#week 5.1

STRUGGLE

Here we go! Your first prompt is here. Good luck!

Please remember: the word itself doesn’t need to be used within the fic, but it should be used as the prompt or focus for your fic in some way. There are no word count restrictions or other content restrictions outside of a current or previous member of One Direction being part of the main pairing. You simply must have your fic loaded into the correct collection and tagged appropriately by the deadline of 12 noon EDT next Tuesday, 13 July.

The pinned post on this blog will be the posting instructions and once a collection has been made for this week’s fics, the link to both the collection as well as the link to the blurb to be included in your author’s note will be in that post.

Questions? Please let me know and I’ll get back with you ASAP. Happy writing!

Koha Week 5.1 - Interim Critique

Today was our second interim critique - above is some of the work we presented, and here is a summation of the feedback we received and the consequent changes we plan to make. 

Website:

- The boxes across the scenery illustrations are distracting / detract from the imagery underneath - consider removing them.

- The Karla text works for the main body of the website, but for the top title text it looks a little too simple - refine the text, bring the ‘Hokioi’ font in for the titles perhaps. 

- The blocks of information, particularly on the ticket and about page are overwhelmingly long - ensure the text doesn’t stretch across the whole screen. Try breaking it up with rule perhaps. For the ticket page, include the text under the headings, such as Group Prices, as drop downs, so users don’t have to scroll through walls of text to find the ticket information they need. 

Animation:

- Try making the drips static - the animation works well being graphic, the drips stand out as the only fluid / moving part - they are out of place. If the drip is static, it will be easier to turn it into a tree, with a branch for the birds to sit on - fixing the problem I had transitioning between these two scenes. 

- Add more information onto the end card of the animation - describe in short what the animatic is advertising for, and include link to the website, and perhaps the bats logo. 

Poster:

- The title is too heavy, and is competing with the heavy birds at the bottom of the page - make it lighter. 

hello hello hello, longtime no see

Last week I was awfully sick with what I’m assuming was the plague or a nasty case of the flu so it was a kind of pause moment on my piece. I had just submitted the draft for editing and I didn’t have feed back to work through, so it probably came at an ideal time. A little break from writing and thinking about writing.

That said, this week we received our readers reports and structural edits ! Overall my feedback was fairly positive and constructive giving me a fair idea what to change. Specifically, when talking to my lovely editor, Emily, we discussed reframing the form of my piece from a braided essay to a more narrative style exploration of the moment. Thus I have entered the period of reworking my piece before the August 30 due date for our next draft.