#critique notes

Faculty Crit Notes for The Stories These Walls Will Tell 

Overall, I think the project communicated my concept very well. Most of this was because of the way the project controlled itself, and acted against what I predicted would happen (instead of the plant collapsing and dying from being cut, I was more strongly affected by the fact that it went against my morals and its sap made me nauseous.) I think the project continues to exemplify this paradoxical result even after critique, as I intend to let it live and finally give it water. After three days of watering now, it has begun to perk up. Eventually the plant will lose all of its altered leaves and go back to a “normal” state, and I think I will too. 

It was brought up that perhaps my ideas could have been communicated in a clearer (?) sense if I had only used the cellophane to fill in the circles. I can understand how it would perhaps clear things up a bit, while also creating a beautiful optical sight. However, I purposely chose the candy wrappers, condom, and money because of the connotations that they have in our current culture, which is exactly what I am trying to comment on. Without the bar codes, advertising, faces, and words used on these materials, I don’t think I would have been able to make as overt a statement, or at least a spectacle. 

Classnotes:

Critique

- too many colors but scheme works / distribute visual weight

- more hierarchy on menu items

-see depression in two aspects: 1) depressed with no choice- brain chemicals 2) act depressed/extreme intentionally

-depression 1 cutting 2 suicide -two pieces

-use grey colors (the meaning of grey zone/ grey area)

-using wall connors

-SHADOWS on the face can show negative emotions more vividly