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But know that this is a side blog and I am very active on my main blog, so I will always see the notifications this one gets and it is never too late to submit a concept you think needs tweaking! (Or if you’re really proud of an OC you did I would also like to see them!)

-RB

her review was here http://atocreviews.tumblr.com/post/52340758810/isu#notes I’m sorry if this was random, I just came across it again!! :D

I'm actually happy to see her! She looks cute.

Honestly, I like Carla more. Lilith is a commonly used name for female demons, devil queens, etc. because of the whole thing with Lilith getting kicked out of heaven and then having a bunch of demon children. Carla has more originality, even if it is seemingly random

Also, no problem. The help is what I’m here for

I can’t really tell you what and what not to make. Although, I’ve only ever seen someone make a nightosphere demon once, all the other “demons” I’ve seen were just stereotypical people that looked completely human but with horns and wings, and they weren’t even from the nightosphere. 

Also, considering Finn and Jake’s adventures, I wouldn’t be surprised if someone managed to secretly slip through, so I guess it’s plausible that a demon escaped. 

Oh MAN that sounds so cooooooool

Also, glad to help!

You could look at various types of names for cloth or stitching? like Felt?

I dunno man I am the WORST at names and I typically just mash up some random syllables together for fantasy names.

No, actually. I was kind of surprised when I read this, it sounds like something not a lot of people would have an interest in. 

I’d say go for it!

Is the plushy wizard/king made out of plush? It would be pretty cool if they were all patchwork-like and they control stuffing. I don’t really know what else to say, it seems pretty straightforward. I would make them a living teddy bear but that sounds too… stereotypical and obvious. Hmmm…

Also, instead of metal for crowns and accessories, you could use that shiny fabric commonly used for children’s stuffed animals. 

Other than that… I ain’t got a clue, man. 

Hi

Here to showcase 3 Ocs

-Disclaimer.. these are all humanoid (ish) Ocs, they are all thin (they are based on my best friends in the world) and please enjoy-

Beach princess: Ocean Beach

Appearance: her body is made of sand, has hair made of water and it varies in length and she always wears the colour purple and blue. She is 16 

Relevance: she is the ruler of the sandlings and beach people, she gave up her space in line to the throne to her younger brother to become the guardian of the beach!

Personality: Brave, strong, stubborn, caring, bad ass, insecure, funny, witty, sarcastic, creative and her catch phrases are CRABS and OH CONCH SHELL

Back story: when Ocean was 8 she went to see the Oracle (all knowing prophecy teller) without her parents consent. The Oracle showed her visions of her crowning and her leading her kingdom from the throne, but then darkness came over her (the lich) her own kingdom, all of her people possessed ad her left alone to perish. She developed a plan to change her fate, she gave up her status at age 12 and trained herself in combat and self defense so she could protect her kingdom (she doesn't have any insane powers accept for her muscles and wits) one day when she was on her way home from losing a battle at fight club she saw a bunch of older water nymphs terrorizing an fire fox she saved the fox and they teamed up (her name is Sammy) together they vowed to protect there kingdom (they are purposely made to reflect Finn and Jake because I feel like all Finn needs now is a friend, a real one) 

Episodes (only 3):

The other Adventurer: Finn and Jake accidently wander into beach territory and a greet y an unexpected guest  

Rising steam: Ocean goes on a quest to the fire kingdom after some delinquents turn her dungeon master to glass

Fate: While in a dungeon in the giant territory ocean open up to Finn about her past while Jake and Sammy have to team up to save them

-BEACH PRINCESS IS NOOOTTT A WATER PRINCESS, THAT IDEA IS OVER DONE!-

Meadow princess: Spencer

Appearance: she has a light green body but it changes orange in the fall, her hair is made of grass and is in a bun, she also sports the royal antlers, she has deer legs and ears and is 16, she also has a blue jay named muffin and a squirrel named berry

Relevance: she is the first female leader of the meadow people (and totally works those male antlers) and was nearly disowned by her father after her older brother and mother were killed by the hunting kingdom, she develops a relation ship with huntress wizard and brings peace to the two kingdoms, she still keeps her father around and understands he made a mistake

Personality: shy, quiet, easily startled her main catch phrase is OH DEER (pun intended)

Backstory: lived a normal childhood until the hunting kingdom invaded wanting there antlers and tails (the antlers and tails are there life energy and are extremely powerful) (the royal antlers give her immortality) she was shot but her mom was killed and her brother, captured. Huntress wizard helped her because she felt bad a knew she was royalty. They now have and everlasting friendship. she loves science and wants to team up with PB but is far to shy to ask. Also even though her dad was a total donkus she forgave him.

Episodes:

Love is in the air: Finn is asked on a date to a ball by Spencer, but later he finds that he was nothing but a ploy

Oh deer: Finn accidentally takes one of the royal sets of antlers and cant take them off!

The labyrinth: Finn gets lost in the royal gardens of the meadow kingdom and this soon turns into a adventure

Cloud princess: Jess Puffleton

Appearance: is completely white has wolf ears, nose and fangs because she is party wolfs and cloud queens daughter. She has short poufy hair and a pet cloud llama

Relevance: Is the party wolfs daughter (but doesn't like parties just fancy galas and ball gowns) and the cloud queen banned party wolf from the cloud kingdom because he never saw her and was just partying (he didn't even know she existed)   

Personality: polite, respectful (only around her mom), spontaneous, crazyish around her friends and her catch phrases include OF COUSE MOTHER DEAR *teasing British accent* and OH LLAMAS

Backstory: She was conceived at a party and grew up raised by her mom and taught how to be polite and ladylike but still have fun. her father was banned and his whereabouts are unknown. she spends most of her time hosting tea parties but still doing teen stuff (like going to concerts in the nightoshpere)  

Episodes:

Party gods: Jess, Ocean, Spencer and Finn all go help Jess look for her dad in vast space, but they stumble across a party kingdom

Pet party: All there companions are sick, Jake, Sammy, Poufy the llama and muffin and berry the blue jay and squirrel have to team up to find a magic cure, while PB try's to cure them scientifically  

Party wolves: Jess feel she doesn't fit in in the cloud Kingdom and goes to find a pack to party wolfs, but she soon learns this isn't her scene

Well, we would prefer any info you can give us. Not a whole 15 page essay, of course, but it helps to know a lot so we can give more evaluations on different parts.

As for all of the mods, it's really hard to get all of them to come together to get a submission done, as half of them are inactive/quit. I would say that only myself (RB) and maybe Pond would be one of the more active ones, but even then that's kind of stretching it. She's busy at the moment so that just leaves me. (Which is why half the stuff on this blog is tagged with stuff like "RB answers")

Honestly, I'm not entirely sure. Normally stuff automatically goes into Sue/Stu territory when you get to the "related to canon character" thing.

Personally, I would say it's a bit borderline. On one hand, yes you do have something related to a canon character directly, but it's not like most "related" sues where they're like "omg this is my oc he is Finn's cousin and he's half demon prince!!11".

I actually like this idea of what could possibly happen to the remnants of the human race, assuming Susan Strong is also human. As long as you don't give the child something like super amazing unrealistic powers that could surpass God, I would say it would be alright. 

I'm a bit torn between curiosity and one of the "standard rules" on how to avoid a Mary Sue (or Gary Stu). However, if I did see this as someone's OC, I wouldn't outright go "ew" at them.

So It would make an interesting concept for sure, but I wouldn't really make it one of my main OCs, just more of a side thing.

Oh ok that clears things up