Another thing I love in fiction is when dialogue immediately echoes the same phrasing used in the narration. It can be startling and funny.
Ex.:
As they made their way back to the car, Farad felt the prickle of eyes upon him. He looked around and spotted the culpritsâperched on the roof of a van, a gaggle of dour-faced teenagers was watching them judgmentally.
âDonât look now,â he whispered to his companion, âBut a gaggle of dour-faced teenagers is watching us judgementally.â
This can be used as a great character establishing trick too, eg.
What the fuck, she thought, and then because she was never the sort of person to sit on her feelings, said aloud âWhat the fuck?â
It works great the other direction, too.
âFuck yourself dead, you half-blazed, fully-degenerate asshole!â
The half-blazed, fully-degenerate asshole in question declined to do so, and instead threw herself bodily at the other woman with the full intention to claw her to shreds.
Just say neil gaimon and terry pratchett are your faves and move on
Theyâre not. Theyâre also not the only authors to employ narrative humor.


















