#clemin

citron | clemin | gerine

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I’m actually submitting for a friend whose a bit nervous to submit. It’s from her batch of first ocs. I’m not a fan of how the symbol came out lol

I can fiddle with the symbol! I think this troll looks really cute.

Universe: Alternia

Name: Clemin Tyynie

I get that this is supposed to be a splitting up of Clementine and that’s cute, but it reads a little funny… The last name specifically… I think you could Probably sneak by keeping it the way it is, but if I were to recommend a change, it’d be to Tangor Rodier, tangor being the crossbreed of fruit that Clementine is and Rodier being the man who first bred the Clementine (in the garden of his orphange!).

Age: 6 sweeps

Blood: mutant bright orange

How did he manage to slip by unnoticed? Was he in the caverns of a particularly friendly couple of jades? Did the Gibbon steal him before he could get killed?

Lusus: Gibbon Monkey (bronze blood who adopted him)

I do gotta wonder why a gibbon. Is it bc they eat fruit? I guess that’s fair. I might recommend a change to barbary macaque? If only because those are the only monkey native to Algeria, where the Clementine first arose. 

Sign: it’s supposed to look like a peeled clementine

I love that idea, it’s so cute ;v;.

Trollian handle: citrusScribe[CS]

This is a minor change, but how about citrousScrivener? Citrous just means of or relating to citrus and scrivener is a clerk/scribe/notary. It means about the same thing, but is just Homestuck-level Fancy Wording.

Typing quirk: capitalizes O

Strife Specibus: Frisbeekind

Is that because it’s round and cute? That’s fair, but you’ll definitely have to add something tangentially related to that to his interests!

Fetch modus: Peel-he has to peel open the object to get it

Personality: Clemin is a cinnamon roll. He’s easy going and relaxed, which is strange because he’s a mutant who could die at any time. He tries to surround himself with friends but often fails. People are suspicious of his happy attitude. It takes a lot to get him angery, but when he is he’ll give you the cold shoulder and act sour all the time.

I do like this a lot… I’m thinking a lot about his writing tendencies and the origin of clementines. Maybe his ancestor could’ve run an orphanage where he acted as a refuge for mutants? So he could have that same sort of protective urge, but he’s less Directly Motivated and more likes keeping to himself, which is why people are so sus of his happy attitude. It’s kind of ominous when a troll spends hours writing and then won’t share the stuff! 

Interests: writing. He loves all types of writing fiction. He carries around a notebook full of papers, and it’s all filled with almost unreadable writing. He refuses to share it with anyone though.

Maybe he could enjoy a good nighttime picnic/walk in the park, too, for the frisbee thing. A park is a great place to write, so it makes sense that he’d like to sit down and pass the time there sometimes.

Lunar sway: Prospit

God Tier: Rogue of Light

I like this idea… Someone who needs to learn how to share the information, needs to passively transfer the Knowledge and the Luck and the Visibility around. Maybe even takes it all on himself despite the danger in order to allow his friends to be sneaky!

Land: Land of Clementines and Sunshine

Oooh, is the sunshine being directed somewhere else, leaving the trees without sun? And he has to steal the sunlight back for the trees?

Design:

Horns: I wanted them to look a little rounder, so I, of course, rounded the stripes on them out a little bit more. 

Face: I moved the face proportions around a little tiny bit. I just felt some stuff was off, so editing it was. I also made the teeth less sharp. We don’t have any concrete things to go w/ on Every mutantblood’s teeth, but Karkat, at least, has nubby teeth, and so nubby teeth I gave this fruit man. Eating clementines is easier with blunt teeth anyways.  Symbol: I kept the general vibe, but cleaned it up a little and made everything look neater! 

Outline/colors: I fiddled with his outline and colors some to make him look more appropriate and in-place with the style! 

Thank you for sharing!