#sueish

OC for: Kingdom Hearts Name: Yumi Sazha Age: 17 Birthday: May 1, 1995 Blood type: B Illnesses: Insomnia

Insomnia isn’t an illness. It can be a symptom for another disease but it most definitely isn’t an illness

Eye color: Blood Red (Left Eye), Gold (Right eye)

Stick with one eye color. Gold eyes are usually associated with the darkness/heartless.

Job: Keyblade Wielder

Really not a part of the Kingdom Hearts plot. Being a keyblade wielder isn’t something you can just go in to. Everyone would do it if it were like that

Side: Twilight Keyblade: Shadow Ripper (Attack: +3 Magic: +5; poor reach)

How did she get the keyblade in the first place? Readers will want to know this!

Moves: Any dark-based and fire-based attack/spell; Dark Barrier Shotlock: Flame Salvo D-Links/Summons: Odin (FFXIII Version), Hades (FFVII summon), and Hecatoncheir (FFXIII Version) Personality: Yumi doesn’t trust anyone, unless they are from her home world, and mostly works alone. Very stubborn, distant, and revengeful. Doesn’t like stupid questions/happy people (Except for Len…he’s seven), but is protective over kids. Isn’t afraid of the dark. (I like to call her the “Uchiha Sasuke” of the KH world)

There has to be a reason why she is like this. Especially after reading through the ”fun facts” and seeing that she wasn’t like that when she was a child 

Occupation: Make all worlds one world once again Fun Facts!: • Yumi’s world is called “Hikari”, despite it’s a wasteland  • She wasn’t always like this; when she was little (5), she was very kind and caring •She hides her right eye behind her hair, which is much longer than the rest of her hair •Is the leader of an organization called “The Remaining”

What side is this organization on? Are they evil or good? What methods do they use to achieve their goals?

•Oddly, the day that the χ-Blade was “destroyed” (In my fanfic LoaDH, not BBS) , her home world got destroyed also by an unknown and undesirable explosion (Cause unknown), leaving her and five others, Hisoka Usotsuki (19), Len Pentatonix (7), Minato Hoshi (22), Crystal Estheim (14), and Gakupo Valefor (17), the only ones left living on the planet.

There has to be a reason for the explosion. Even if it takes a long time to find out the cause.

 Being my first review, I really hope that I helped out as much as I possibly could. With a few modifications, your OC will be so awesome! (Man you can tell that I’m the “new guy” -_-) In my opinion, your character had some Sue-ish traits, but is not a Sue! I hope this helped a lot and feel free to message us if you have any questions!

With love, trust, and pixie dust,