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Hello!! Ty for the req these are very cool,, i went w the holloway one since atp ive made so many paulkins ones LMAO

Honestly LOVEEE this one ty!!

Hello!! Ty for the req these are very cool,, i went w the holloway one since atp ive made so many paulkins ones LMAO

Honestly LOVEEE this one ty!!

He makes her look like a selfish cheater, like a deadbeat. That couldn't be farther from the truth. She does everything she can to gain access to Max. He's too poisoned against her because of his father. She tries so hard to connect and teach him to be a better fucking person. He closes off. She's a fallible mother, and so maybe it's naive to think "there's a good boy in there somewhere, I know he is." It's not fair to the other parents who have to watch their children suffer at the hands of a bully who "has some good" buried deep inside beneath the insecurities and aggression. But she has to believe it's possible. Because she loves her son despite it all.

And then Max is dead. In little pieces under the floorboards of a rotting house. And then so are two other kids from the same school, with mothers she's seen at meetings and at school events. They get to grieve openly. It's Hatchetfield, so no one really gives a shit about any of these kids, but they can still grieve.

Skylar doesn't get to grieve. Because all she hears, from the teens AND their parents, is how awful he was. How glad they were when he disappeared. And here comes the mother of the bully, wondering if she has a right to attend the funerals of Richie and Ruth and pay her respects to those families. They don't do the same for her. They won't. They have no respects to pay to a cruel boy who caused their kids hell. It's her fault. She didn't do enough, obviously. It must mean she didn't care and she didn't try. But of course that's not true. She was powerless. She never had a fucking chance. No one gave her one.

nightmares

Jepschitz? At MY prom???? More likely than you think

Jason is constantly straightening out Richie's catastrophically rumpled shirts prom fit included. Yes Rich makes the same joke every time he does it. "Ooohh don't shove me in a locker <3 omg noooo don't pull me closer noooo"

Olive Lipschitz takes one william pictures of them before prom and makes them late. She's bi herself she doesn't gaf who Richie dates

with one exception

A historically accurate Odyssey would:

-be in Greek (Homeric or Epic)

-have Greek actors

-be filmed solely in Greece and surrounding areas

-would include scenes/characters usually left out of adaptations

-would not include scenes/characters from the Iliad or making modern references.

There are other things I could add. Westerners telling a non-western story and so on. Not as a general complaint, that's a much larger discussion, but as specific to this point. It does have to do with this being "historical accurate," though. So consider that, as well.

it’s a fantastical world. you can’t make a historically accurate Odyssey because it is a fantasy story. it does not in any ~technical~ sense even take place in our world.

a “historically-accurate” version of the Odyssey is as definitionally impossible as a “scientifically-accurate” version of The Little Mermaid.

how the turn tables

A historically accurate Odyssey would:

-be in Greek (Homeric or Epic)

-have Greek actors

-be filmed solely in Greece and surrounding areas

-would include scenes/characters usually left out of adaptations

-would not include scenes/characters from the Iliad or making modern references.

There are other things I could add. Westerners telling a non-western story and so on. Not as a general complaint, that's a much larger discussion, but as specific to this point. It does have to do with this being "historical accurate," though. So consider that, as well.

Great dialogue can come from radical emotional honesty. But in most real conversations, people

dodge questions

answer indirectly

lie (badly)

change the subject

crack jokes to avoid serious answers

lie (convincingly)

say half of what they mean

tell the truth but get so anxious/angry/defensive others now think they're lying

If your dialogue feels unnatural, it might be because everyone is saying exactly what they think, or articulating their thoughts too well. Try letting characters hide things instead.

Your two characters are having a conversation, but each one is having a different conversation. They should always reply to what they think the other person is saying, and they should always be wrong about their assumption.

Now, obviously, like any writing advice, this rule is meant to be broken. Any writing advice you are given is more like... a guideline.