#johaan

So... I re-read the "Home" comic by Kique7 from the start until the recent page (p. 838).

I have read its prequel, "Asmundr," before "Home" started. It's been a while since I stopped reading since October 2023.

I have seen many posts criticizing the comic and its problems in characters and plot writing. I'd like to share a few of mine. Don't expect them to be very big, but I'll try my best.

Now, I saved some pages. What will I do with them?

- Plot breakdown.

Well, my favorite part to start with is to break down the plots in order, like the video essay "Brave was a disappointment" by eliquorice. (I recommend you check it out)

I would also like to talk about the relationships that are never mentioned at all, mentioned only a few numerous times, like Ronja and Johaan's daughter-father relationship.

- The visuals of the World-Building in panels.

Which is my most favorite one to work on. I noticed that the landscapes are a little similar to each other. The only ones I can recognize are the Meteor and its secret passages, the fallen village where Zilas was murdered, the Orion Origin island, the Southspear tribe, Midnightgarde Tribe, Lowglade,

- Characters, the good, the bad, and the problematic.

There are already tumblr posts criticizing the characters. I'll make a list of links in a new post.

- Plots that could have been added, not forgotten.

The characters need to remind the audience what is happening and what is affecting them.

Like Keirr, he could at least tell Rohvanion about Zilas's soul finally resting. Why? Because if they stay in Aendra and someone dies (even for Asmundr pack members) before the Sky Gods come back) shouldn't they at least know how to handle their afterlife? Burial does not help since Aendra is cursing their soul to wonder like ghouls at night. After rereading, this curse began when the first dog landed there, at least 30 years ago.

- (maybe) I will make a post of how I could handle the Rogio character writing.

It is confirmed that he comes from a tribe that got destroyed by a prayer gone wrong by a god. His fear towards gods or spirits is not shown often or even at all. But he did say that he did not believe in them until he got to Sappphire elk.

I will definitely make a list of panels where the word "love" or "lovers" is mentioned.

(cause this comic reminds us every 10 pages per say that love is in the way...)

Damn my love for this guy just shot up. +50

He’s the nice one who will give you freshly baked cookies 

(A/N: I’m gonna start uploading little snippets of writing about my sonas as I work on the main story, most of them are sad, sorry)

She sighs as she pulls out the cassette player, it was a way they used to send messages. They thought the old earth technology was cool and no one else had one, so that’s what they used to communicate. He would still send them to her after she left the planet. The universal mail system would show up with them. She left a lot of them back where she lives on the hub planet, but she always kept one on her. Birthday celebrations were always extravagant on her planet, even for no royals. They were one of the few things she missed from her home. And so every year, to at least giver herself some semblance of her home, she listened to to the last tape he had sent her. She puts it into the cassette player and hits the play button.

Mads Mikkelsen movies.