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Thank you for your help with the pronouns it makes it so much clearer that way!

For most of the context I've added a link to ao3 where I've posted what I have it's not done yet not even close and it's the first thing I've ever posted so I'm figuring out ao3 too.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/87024031

As for the question that doesn't answer:

The reason jackal is scratching at the floor is there's a loose floorboard there where he normally stashes food, this in particular time there is no food there he doesn't know that his kidself does, That's why he's not looking there.

Could you help me with one more paragraph? I have two ideas but I don't like either of them entirely:

CW/TW violence/abuse

Jackal looks up and he ɍēᵯēᵯƀēɍs. He's in the kitchen. He’s not supposed to be. Someone else is too. That's worse. He's scared. He’s scarred. He’s small, he feels so small next to HIM. He’s fast, but not fast enough. Not when HE'S here. Not when HE'S armed, and HE'S armed. He can see it in HIS hand. It takes him too long to realise it's a knife, but now it's all he can think about. HE'S armed, HE has a knife. Why does HE have a knife? Does he deserve the knife? He probably does. Why does he deserve the knife? He doesn't have time to think about it because HE'S moving. He tries to move, he really does but before he can his entire world becomes pain. It burns. He’s crying, he tries to wipe his face but his arm is dripping so all he accomplishes is smearing blood everywhere. He needs to move. He needs to run. He needs –

So in this case the HIM is supposed to be kind of like a monster or a thing HE'S not supposed to be identified. I have two ideas:

1. Jackal looks up and he ɍēᵯēᵯƀēɍs. Jackal's in the kitchen. Jackal's not supposed to be. Someone else is too. That's worse. Jackal's scared. Jackal’s scarred. Jackal’s small, jackal feels so small next to HIM. Jackal’s fast, but not fast enough. Not when HE'S here. Not when HE'S armed, and HE'S armed. Jackal can see it in HIS hand. It takes jackal too long to realise it's a knife, but now it's all jackal can think about. HE'S armed, HE has a knife. Why does HE have a knife? Does jackal deserve the knife? Jackal probably does. Why does jackal deserve the knife? Jackal doesn't have time to think about it because HE'S moving. Jackal tries to move, he really does but before jackal can jackals entire world becomes pain. It burns. Jackal's crying, jackal tries to wipe jackal face but jackals arm is dripping so all jackal accomplishes is smearing blood everywhere. Jackal needs to move. Jackal needs to run. Jackal needs –

2. Jackal looks up and he ɍēᵯēᵯƀēɍs. He's in the kitchen. He’s not supposed to be. Someone else is too. That's worse. He's scared. He’s scarred. He’s small, he feels so small next to IT. He’s fast, but not fast enough. Not when IT'S here. Not when IT'S armed, and IT'S armed. He can see it in ITS hand. It takes him too long to realise it's a knife, but now it's all he can think about. IT'S armed, IT has a knife. Why does IT have a knife? Does he deserve the knife? He probably does. Why does he deserve the knife? He doesn't have time to think about it because IT'S moving. He tries to move, he really does but before he can his entire world becomes pain. It burns. He’s crying, he tries to wipe his face but his arm is dripping so all he accomplishes is smearing blood everywhere. He needs to move. He needs to run. He needs –

For option one I feel like it gets too repetitive, but option two dehumanizes the monster too much. This type of monster is supposed to be human, without ever acknowledging its human. I know it probably needs to be split up into multiple paragraphs as well.

Clickable link: https://archiveofourown.org/works/87024031/chapters/230423411 :)

Actually, I think the first option works really well, with "he" and "him" in all caps, visually it's distinct enough to tell it apart, and the repetition of Jackal's name helps drive home how scared he is.

The only part there I would change is the line "Jackal tries to move, he really does but before jackal can jackals entire world becomes pain."

Since that's all one sentence, you don't have to say his name again, you can just do, "Jackal tries to move, he really does but before he can, his entire world becomes pain."

and same with "Jackal's crying, jackal tries to wipe jackal face but jackals arm is dripping so all jackal accomplishes is smearing blood everywhere." as long as the abuser isn't being mentioned after Jackal's name, you can just refer to him as he/him. "Jackal's crying, he tries to wipe his face, but his arm is dripping so all he accomplishes is smearing blood everywhere.

One thing to consider is people who might be using screenreaders to listen to your story, so maybe using a descriptor for the abuser, like "the monster" "the nightmare" ect — it doesn't have to be specific if it's meant to be vague, you could even say something like "the memory" — could help when it's read out loud, when you won't be able to see the caps on the pronouns :)