Allison Fedewa

Context- I'm not entirely sure what the "context" of my paper was because I'm not really sure what it means... But I think that it means why did I write what I wrote. I discussed the technology aspects of dentistry because there were a lot of aspects of dentistry that I didn't understand and was very very confused about. I didn't know that it was important to realize how to use the technology that is provided in dentistry and how everything works. I point to this in my paper by discussing that there are a lot of other technologies like chairs, tools, charts, and toothbrushes that people don't often realize are a part of dentistry.

I don't have too many questions about project 4 but the big one was that I'm not sure exactly how my project 2 really went so I dont really understand what needs to be done to fix it. THe other question I have is how much editing is supposed to be done and what we are doing it for. I think in order to answer these questions I will be emailing my professor to clarify. I just need to go through the guidelines for project 2 and then through the paper I wrote and figure out who my audience is and what needs to happen with it and what needs to happen with the paper to make it more professional and worthwhile. I got this.

Project 3 definitely went a lot better for me than the other projects did. I liked that all we had to do was tell a story. It makes the writing process a lot easier than usual because all you have to do is act like you're talking to a friend. Maybe I completely missed the ball on this project, because it seemed waaaay easier than I thought. It was actually kind of hard to remember that I don't want to have a really intense conclusion or end, I just want to finish with details from my story. Again I kind of had an issue with the peer review process because I didn't really get any feedback. I never get any comments or criticism towards my paper, which makes the editing process a lot harder. I think that I kind of got the paper right towards the end with comments from the professor, but that takes away from the peer comments. It was a good process over all though, I thought I did really well and I'm hoping I get the grade I thought I would! Next time I need to do my peer reviews sooner so they have more time to see what a peer review needs to show so that I get better comments!

I guess I"m not sure what you can mess up with MLA formatting in these types of papers because there is no citations. I feel like that means that it is really really difficult to mess it up, but they still did a good job!

I think that in order to revise my paper I am going to be double checking the flow of my paper, because that was the biggest issue I found in others. Unfortunately, I didn't get any reviews so I'm not really sure what all I need to work on... but I will decide more once I get reviews. It'll be good for me to go over the flow but also to make sure I'm definitely following the prompt, by rereading it and making sure again.

All in all I thought this piece really responded well to our prompt. The only thing I am not sure of is that it didn't really tell a story and it wasn't as detailed as I thought it should be. My understanding was that we were supposed to focus solely on one or two events, and go into a lot of detail as opposed to share minor details about multiple events. Other than that though, the prompt appeared to be right on target and really told a story about the author's past and how they feel about technology as well as the experiences they've had with it.

I really wish the peer review process had a little bit more time because it seems like I never really get a proper response, I simply just get either no feedback, or just one or two comments. I definitely appreciate the comments given by the teacher, but sometimes I get confused as to how to edit the rest of my paper, the parts that weren't commented on. Most of my process just involves fixing what the teacher commented on, and then re reading my paper to double check that it makes sense. I think I need a little help in editing.

I remember that the room always smelled like new paper, which sounds weird, but it's one of my favorite smells so I loved going to the class. i also remember hating the computer that I had to work with because the keys were always sticky on the keyboard and it took a ton of effort to push them down. It was a really great class, and a great memory!

Onfe of the big things I noticed in this essay, right off the bat was how Scribner pointed out that there are extremes in literacy. THe standard amount of literacy knowledge and use for teachers is completely different than that for say, artists, or some other profession involving very little writing. However what I did notice was that Scribner was consistent it pointing out that EVERYONE uses writing and reading and needs to be literate to some point. My view of literacy has changed a little from reading this essay. I've noticed that literacy definitions have changed multiple times throughout history and that there really can't be an exact definition of literacy, you just have to be as literate as possible.

I think that Ramsdell has a lot to say about literacy that makes a lot of sense. Her view on the Who I Am story is really cool. I think that a lot of people have moments that define them throughout their lives, and yet when people tell stories about it, it is often done in really ineffective ways. I think that her entire essay was really interesting, but I completely loved that she discussed how the new versions of stories are involving beginnings, not necessarily middles or ends, just beginnings. This really hit home with me. I think this is a really valid point to make. Even when just telling a story to friends, once you make your point, there is always more to tell. I think that just because people are still living and adding to their stories, it is hard to find ends.

I"m not entirely sure I answered taht question exactly the way I was supposed to, however, it is completely true. I honestly have no idea when my first experience with digital technologies was, or what it was for that matter. All I know is that I am very confident with my abilities with technology because I have been using it for so long and am pretty good at figuring things out. I also rely really heavily on technology, and I think that most people do these days, whether they realize it or not. It also helps other people, like with the lifesaving equipment at the waterpark. If we were not as advanced in digital technologies we would not have AEDs or automatic external difibrulators. We also wouldn't have rebreather masks, O2 ports or anything like that, which would be a huge problem! I'm not sure if I'm on the right track with this project, but I guess I"ll just go with it for now!

I definitely have a couple of questions about project 3. I guess the biggest one would have to be "what is meant by a story?" Is it literally just telling a story like we would be telling a friend? Or is it more formal than that and more explanatory of how it affected us? I will figure this out by reading sample papers, and if I'm still confused I will contact my professor. Another question that I have is what is really meant by technology? For example, I wanted to discuss the waterpark that I work at and the lifesaving equipment we use, however, I don't really know if it counts as technology. I guess for that one I will probably just go with that and when my paper gets edited I will understand if I'm wrong or not. Other than that, I think I'm good with this project. I have a few thoughts I could use, and I think this project will work out!

2. I thought the second essay was really great too! It seems really interesting to me that there is that much technology being used in journalism today. I guess I am so used to thinking about journalists writing articles in papers and magazines, not necessarily tweeting or facebooking people. It was a really good idea to insert the story about the sports broadcaster that tweeted false information. It just goes to show how much knowledge of technology and writng you need to stay on top of your career. I thought this essay was well put together and the different stories and in text references made it really easy and interesting to read.

I got some really great feedback on my Project 2 paper. I realized that my introduction needs a lot of work in order to stand up to the rest of my essay. THerefore, my first step in reviewing this essay will be figuring out how to make my introduction stronger and more beneficial to my paper. I also realized I need to restructure my argument about writing in dentistry, as I sort of made it seem like it isn't that important with digital charts and things like that. I will make my second step restructuring that part of my essay. Finally I will go back through and make sure that I have a lot of in text citations becuase I sort of left those out on accident. Once I have done this, I think I'll be set!

How will they access my work? I know my teacher will be able to access it through elireview. As I make my paper better I will potentially use it as part of a larger research paper for a research symposium within my college and present it in a presentation and post it on the website.

Gwen Essex "Educational Technology in Dentistry"Michigan State University Library.University of San Francisco, March 2009. Web. 9 June 2012.

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