Introductory note: In this critique. I will be criticizing my friend Shawn who went to camiguin when he was still a little child.

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Noel Niño M. Seriño

Critique

The paper is about a travel log in Camiguin, the author of the paper is my fellow classmate, Shawn Vincent R. Quina and he has twice already gone to Camiguin. He explains his experience in Camiguin and him spending time with his family. He had a memorable experience and could not forget the beautiful wonders that he saw. He said he enjoyed one of the beautiful sights because it had a great atmosphere and him mentioning the view of sunset and watching clear blue water. He went with his family to the White Island via boat; he did not expect that it was unlike a normal beach due to no pollution and warm sand. After the island, they went back to the villa which he said was rented by one of his family members. They went strolling to other places exploring places on where to eat whether it was an eatery or restaurant. They also played sports from a vacant court near the villa. From the middle to the end he began to explain why he partook in the journey. He explains more about his family and him leaving a memory to Camiguin and that was setting foot on the place together with his family.

             The weakness of the paper I would quite say there would only be a few. The first would be sorting out the paper to make the paper clean. Lastly, him repeating the name “Camiguin” countless of times on the paper. The strength of the paper I would say has a lot, mainly the description of the place that he went to like him describing “the sunset and the clear blue water of Camiguin”. His introduction was good because he was leaving hints on what place he is going and that is Camiguin. His body is quite good because he was able to recall what he was doing and was mentioning the activities that he was doing and him exploring different places with his family. The emphasis on family in the body is what made the paper better because he said a lot of reasonable reasons why he went along with the journey. The reasons would be to spend more time with the family to make up for the loss due to school works and projects. When I read that part it was quite relatable to me because I too love my family and would do so much just to spend time with them.

             I highly recommend this paper to anyone who loves to read about the experience of others in their vacations. I recommend this paper to those who are so family-oriented and people who simply just want to read because it is a very good output that was made by author of the paper.