#the_script

I'm still working on the world setting. I got involved with the detailed description and disclosure of minor characters, namely the Egyptian gods. I can't reveal them without explaining (at least to myself) where they came from. I didn't want to reveal it and get into this mess, but it fits perfectly with the main theme of the story (about improper upbringing), so I'll have to do it.

At the same time, I decided to throw on the proportions of the Ata character and change the clothes a little for them. According to the idea, if she's going to be shown as a 13-year-old teenager, I need to set her design to match. True, her previous design is cuter and I liked it better, but it won't do. According to the plot, due to the onset of puberty, she will begin a secondary arch. According to the old design, she doesn't look much like a teenager, she could have been given a maximum of 9-10 years.

Damn, now I have to rethink why Lilith originally hid Ata's gender from Lucifer😅 The character's design is tied to this, as is her conflict with Lucifer. While I was writing down the influence of Lucifer on the main plot, his conflict, etc., I changed his character in an order, and with that, his arc with Lilith and Ata. I had a feeling that the old plot would be thoroughly redone as soon as I started writing everything down in more detail😬 But I'm glad that I was able to rewrite so that the arcs of other characters had more influence on the main conflict and somehow reflected / told the main theme of the story.

Since the plot has become very dependent, in a sense, on the politics of the demons and the plot unfolds at their top (all the main characters are demons - Moloch, Lucifer, Asmodeus, Belial), I had to delve into the details of how their society and hierarchy are built. Because I have demons copied from Greek democracy I decided to take the structure of the hierarchy from the same place, only to slightly correct their function and naming for my own plot. After all, the story is about fictional characters who have lived for centuries, and in such conditions, their society could have developed quite differently and adapted to their mores.

So, the Greeks had at the top of a democratic state, if i greatly simplify the information i found, brush aside all sorts of boole, the council of 500 - 9 archons at the top. Three archons had a unique name and their own area of influence and responsibility, while the rest of the archons had a generic name for all. These are unique: eponyms (as I understand it, the most important archon and responsible for the legal affairs of the state of the population, to summarize), polemarch and basileus (the chief priest of the polis, who organizes religious rituals). The rest are called thesmophetes, dealing with the judicial system.

I got a little more of these archons in the setting and with a different name. Since the word "archon" is already used to refer to angels / demons who control the water element, it is no longer suitable for the hierarchy of the position of the demons. I couldn't find a better name for the angelic "water" caste, so it was just easier to change or invent a different job title for the demons. By analogy with the name "archangel" - the main ones of the angels, I replaced the name "archon" with "archipag", combining the part from the archangel with the word areopagus - the assembly of the top among the ancient Greeks.

And I have redistributed responsibilities to these archipags. As the head of the demons, Lucifer will be an Eponym. Lucifer will control the rest of the archipags. Lucifer himself is also required to deal with administrative and legal matters and partially judicial statements. Among themselves, the other archipags are conceived to be hierarchically equal and able to manage only their sphere of responsibility throughout the demon polis. Moloch is more about external security, an analogue of the army, and the internal security and order of the policy are given to Asmodeus, an analogue of the executive branch.

For the latter, there was no head among the archons. Among the Greeks, the equivalent of the police were slaves and there were also astinomes. While I was looking for information, I still didn't understand whether they were recruited from slaves or whether they were already citizens separately, but I liked the title of the position and their functions fit those prescribed to the character Asmodeus, so I entered such a unique name among the archipags.

Basileus is given to Belial. Of course, it is ridiculous to introduce any kind of priesthood to characters who themselves know what religious propaganda is, because demons will not have any religion like the human society. But the functions of the basileus, as responsible for organizing any celebrations, instead of religious service, are very suitable for Belial and for demons + as part of some shadow side and gray areas for demons (the distribution of intoxicating substances by archaic demons separately, among their own area, among people serving demons, the presence of analogues of a hedonistic cult).

Archai demons were invented from succubi, and given their hedonistic lifestyle, they are well suited to be used more mundane, following the example of the cliche about demons stealing human souls - there will be no souls in the setting, because death will be the last end, as in reality.

But demons will need humans for the same purpose as slaves of the ancient Greeks - to provide a way of life for demons and to relieve them of the need to personally perform their daily routine. But since demons are prescribed by tempters, then this role can be used by archaic demons to lure people into their service and keep them not by force, but by offering better conditions than they can get from other people or by seduction. This will perfectly explain who is involved in the demons' daily routine and provides some kind of parallel with their images from the myth, only pragmatic and realistic.

The fesmophet archipelago will be responsible for the judicial system of the demons, and it will be for the crowd character, some kind of cherub demon. And the last archipag will be an archon demon, so that each type of 4 types of demons will be at the top. There is also no separate name for the latter archipag, so the name is taken by analogy with the astinome - agoran. They were engaged in ancient Greek surveillance of order in the agora square and trade. I will slightly change the vector of surveillance for the demons, it will not be purely related to the agora, but to trade in general and surveillance of the work of people summoned by archaic demons to the demon polis.

That's all with the arhipags, and the remaining top of the demons will be the nomarchs. Nomarchs in ancient Hellenistic Egypt were the administrative managers/representatives of the pharaoh in the nomes, an analogue of one of the districts/ territories of Egypt. Although the demons will have a small polis, up to about 800 demons, they will have a polis divided into 4 districts, where their own type of demons will live separately: seraphs separately, archai, kerubi and archons separately, and each district will have its own head - nomarch.

They will be identical in function to the local administration and order. In the hierarchy, they will be lower after the archipags, but equal to each other. Unlike archipags, their area of responsibility will be only their districts. The nomarchs will report to the eponym, not to the other archipags, but only if this is not related to the area of responsibility of the archipags.

Something like that. I hope the educational program didn't seem boring. I understand that there is a lot of text, but it took even more reading before we could find the necessary data suitable for the setting and plot, and then systematize them. There will be a reason for the demons to have such a top position. Some characters, more precisely more than half, will be in ideological conflict with each other and diverge in values. In order for the conflict to be open, the characters must be hierarchically on equal terms, otherwise it will be difficult to show an open conflict without violating the logic of the characters' behavior.

Season 1 is now stable in terms of the arches of the key characters and the main conflict, I will not rewrite anything globally in it anymore. Season 4, which I am currently prescribing, will be based on it.

Since in season 4 all the previously touched upon lines of characters from the Egyptian pantheon and from the myth of the rise of the angels should be closed in one season along with the ending of the story, so far there is a very difficult task - to combine this whole zoo of "deities" with the main plot. It should be combined in such a way that they are logically involved in it and not a single line can be thrown out of the narrative without consequences.

In general, while fixing the main plot of season 1, I slightly updated the storyboard. I removed the unnecessary frames from there, and left the ones that are old but suitable. There is no point in redrawing them, since in the future I can use a different camera angle to transfer the scene. The storyboard is needed so far only to understand what will happen in the frame.

I am currently writing biographies of Egyptian characters in order to determine their relationship to each other and begin writing the script in more detail. Otherwise, I scattered the basis of the story by season and episode, but then it goes in fragments: either I can delve into the detailed writing of the scene of the conflict I like or the dialogue of the characters (which is well represented in my head), or just briefly write what should happen in the scene / dialogue. But how to approach this has not yet occurred to me.

I think this is precisely due to the fact that I did not prescribe a biography for the separately created characters to match their roles and tasks in the plot, the matter does not stick further. It is important to understand where a character's motivation comes from, and what set of knowledge and skills he has. In general, it helps to feel the character better and present his actions and words convincingly.

Most of all, Seth's family will have to be prescribed, because he is the main character of the entire plot. And his conflict with Osiris, how it ended, why Seth came to power with such a crime, why the other gods didn't do anything about it - it's important to think about everything, because I want to reveal this story in more detail (season 3 will be about half or more devoted to these issues). Something to which the myth itself does not provide an answer or explanation, but leaves with questions.

It is somewhat similar to how in their works D. Milton and Vondel Joost Van Den revealed in the biblical myth those details about which the Bible did not explain.

For example, I've always wondered how Lucifer got so proud. Out of the blue? He served God as usual, until one day he was struck by lightning or faced with a thundercloud? What was the trigger of his jealousy/envy/pride? I was wondering what served as the starting point for it, but since the biblical myth was written to tell how the Jewish people came to be and reveal their relationship to their god Yahweh, neither angels nor demons are revealed there.

Actually, wanting to reveal in more detail how the riot happened, how it started, and what the exiled angels did afterward, I wanted to make a comic strip. I liked the version of Lucifer from the poem Paradise Lost, but I decided to fix some details in my own way, as I see this character. Initially, Lucifer was supposed to be the main character, but after one idea that, as it seemed to me, no one had implemented yet, the story moved towards Egypt and Seth became the main character of the plot.

I repeat, but it's probably already clear even from the line of characters what Seth has to do with it and what role he will play in the biblical myth (I just want to ask you if the main plot twist is immediately clear from the outside or not😅 If you've read up to this point, please share🙏)