10 Mistakes to Avoid in Action
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Over-Describing
When it comes to action, it helps to remind yourself that readers like to inject action with a hint of their own imagination. They can fill in the blanks very easily with written action scenes, because unless otherwise stated, a reader will assume that the characters are moving quickly with a lot of precision and a lot of energy. Try to comb through all of your action scenes and ask what your reader can and canât infer. By all means, hint at the highlights and intensify focus on important details or symbolic moments, but the action is not why theyâre here. Theyâre here for the progression the action creates.Â
Superhuman Pain Tolerance
As it turns out, getting hurts is painful. Getting hit or kicked or stabbed or shot is painful, and unless the injury was very light or minor, itâs gonna hurt for a while. Even if your character is the type to repress their own feelings and ignore their pain, some inability due to pain or injury is unavoidable, especially if your character is simply human.Â
No Internal Events
Action scenes are about more than what the characters are doing with their body. Itâs mentally taxing, and incredibly revealing how an action scene plays out. Use this to your advantage. Use body language, pacing, emphasis, and expression to show how your character is feeling, what theyâre thinking, and portray the larger implication of the scene overall.Â
No Stakes
Every action scene needs stakes. Itâs a simple truth, but one that is often ignored or excused away. Even if the action scene is for âentertainmentâ, it needs to play a role in pushing the story forward somehow. Create a smaller conflict that the characters attempt to solve, resulting in the fight scene, and then revealing a larger truth about the overall plot or developing the characters themselves. Someone needs to have something to lose or something to gain.Â
Scene Accomplishing Nothing
I touched on this in the last point, but any scene whose sole purpose is âentertainmentâ will probably be cut in the final draft because out of all moments to make up the final product, a meaningless action scene is the quickest to cheapen it, at least to an audience. There must always be an immediate purpose, and an overarching place in the story.Â
Thoughtless Character Actions
What your characters do is revealing. Body language is the hardest to manipulate to suit oneâs own agenda, so the way your character fights can do an incredible and efficient job of developing them. Be intentional in your choreography of action scenes. Question why your character would choose to lunge at that moment and shy away in another. Why does this character avoid the physical confrontation versus another character who actively seeks it out as the ultimate solution to the problem?
Destroying The Suspension Of Disbelief
Your reader can let a lot of improbabilities slide, but not everything. There has to be some logic in the way action scenes play out. Where did that helicopter come from and who sent it? How are they all communicating with each other despite being miles apart? Where is this endless hoard of enemy soldiers materializing from?Â
Editing Too Kindly
Cut out what doesnât develop the story or the characters. World building can be an iffy task during an action scene, but occasionally those moments are valuable. Action scenes should never occupy too much space, because thereâs only so many words a reader can read in one sitting in which characters attack each other.Â
Muddy Descriptions
Be succinct and precise in your description. Avoid filler and excessive context, and please donât spend paragraphs describing the city center before the upcoming action scene results in it being destroyed.Â
Be Intentional With The Tone
Tone is everything. Where the tone begins and where it evolves to is so, so telling about your story and the characters within it. If your action scene starts with a funny moment that is interrupted by an abrupt and unexpected attack, follow through with an appropriate tone like smug victory. If it starts with a devastating loss, the ending should be equally impactful.
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