Some of the slides were inconsistent design-wise (User Research slide, text switches to different font for a few points)
The grid analysis seemed unnecessary, extra
Your final design is really nice!
The boxes in your user flow have lots of hyphenated words. Could make the boxes wider.
Problems: LOTS everywhere! --Too much to take in, overwhelming.Ā
Your build your bike function is really cool.
Growing the company is an awesome idea! Tell me more! Make this the central story.
You mentioned green a lot when talking about the mood board, but this didnāt follow into the final color scheme and I donāt understand why?
Super story-y and pitch-y
all engaging and productive!
Your presentation slides match the style guide
In the final mock up: You could stretch the middle boxes to that there isnāt an awkward gap at the bottom.
Speaking in 2nd person for the company instead of toĀ the company as a client seemed out of place.
(niche is pronounced neesh)
Presenting problems felt aggressive/negative
After a while the presentation started feeling long, drawn out, slow.
The new logo looks like a felt cut-out which feels childish rather than the intended middle aged/college aged.Ā
You talked over someone as they were in the middle of asking a question. Thatās really bad manners and it makes them think that you arenāt going to be willing to listen to what they have to say about their own business.
You sayĀ āsort of,ā āmaybe,ā ālike,ā and āI guessā a lot.Ā āthis is sort of what we want to do(?)āĀ āthis will sort of deal with the needs that the user has.ā Weāre hiring you because youāve done the research and you knowĀ what the user needs and youāve crafted a solution to the problem. Confidence :)
Why sitcom 90s people? Seems irrelevant. Itās an engaging point, and you maybe could use just the pictures, but explain why that person is visiting their store.
Same with the idea to go retro. It felt like aĀ ājust causeā decision based on your explanation--even though youāve done all of this research to back up your claims! Give us the facts so that we canāt question you.
Good evidence of knowledge of the company.
Having mobile views was a nice addition--very complete.
The slides donāt match the final design.
Where will the navigation go for the child pages?
I started stuttering and losing confidence momentum halfway through. I should have practiced a few more times to prevent this. Also, in front of a mirror next time would be a good idea. I wasnāt aware of my passive body language at all. (thanks!)
restate the problem when presenting the solution
(i.e. Donāt make me think!)
Core values of the business--this is awesome! It gives a narrative to follow, and it shows that you know the company and are invested in their interests. Thereās this image of a great future that youāre bringing of what they wanted their company to be but it currently is not, with a positive emphasis. LOVE.
nice simple new navigation
fun a creative final design solution! Love the typography as well. It really works. 10/10 love.
I like the timeline at the bottom
You explained desired outcomes (Why redesign?, Issues-->New features) Very nicely structured.Ā
obviously comfortable presenting, calm, confident, good pace.Ā
rather than āthis is a problemā you explain why we want to do something and the desired result--positive spin on problems.
next steps was a great way to end. made it feel like a beginning! :)
just an overall great feeling! Iām ready to do some teamwork and get busy on this new project weāre starting together!Ā
Animation fade out is a bit distracting
Why include less complete user flow just to skip over it?
nav item/tag issue is a problem. Youāve told us this many times over.
during the prototype explanation you started getting into too many details and it dragged on your presentation much longer than it needed to be.
I like your visual design :)
a refocus on the community itself --neat idea!
stuttering; youĀ ālong-story-shortāed out the siteās issues; felt scattered.
Aesthetics:concept: you warmed up and caught your voice back here. Figure out what worked for you here and carry it into the rest of your presentation~
further explain why the business wantsĀ to have a primarily community-based website. What will it do for their business?Ā
if emphasis is on the community, have some pictures of people.
really work on further developing the visuals. You know what websites look like. Use your intuition! If that isnāt working and you need a more systematic way of working, look at more websites, do some more grid exercises. Breakdown what a site is trying to do with each of its visual elements. Donāt give up! :)Ā
Iām reading the slide along with you
on that note, they were very text heavy--which could have been divided into multiple slides
when displaying the mock-up images side-by-side, either separate them with a space, or use an outline so that we can tell the boundaries a bit better. (or change the background color to an off-white or something?)
Everyone did great!! Iām so proud of all of us~! Good job! :D