6th -13th November One-Panel Narrative with Ben Newman
On Tuesday, Ben Newman, a Hastings artist, gave us a good tip on how to simplify a busy drawing by condensing it into shapes. Our task this week was to use our characters from reading week to create a one panel narrative that includes lots of characters and tells a story. Which iâve learnt is much harder than youâd expect. Using focal points marked out by geometric shapes was a useful tool because you add all the details later and let the ideas build from the shapes marked out. I quite enjoyed the simplicity of the task because it made the process less overwhelming.Â
On Wednesday I started drawing straight away on an A1 sheet instead of mapping out which was so stupid because i drew my people way too small and detailed, i donât know why i did that? It defeated the process on Monday, i need to be less impatient. Then on Thursday I had a crit with James Jessiman who graduated from Kingston and then went on to do an MA in fine art at the Royal College of art and it was so helpful. All the advice he gave to not only me but everyone else was genuinely useful and constructive, even if I went last and had the least amount of time, i still fell like i got a lot out of it. I was pleased that he liked my narrative of the bonfire procession and heâd heard of Jack in the Green because he questioned a lot of other peoples. These are some things he said:
> Work bigger and then downscale
> Refer back to the original brief of urban tribes because itâs important not to get carried away and lose focus on what youâre being asked to do. It has to be clear
> Make sure all the people are staring at the same thing, make it clear that the parade at the bonfire is the focal point
> Donât burden yourself with this, you should make it enjoyable, even if it means changing the subject of your narrative
Over the weekend I was working on my A1 piece and it surprised me how time consuming colouring in is. I was pleased with my outcome though.Â
Our crit on Tuesday went well, i enjoyed seeing what everyone else had done even if some were so brilliant it was disheartening. However, i think the subject of mine came across well because everyone knew what was happening in the picture. However some criticism i got was that the wonky perspective is nice, but if i am doing that, make it more of a thing, either go all out or make it realistic otherwise it can look messy. Does the colour take away from the costumes in the parade? People donât really know where to start and i think the busyness of it distracts from the original point which is that there is a procession. During my drawing process i got distracted thinking of different narratives to put in that could be funny which was really fun, but in the end, drew you away from the focal point.
> very entertaining to look at, although the top half needs finishing
> donât colour for the sake of colouring
> think about the scale and the foreground vs background
> how can you show the time of day more- shadows? grey background
> why is everyone floating?
When i got home, i changed the colour of the street and made it grey to match the pavement and i think it looks much better, because Nick was right when he said it looks like everyone is floating in poo.