i love how u show dfyās jk struggling with his transition from siren to human. a lot of writers typically treat the whole transition as a happy, positive thing without ever mentioning the stress/regret involved in adjusting to such a drastic change. love how u did that! such a realistic reaction.
THANK YOU omg this makes me so happy!! realism is all iāve ever wanted (sorta at least)
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Hi lovely! I really enjoyed part 11 and I felt so many emotions :O I really don't want this to sound pushy or aggressive or anything, but do you know when you will post the last part? I was just wondering but pLEASE TAKE YOUR TIME! I am just a curious gal and I don't want to pressure you to post asap!
hello!! iām glad you liked it!! iām doing the final editing and double-checking to make sure i didnāt forget anything, so like... literally any moment lol. today-tomorrow?Ā
I think you did well at splitting the chapters up and ended at a good point- anything that doesnāt make sense now will align in the next part anyway! Also, the smut made me appreciate the lost art of handjobs (they donāt get enough credit anymore)and I think youāve done a great job of showing the dynamic of their relationship as they navigate so much trauma and change together while still trying to love each other in a healthy way. Tis beautiful :ā)
thank you so much!! yeah i always aim to end the chapters at cliffhangers (more or less) and since the next part will be the last, then hopefully everything will be tied together... also the lost art of handjobs lmao!! but i agree!! i wanted the first time they did something to be intimate and what better way than face to face (well, face to face and face close to face lol)
Ā i was a little nervous at the other anon (if youāre reading this, donāt feel bad for telling me your thoughts, i donāt expect everyone to always know my intentions, especially when i couldāve wanted that outcome just as much) because although they have problems of their own-both of them-their love is healthy. itās more like whatever problems they have, and the circumstances, affect the relationship... they havenāt been together romantically for very long after all and they need to figure things out. so thank you for telling me, that was more what i was going for!! <3
DFY PART 11 IS SO GOOD!!! IT MADE ME SO SOFT BUT THEN I WAS SO SAD AT THE END i just want them to be happy :-( and have lil baby children who love the water :-( and just live a happy life :-( but nonetheless your writing is impeccable and i canāt wait to read the last part :)
ābaby childrenā i- thank you!! iām having a hard time liking it myself, i just feel like maybe i shouldāve ended it sooner, after he got legs and all... i feel like iām just dragging it out and that itās not good anymore *sigh* but thank you for liking it!! also i like that your sad smileys have noses but not the happy ones
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Chp 11 was interesting. I got the impression that their relationship was much less healthy than I originally thought (not a criticism, it feels almost fitting). MC is obsessively infatuated, gushing 'I love you's nonstop, whilst JK is deeply insecure and depends on her attention and validation. He only said it back like once, after the bj. I didnt expect JK to get angry over the scales. What a twist! I could be wrong about everything but these are my initial thoughts.
your thoughts are honestly more interesting than the chapter lmao. i didnāt really want to split it up into two parts but it got too long and i had to, but if i hadnāt, iām very sure your thoughts had been different. i can never discuss anything without writing super much but oh well lol. hereās my take on it in case anyone else is confused because while your thoughts could definitely beĀ āright,ā (idk how to explain it iām tired lmao) itās not what i had in mind or really want it to look like.
i donāt see her as obsessively infatuated at all, i see her as in love and doing the most she can to help jk. she went so long without even being able to admit to herself that she liked him because it would beĀ āwrongā. at part 8/9 she told him that she loved him the first time, and it was because she felt like he needed to hear it, he was having some sort of break down and she just wanted to help. earlier that day, when she asked him to move in with her, she accepted hisĀ āno,ā and offered the apartment if he wanted to live there with someone else. everything she does, she does because she loves him and wants him to be happy, especially since his life has been so hard. he said that he regretted the procedure and she got really worried. i think iād say that her focus lies more with wanting him to know that he is loved than that she loves him if you get what iām saying. and she also tells him that she loves him because she knows that she was so close to losing him, and having anything unsaid would break her.
in this chapter she does look a little obsessed but itās more with the scales, iād say. he left really abruptly and it traumatized her (she didnāt get to say goodbye like she planned, she would never know what happened to him and she knew heād be alone, she blamed herself for it as well) and the only thing she had to remember him by and keep her sane (sheād known a siren after all) was the scales. she feels like he might leave again and she just wants to make sure sheād get through that as well. not only were they a reminder of him, but also of that time of her life that sheād thought she left behind when he left.
jk is insecure, heās always sorta been, even though he isnāt really by nature. for a very long time, heās lived under extreme circumstances. at the lab he was just wary of humans in general since theyād done him really no good, like, ever. but when heāsĀ āhuman,ā heās undergone huge, risky surgeries and everything is new to him and he has so many emotions, and in a certain way, he doesnāt want to be too much because if he doesnāt have reader and the others, then he really has no one to help him. thatās all beside the fact that he loves her just as much as she loves him, sheās just saying it a lot more to help him focus on positive things while heās going through so much, and because he just isnāt thatĀ āwordyā lmao. heās come a long way and itās easy to forget that he wasnāt even used to talking before reader showed up at the tank. he isnāt as good at expressing himself, it isnāt really stated, but he just sorta assumes that she knows how much he loves her.Ā
when it comes to the attention and validation, yes, he wants it, he really does. heās never been loved or cared for like that before, and to him itās addicting, and since sheās happy to give it to him, it just always happens. but again, iād say itās more because he loves her and wants to be close to her rather than feeling that his insecurity demands it.Ā
this was super long and i donāt want you to feel like iĀ ācorrectedā you in any way lmao, we all work differently and see things differently. i tend to sometimes miss things because for some reason i think yāall live in my head and see everything the way i do lol i really appreciate your thoughts and they are completely valid, you obviously could interpret the story like that even though thatās not really what i wanted. i really look forward to hearing your reaction from the last part!!Ā
Me at MermanJk: hun. Do you want YN to cut your toe nails and put them in a little box too? Itās like scrapbooking. Look YN has a hoarding thing look how many boxes she has. Be patient you brat.
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Forgot to add. Your smut? Amazing. It feel soft. Intimate. Loving. I wish. I only wish. You made me wishful. So you did succeed. The nails clippings is a joke Iām sorry if it could be read as a critique but I just thought about it and found it funny that the solution could be YN making Jk sit on the bathroom and collect his toenail clippings and putting them on like a trophy case. Itās dumb. And hilarious.
honestly... what? i just donāt really understand? he wasnāt mad that she kept the scales, he was upset because she appeared to get angry at him for accidentally destroying some of them... and they meant so much to her because she thinks heāll be gone one day and she wants to have that reminder of him? he left them for her before he left and she clung to them because she didnāt really have anything else to remember him by... i donāt really get where the brat part comes from either, sure he mightāve overreacted a little, but iād say his feelings were valid, and youāll definitely see why in the next part. thank you for liking the smut though!!