You know that short story I've been talking about for all this while? Well, finally, here's part one!

Or, at least, a rough draft of it. And I want YOU to tell me what you think of it my, lovely, lovely followers. Specific wonderings I have include:

-Is the pacing good, or does it ramble too long and too unfocused?-

-Do I convey the characters well through their actions & (sparse) dialogue, or are they too dull or cartoonish to care for?-

-Is the comedy funny, or is it trying too hard/too "random" to work?-

-Do I set up anticipation & potential plot points for the next part well, or does it all fall flat?-

-Is the worldbuild interesting or too confusing and muddied to keep up with?-

-And finally, were you able to guess what writer on unexplained phenomenae the town mentioned in the story was named after, and were you able to guess what famous cinematic creature the mysterious patron and the Planet Emperor was based on?-