are just amazing!
Tell me what you think and if itâd be an ok comic please?
Opening scene: Sans drags in his pet human.
âWhat the fuck were ya thinking? Huh? Letting one of those damn dogs touch ya?â
He spins them around and clasps their cheeks in his bony palms.
âYouâre mine. Ya hear me? MINE. Ainât nobody gets ta touch you but me. But I guess I gotta remind ya of that huh sweetheart?â
He drags them over to the couch and pulls them over to stand in front of him.
âNow, bend over. Over my lapâŚ.I said BEND. OVER!â
They reluctantly lie over his lap and he pulls down their pants to expose their rump.
âNowâŚIâm gonna spank ya, andâ Iâm not gonna be nice about it.â
âooh, your sorry huh?â
âSorry for what? I cant heaaar you.â
âWow, that was a loud scream. Aww, youâre starting to bruise a little. hmm?â His voice is laced with false sympathy.
âYouâre sorry for letting them touch ya? RightâŚI believe that.â His voice is laced with sarcasm and he slaps them again, hard.
âQuitcher squirming pet! Ohh hoh..what is this? hehâŚyer all wet. Ya seem ta be liking this hmphâŚdoesnât seem like much of a punishment if yer liking itâ his voice is incredulous at finding his pet wet and wanting.
âno? It hurts? Well goddamn right it hurts! It shouldhurt.â Irritation laces his voice but then it dips in register as an idea comes to him. Â
âmmmâŚbut the sight of ya like thisâŚhearing ya screaminâ for meâŚ.what if I touch ya here? hehâŚnow those squeals I likeâŚhow about if I just trace the tip of my finger hereâŚ..mmm y'know petâŚI think Iâve gotta better idea to show ya who ya belong to.â
He chuckles lowly and the sound of clothing being shed could be heard.
âBy the time Iâm done with ya, the only thing youâll be able to think of is me, the only thing youâll want is me. Touching ya, tasting yaâŚ.fucking you.â
He half humms, half growls slightly as his voice ghosts over their ear, soft and sensual.
âNow, letâs get started. Pet.â
Ahhh, thank you for trusting me enough to ask about that! ;;U;;
And Iâm glad you like my comicsâ layout <33
Iâm afraid Iâm not the best person you couldâve gone to for tips but Iâm going to try my best! (I succ at explaining)
LONG response, tips and examples under the cut:
snowghoul
tangentwithtanner
andulkaphoto
gummygunk
2087
ellievsbear
