Opening two scenes to Brother, Can You Spare a Dime? written years ago. It's extremely inaccurate and I'm in the process (the slow, slow process) of rewriting, but I'm so creatively inert right now I want to share something just to get it out there.
If you do read all the way through and have feedback, I'm open to hearing any thoughts.
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It wasnât anything out of the ordinary that brought Russia to the steelworks on the outskirts of Magnitogorsk.
It also wasnât out of the ordinary to see someâŠstrange names on the workersâ registar. People came from all over Europe and Asia to the mighty Soviet Socialist Republic.
The name on the list wasnât in itself unusual for a Westerner, either.
What it was, was familiar.
âCall this worker into the office, Comrade Denisov.â Russia tapped a name on the paperwork heâd been given.
The factory manager, Denisov, checked the list and gave the name to the factory foreman. âAs soon as itâs reasonable to do so, bring him up. Donât indicate anything to him.â
Only when the foreman had gone did the manager show any expression, and even then, just the merest frown. âIs he suspected of subversive activities, Comrade Commissar?â
Ivan simply looked over the rest of the paperwork from his seat in the dingy little managerâs office. âIf he is, he will be investigated thoroughly.â
âIs there a problem with his papers?â
âIf there is, it will be taken care of.â
The manager frowned further, but he opened the filing cabinet and, after a quick search, pulled out the personnel file. He didnât open it, just dropped it on the desk and sat back down quietly.
Ivan didnât reach for it.
After a long moment where the air grew thicker, the manager said, âFor what my opinion is worth, heâs a good worker. Doesnât speak Russian very well but understands it well enough; heâs competent and diligent with his duties. Weâve never had a serious problem with him here.â
One raised eyebrow and a level stare from Ivan, and he shut up.
Quiet stretched between them again, Ivan smirking internally as the manager noticeably sweated and held unnaturally still. Good, Ivan thought. If he doesnât learn when to shut his mouth, heâs going to end up getting someone in troubleâmost likely himself.
The foreman returned, the worker in question and the smell of machine oil and welding torches following him in. The worker was a young man, tall, broad-shouldered and hungry-looking. His clothesâoveralls, shirt, leather boots and work gloves, newsboy capâwere grimy and clearly on their last legs, patched and mended all over and hanging looser than simple comfort required. His grime-smeared glasses needed repair as well; one arm was taped on. Soot from the factory floor smeared across his boyish face and darkened his blond hair, but Ivan had been right. It was him. Those sky-blue eyes scanned the people in the roomâthen double-took to Russia and went huge. Beneath the soot, his face bleached of color.
The foreman nodded to Russia, gestured to the man beside him. âComrade Yonz.â
âItâs pronounced âJones,â yes?â Russia said with a thin smile. Only then did he take up Alfred F. Jonesâ personnel file from the desk.
The office took on a chill, and the two human workers shared a look.
âRecords indicate youâve been here forââ Ivan checkedâ âfour months. Yes?â
âYes,â America said in a dead, colorless voice.
âComrade Denisov, has he been here for four months?â Ivan said with no indication heâd heard the other man at all.
America pressed his lips thin.
âIf the file says so, Comrade Braginsky, then yes,â the manager replied. âTo my recollection, that seems correct.â
âAnd where were you before that?â Ivan watched the other Nation closely.
Completely impassive, except for the one hand he balled into a fist at his side.
âDid you not understand? You do speak Russian, yes?â
âI being at United States. You being know that. In papers.â With a nod he indicated the personnel file, avoiding Russiaâs eyes.
âHm.â Wonder if his bosses know where heâs flown off to. Iâll have to look into thatâfor all we know, they sent him here. âYour Russian is terrible. Still,â and itâd been so long since Ivan had gotten to condescend to him, it felt like getting to stretch after too long sitting still, âIâve been informed you understand whatâs said around you, or at least some of it. Speak up if you canât understand anymore and need to switch to English.â He made a show of searching the file, comparing with his governmental paperwork, letting America squirm.
The rude little capitalist probably was on the inside, considering how he worked his jaw, but America didnât crack that easily. Russia hadnât expected him to throw a tantrum anyway; it just felt good to rub it in his face. You lost, you bourgeois dog. We, the people, won. And you know it. Here you are, begging for scraps.
âWell, it appears your work visa is in order. For now.â Ivan held up the single thin slip of carbon-copied paper, made somehow pathetic by its isolation from the rest of the file. âAlthough it runs out in another four months. Do you plan to be gone by then?â
âYes.â
The answer wiped the smirk off Russiaâs pale face. âYouâreally? You plan to leave after only eight months?â
âI being at Magnitogorsk for working,â America said in his tortured Russian with its hard-edged accent. âIt is all.â
Russia frowned slightly, but snapped the paper down in the file and moved on. âYour file indicates you work on the soldering line. That is correct, yes?â
The little curl in Americaâs lip said he knew exactly what Russia planned on doing here, but he still answered, âYes, soldering line.â
Russia again looked right past him. âComrade Denisov?â
âYes, heâs on the soldering line.â
âAnd you work day shift, six days per week. Correct?â
His hands flexed by his sides. âDay shift, six day week. Yes.â
âComrade Denisov?â
âYes, Comrade Braginsky, thatâs correct.â
âAnd it says here thatââ Ivan had to double-check the file. âIt doesnât say that youâve ever missed a day, or been late.â
âYes.â
ThatâŠcanât be right. Not Alfred F. Jones, who doesnât show up to a war until heâs promised a reward and a hot dinner and even then sleeps through half of his work, who allows entrance into his home for refugees only if theyâre willing to slave away for him and his industrialists without complaint. Not the man who only bothers to improve someone elseâs life if he gets paid in advance and then picks up a percentage at the end.
ââŠComrade Denisov?â
âComrade Braginsky,â the manager said in a voice starting to wear thin, âWill you be interviewing all the immigrant workers?â
âAnswer the question, Comrade Denisov.â
âIf thatâs what the file says, comrade, then yes.â
Alfred stood quietlyâalready unusual for him, in Ivanâs experienceâglaring at something to the left of Ivanâs shoulder and clasping his wrist, almost like a mockery of the military at ease.
Russia searched the file, snapping the papers as he turned them, and finally said with impatience just barely covered, âYou have no listed permanent address. Why is this?â
America opened his mouth, closed it, opened it again to say, âAddress, houseâŠstreet?â in a low voice that didnât seem directed at any of the men around him, swore in English and scratched his neck. âNoâŠno how to saying it.â
âAddress,â Russia said slowly and firmly. âWhere are you living.â Brandishing the paper, he tapped its blank line where a street and building shouldâve been listed.
The other Nation just pressed his lips together.
The foreman spoke up for the first time. âComrade Braginsky, permission to speak?â And then without waiting for that permission, continued, âComrade Yonz is known to board at the workersâ dormitories two streets overââhe gestured with his thumbââon a semi-weekly basis. He has bunked with several of the other first-shift workers, who will confirm that if asked.â
Ivan searched the foremanâs face. But aside from the fact he didnât much like the thought of his workers sharing close quarters with the capitalist, even if he couldnât form a coherent sentence, Ivan had another question. âSemi-weekly. Where do you go the rest of the time?â
Alfred had been watching the conversation and chewing his lip, but he looked Russia in the eye this time. âStreet.â
âWhat does that mean?â Ivan asked.
âDoor,â America said, flexing his fingers and shifting his feet but still holding his head up. âSleeping at door.â
This was getting frustrating. âDo you understand the words Iâm saying?â
âYes,â and he sounded nearly as frustrated as Russia, âLiving at street, sleeping at door if no room.â
It took a moment for the words to process, and Russia still wasnât quite sure heâd understood the mincemeat America made of his language. âYou cannot be serious.â
Scowling and crossing his arms, America somehow looked smaller than beforeâmore childish, certainly, but also simply unimportant. When he spoke again it came out in an unholy mix of Russian mis-conjugation and English swear words. âIt is being <<fucking>> very cold in night. I is no <<goddamn>> laughing, <<you son of a bitch>>âŠâ
Russiaâs brain spun like a tire in mud trying to make sense of it. Who in the hell was this man, because there was no way it could possibly be the America he knew. âWhen did you become so pathetic? Sleeping in a doorway, living on the street as a beggar in someone elseâs house? Were you always this weak and no one noticed; everyone simply gave you what you wanted without question?â
Beneath the soot, America reddened. Still, he held Russiaâs eye.
How did this man manage to win a war and not collapse under the strain?
âŠWell. How had he managed to remain standing for so long before collapsing?
The foreman and the manager shared another look, the kind that said if anyone asks, weâre not with him.
Turning through the pages again as if the information would magically appear, Russia said, âIf you have no permanent address, your work papers are incomplete. We cannot confirm your employment with the Number 3 Steel Mill. You are a nonentity. Your immigration papers, I can guarantee, will not hold up under scrutiny. Without the word of the factory foreman there would be no record of you ever being here.â
Again, the foreman spoke without waiting for permission. âUnder supervision, Comrade Yonz has been completely reliableâhowever, he does need instruction, sometimes repeatedly.â As he spoke, the man edged away from where Jones stood and his words came faster and colder. âThe other workers have expressed frustration at his inability to understand, and his attitudeâhe starts fights among the others.â
With every sentence America shrank a little more.
âWhat do you mean,â Russia said, each word sharp, âhe starts fights?â
âThe men say heâs overly friendly, in a mocking way. He also re-interprets instructions if, apparently, he disagrees with them. The men donât trust him,â the foreman said, watching Americaâs face from the corner of his eye. âThey also report he speaks of counter-revolutionary ideas.â
If the atmosphere in the office got any colder, the steel forges would freeze.
The manager spoke next. âComrade Braginsky, had this come to managementâs attention sooner we would of course have reported this worker to the proper authorities immediately. We would never allow him to continue disrupting production.â
âHeâs fine so long as you watch him,â the foreman explained, the harsh snap going out of his voice. âHeâs a good worker, exemplary evenâso long as heâs kept under supervision.â
âOh, Iâm certain of that,â Russia said.
But from the corner, muttered and hurried, America said in his borrowed language, <<Can I talk? You said I could switch to English.>>
Russia raised one gray-blond eyebrow, but said nothing.
<<I never tried to start any arguments, I swear,>> America continued, <<Itâs just that the guys here take it the wrong wayâor, I guess, I say it the wrong way. Nobody smiles over here, you know? And I didnâtâitâs not like I tried to start another revolution, I just said IâŠyou know, itâd be nice to have some nicer things in life. Like your own roomâor at least a roof that doesnât leak. Or a car so you donât need to wait on the train. OrâŠI mean, I get it, youâre communists; Iâm not. I say I like gold or anything shiny, everybody gets all uptight. I mention voting, even justâIâm just talking about home, thatâs all!>>
His hands started talking along with him, spinning circles and waving away poor explanations. <<Iâm not here to up-end your government. Iâm not even here in a government-approved position. Iâm just here for work, thatâs all. Just showed up and said âGive me a job,â you know? A little money, just to keep from starving. Iâm working for it; Iâm not slacking off. And Iâll be gone soon enough anyway. And Iâokay, Iâm not good at Russian, but I listen when they tell me to do something and I follow the directions, I justâsome of the ways you fellas run this place are practically Stone Age, and your guys had other American engineers giving their two cents; I thought I could help, andâŠ>>
He looked to the manager, who ignored him, and the foreman, who seemed to be floundering in the sea of foreign words and offered only a blank, confused stare. <<âŠAnd theyâve actually used some of my ideas, so, I meanâŠ>>
Ivan considered the meandering speech. He did, after all, understand English much better than America spoke Russian. And, in Russian, he said, âAnd what does your boss think about this?â
The manager started to say, âIt isnâtââ
But America, with a tired little half-smile, said, <<He told me to find work, any work, so I did. He doesnât know where I am.>>
The human who was supposedly the boss of this factory slowly closed his mouth, the disturbed frown on his face mirrored on the foremanâs.
âHmm.â Russia smiled, or rather, his lips stretched in a thin line. âAn American government official, reporting directly to the American president, spouting counter-revolutionary garbage to Soviet workersââ
<<Wait, thatâs notâ >>
ââand using our generous employment policies to disrupt production, ruin morale, eavesdrop on conversations, and gather information on Soviet business without raising suspicion. I must admit, that was one of your clever ideasâno one would ever have thought youâd sink so low as to play spy yourself.â
America just stared at Russia, his eyes huge and his mouth, for once, silent.
The two humans stared as well, at America, shock and disgust evident on their facesâalthough whether it was disgust at an American spy in their midst, or at their own immediate futures now that heâd been discovered right under their noses, it was hard to tell.
âComrade Denisov,â Russia said lightly to the manager, âThere is a security force employed by the mill, correct?â
âErâŠno, Comrade Braginsky,â the manager said.
Just barely not rolling his eyes, Russia amended his threat. âBut you can call the police to be here within a minute, yes?â
The manager picked up the telephone on his desk.
âWhich would you prefer,â Russia said to America, ârotting in jail before we deport you, or straight to interrogation and see where we go from there?â
America didnât answer.
âGet your things,â Russia said. âComrade Foreman, come with me while we get him out of here. I want an extra set of eyes on him in case he tries anything.â
America didnât try anything. In fact he was silent and pale during the walk to the workmenâs lockers. Of the other workers they passed, the obvious end of Americaâs career raised some eyebrows and lowered other frowns. In the areas where it was quiet enough that Ivan could hear them muttering, he caught scraps of âWhatâs going on? What did he do?â and âThey go for the immigrants first, I told you, get your papers in orderâŠâ
<<Russia, come on,>> America whispered as he took his coat from the rack but just held it like he might still talk his way out of leaving, <<you would never have known Iâm here, I swearâ >>
âYou are correct that you might never have been discovered, if we were more careless about our inspections,â Russia said loudly and clearly in Russian for the foreman and nearby workers on their smoke break. âYou mightâve continued your espionage without detection, had you accounted for our thorough investigation of every industry in our great union.â Heâd picked Magnitogorsk Number 3 Steel Mill because he hadnât been to Magnitogorsk since theyâd first started laying it out and Number 3 was the one closest to the train station, but America didnât need to know that.
<<Itâs notâI swear, I wasnât spying, pleaseâ >>
âAnd I must say, begging does not help your case. It merely makes you look more pathetic.â
Fully aware of the eavesdroppers around him, America scowled. And, in what was probably his best Russian, said, âYou cannot being do anything to me. Do not being threaten me.â
âYouâre fair game, you said so yourself,â Russia said easily, âYour boss doesnât know where you are. By the time they find where you areâif they find where you are, we will have treated you to all the pleasures a captured spy can enjoy. And what will they say to that, hm? Your selfish government certainly knows what to expect when an enemy agent is captured, yes?â
Again, America went pale. <<YouâŠwouldnât dare execute me.>> He didnât seem sure of his statement.
Russia merely smiled.
The foreman, who had watched the entire drama unfold, said, âPermission to speak, Comrade Braginsky? Is this man a gangster or something?â
âComrade Aronofsky, you should learn the meaning of the phrase âpermission to speak,ââ Russia said.
âI mean, is he a wanted criminal? How did you know he was a spy just by looking at him?â
Russia raised an eyebrow. âWe have our ways of checking backgrounds, comrade, and I suggest you remember that.â
The foreman looked as if he were about to ask another questionâthen seemed to rethink his own background.
<<Look,>> America said tiredly like it would help his cause, <<Letâs say you drag me to Moscow, we get on the phone to my boss, we get this whole thing sorted out. No harm, no foul. You can search through everything Iâve got with me, youâll see Iâve got nothing to hide. Itâs aâŠletâs say, a diplomatic misstep, orâor a cultural exchange attempt, failed obviously, but ultimately just another stupid idea with good intentions that fell through, what do you say?>>
<<I say,>> said Russia in English, <<you are digging your own grave. You will shut up now if you have any brain in your head.>>
America did shut up, although whether that was proof he had a brain or just the result of finally running out of excuses, it was hard to tell. The foreman and the workers on break went quiet too, all eyes on Commissar Braginsky who apparently spoke English and knew the American spy personally.
Suddenly the game wasnât so fun anymore. Not every police chief or local military officer listened when Russia claimed to be part of the government; his commissar post was honorary at best. âGet back to work! Not you, AronofskyâŠWhat is he doing?â
The manager half-sprinted to them and, panting for breath, said, ââCanât come.â
âExcuse me?â
âThe police,â the manager repeated, âsay they canât come. Theyâre all busy.â
Ivan bit back a groan and managed not to roll his eyes again. It was apparently too much to ask that more than one government department worked as it should at any given time.
On the other hand, America straightened up.
âNo you donâtââ The foreman grabbed his arm.
But America said, âI not being run. But you not have police forceâstill want to doing this?â
Scowling, Ivan said to America and made sure the factory management heard him, âYouâll come with me back to Moscow. Personally. Youâre under arrest as a spy for a foreign government.â
America exhaled like he was blowing cigarette smoke. <<If you say so.>>




