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Off the top of my head I can think of a few possible connections to a queen bee: rivals, people they picked on/‘victims’, various love/ex-love interests, family relations, or people who idolised them in some way. I hope these provide some help to you!

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Yes, of course! My section (Ally’s) is in italics, Julie’s is in normal text.

Your url and icon seem pretty standard for an rp of this kind, a generic school url and typical school logo-font for an icon. It works, but I think there are definitely changes you can implement to make you stand out in the tags more. Especially once I click through to the actual theme, which seems a lot different. The header is great, and I wish there was more of that pink colour throughout the actual posts. Instead, the plain black/white colour scheme doesn’t really make anything pop. It's easy enough to read and navigate, but in terms of aesthetic appeal, I wish there was a little more. I think the admin picture could be a little cuter, too, even if the little diamond picture and name was on a transparent background and not black.

The plot of this is certainly written well! I like how the blogs direction changed and the fallout from that. You usually see those kind of blogs start as something bad but I like that this one started masked as something good. Overall, it’s a great concept. I like the addition of the page of different classes available. Something good to add to that would be a list of clubs/societies and sports available and who is in them and runs them. Also descriptions of locations around the school and what the accommodations look like would be great as it fleshes out the setting and helps provide consistencies throughout character interactions. To keep track of things easily, it’d also be nice to show who is in which grade/who has which position throughout the school so new applicants can decide what grade or position to place their character in. All of these additions would really make the rp stand out! The rules look reasonable and the application looks simple to fill out (although the link in the navigation doesn’t work, same with the wanted fcs one). Good luck!

Sure thing! My section (Ally’s) is in italics, Julie’s is in normal text.

I really like your url and icon. They do an excellent job of creating intrigue but also giving plenty of info about plot and content. The theme looks pretty good at first glance. In terms of navigation and readability, it comes through for sure. The large blur in the top left corner of the background is a little distracting in the overall look, but that’s really it. The only other thing that strikes me as a little off is that there are two gifs on the screen, it’s almost like you don’t know which one your eye should go to if that makes sense? But generally overall I have no issues with what you’ve done here at all!

What you have of your plot is written well. The concept is very intriguing and could provide some good interactions and development. If you were interested in doing any kind of expansion on it (which isn’t really needed but still good to have), I’d suggest detailing how the town felt of their leaving, where they filled with rage or feel betrayed? What methods are being used to try and track them down? Have their cells tried to be tracked and have they had to discard them or have they had some close calls as gas stations, motels, etc before? What was the atmosphere like in the town? Was it a bright sunny place with underlying judgement, or was it dark and falling apart, and how does that contrast with being on the road? As this rp has changing locations, I’d suggest not making these changes too frequent. I’d say staying in one town for two weeks is a reasonable amount of time (maybe even longer if the rp keeps going for a while) as it allows characters to explore the area and plot different scenarios within those locations without feeling rushed. Relating to that, I’d make a page detailing the places they have already been and where they plan on going next and when. This is just so members can keep track of that timeline and are aware of what’s coming. Good luck!

Of course you can lovely! Here you go:

For the looks: The theme itself looks very functional and is easy to navigate through. I love the colour scheme and that the colours in the background match up with colours in the theme. I would personally add a tad bit of colour to the sidebar graphics, but that’s just me. The url is nice, it’s short and straight away lets me know that this is about witches. I don’t get the witch vibe from the icon but it’s nice and simple and does have correlation to the colours of the theme which works. Overall though, no issues with the look! Moving to the content: What you have of the plot is written well, but could use some expansion. I understand that it’s plotless, but you could still expand on what it feels like to live there, what it looks like, what you can see when you’re there - build out the setting. Also, explain the witches. Have they always been there or where did they come from? Are they hidden from non-witches? What’s their history? Expansion like this would really flesh out this world and allow more understanding. I’d love to see the location page finished up as that would be a great addition. Another page I’d suggest to add is a list of the different types of witches along with descriptions of them, the spells and powers of each, their differences and maybe even their relation, if one kind gets on with another or now (and why). This would allow people to make more informed choices about which kind they would like their characters to be and also gives the different variations more significance in this particular setting. The rules look reasonable and the application looks simple to fill out. Best of luck with this!!

Of course you can! Here you go lovely:

First off, the looks: I like the theme - it’s organised and easy to navigate through. The colour scheme all flows nicely (I would personally have a more vibrant pop of colour though). I get no harry potter vibes from this though. For the header graphic, putting things which represents the magic side of the universe would look great. As for the background, I would suggest a picture of Hogwarts or Diagon Alley or any other notable location. This would really help set the tone as if I was looking at this page without any knowledge of the plot, I would assume this was a town rp set in the real world. I could understand if you wanted things to be subtle, in which case if you were to change one element, I would aim for getting the background to show off the Harry Potter side. 

Onto the content: What you have of the plot is written well. However, it is in need of expansion. I get that it’s about the next generation, but go into more detail about what growing up was like for them, what Hogwarts and the wizarding world became after the war and examples of different paths people could end up on. There is a big gap from where the last book ended to the present time of the rp, so use the plot to fill that in with some description. Something that would be great to add would be locations around the wizarding world. Although most locations will be common knowledge to most Harry Potter fans, it’d still be nice to jog people’s memory and show what things there are with descriptions of their state in this future. Also if there have been any notable events which have happened between the end of the war up until the current time, it’d be good to make a little timeline so people can have something visual to fill in the time gap. Also links to resources such as spells, potions, potential jobs, etc would be very handy for members to have should they need it whilst roleplaying. The rules look reasonable and the application provides good character summary. Best of luck!

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