Fyah OC-reviews!

…..a rather lousy doodle of the character….

Name: Vehlar Skullcrush

Age: 23

Race: Half-Orc (OrcXHuman)

Personality: Rather reckless and isn’t too smart either. She tries very hard to be kind and gentle, but usually it ends up with her being angry, throwing with rocks. She’s quite short tempered. Isn’t much of a talker, more a do’er.

Bio:

Her mother was taken by an orc pack and enslaved by their king. They repeatedly raped her, but made sure not to kill her in doing so. The kind was very fond of her. She gave birth to a little creature. A half orc, half human. Vehlar was raised as an orc, but with her mothers exciting stories about mankind. It made her want to pursue her dream to become a knight! With a shining armor and a strong horse. Fighting for the human king! But being accepted by anyone wasn’t all too easy.

Life goal: She wants to be recognized as a valuable member of the human kings guard. Learn the arts of sword fighting and even marry a human and raise human children. She doesn’t want to live a filthy life as a brutal orc, like her pack back home.

Motivation: Her quite naive nature makes her believe her mothers words. “Work hard and you’ll succeed.”. Even being a half orc, she’s certain that she can do it!

Talents: She’s physically quite strong. Not as strong as any other orc. but much stronger than any human.

Flaws: She has a tendency of being too rash and reckless. Destroying things, before thinking too much about it.

Likes: Shining armors. swords. Butterflies. Horses.

Dislikes: Rude people. Mud. Goblins.

I hope this was enough! - badluckjinx83 aka Hannah.  

Designwise it looks pretty passable. Loving the blocky kind of structure you’ve given her. My only complaint would actually be the hair, but even so it’s more of a personal opinion, since genetics may or may not have caused some traits to be less orcish. I would personally have prefered to arrange her hair in locks or dreads or at least in a more “heavy” type of do. But then again, genetics may or may not have thinned her hair.  Her background seems pretty plausible - very adult for a D&D campaign?  But nonetheless nothing awful to point out there either. I find it ironic that she strives to be as human as possible even though it is evident that her temper gets the better of her a good percentage of the time. It can make for some pretty hilarious situations and some interesting character-development if handled the right way.  Her fascination with knights are quite cute, reminiscent of any young (boy)child ‘s dream gone into adulthood as well. I also like that you’ve included that she isn’t as strong as any other orc as she is a mixed bag of genetics and many would’ve taken the oportunity to jumble a lot of perks in, regardless if makes sense.   I find it quite hilarious that she would be interested in butterflies, but i imagine its more of a momental thing that occurs whenever a butterfly pops up rather than an all-time interest.  As for dislikes, i often see people list “ rude people” in their dislike-list. In truth, who does even like rude people? Nobody. No reason to list it.  In overall a very solid character. Good work!