#criticism please

again, I would love some criticism!

So, first things first, this is @rotworld's (aka Rotpeach's) adorable OC, the Rotdoll. ♡♡♡ Secondly, this was done with markers on a paper called "Yupo Medium", which is a synthetic, non-absorbent tree-free paper. I was gifted the paper, and decided to take it for a spin. It's actually very nice to use with markers, as it allows you to get a sort of watercolor-like quality to your drawings. It also lets metallic pens (liquid chrome and the sort) pool and dry into a smooth, HIGHLY REFLECTIVE finish. I never heard of this paper before, so, if anyone is interested, that's my take on it. Finally, any constructive criticism is welcome, especially if someone has experience with markers and this particular paper. Thanks!

Here is a character of mine by the name os Kyle. A trans-male who is in rehab for heroine and cocaine addiction.

Here’s Aria! My spider demon princess. I’m very proud of this art so, I would love criticism! She is from the same universe as Neon pop! I’ve never drawn her on the computer before. I love her and, of course as Neon Pop she won’t look exactly the same by the time I’m done

The sharp blade under the dim light as he twirled it around his pale fingers. "Please..." I whispered. "Don't-" he placed a finger on my lips and pulled my face close to his, as if to kiss me goodbye. he gathered a small section of my long, dark hair and sliced if off with the sharp piece of metal. I made a small, scream-like noise and I fell to the ground. "To remember you." he blew a kiss and stuffed the chunk of hair into his pocket. "Do it." A voice boomed out from the darkness. He stepped forward and gave the glimmering blade one last twirl before plunging it into my chest. The metal was cold. The blood was warm. So this is what death feels like.