did i ever tell y'all that i recently reread the first three books and did some annotations on them? my commentary is gold.
- setting? describe??
- haha loser
- what the hECK
- maybe max should realize at some point that emotions are okay
- how does she know cacti
- why are you so motherfucking awkward
- you don’t have to remind us at every moment that iggy’s blind
- are they a heckening CULT??
- that’s?? dangerous??
- is. he. southern???
- wow fang don’t be so extra
- are you modest? absolutely not.
- this part is actually kinda good
- have you ever used a dialogue tag aside from “said” for jeb?
- “you’re supposed to save the world” from WHAT, you potato with eyes??
- bro what
- what the fuck, james
and that’s all from the first half of the first book
second half! (it’s longer than the last list, bc towards the end i was really savage, so i’ll put most of it under the cut)
- “i try to be nice to them” it’s not that hard
- this is 2 cliche
- okay getting ahead of myself but all the BS with the voice. you can cut that.
- that would be a fantasy a 10-year-old mutant girl might have
- who in the heck
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