oh hi!! it's surprising to see people asking me for opinions over aus, it makes me happy to be able to share my thoughts about it!! so let's see what we have here.

okay, the concept it's not bad in a sense but I have a few questions about it. First, something I think should be obvious but how does ruling work this world like, alright dragonkasa is the "king" and rui has ulterior motives to become his minister, but how does exactly the world itself works in here? you gotta elaborate that a bit and also add a reason behind why Rui wants to do take that role, what he will do to achive this goal, afterwards, why does he become obsessed with that idea? there's a lot of things that could be added here to make it interesting because at first sight it's too simple. For example, it could be that dragonkasa is not a good ruler? he is a tyrant/egoist king? maybe that's why Rui wants to become close and have some position there so he can take the throne? maybe there's some revenge in the process? this is one of the many things you can use to justify why this is happening because the story needs to make sense.

...this one has the same problem, what's the reason behind Rui's actions? he is in love but how did he fell in love? and how does exactly backfire? how does Tsukasa actually get to know this? what exactly Rui does to make Tsukasa fall in love, actually how does this magic work. I'm not really a big fan of romantic plots with no sense at all so this one feels way too boring for my liking, not that the idea itself it's bad, I consider that ideas itself are not bad but most of the time they are bad execute, for example, this could have a start or not, it could start from the middle or even from the end of the story when things are settled but you can start showing how it reached to that point in so many ways. Usually people like to start when things are "settled", in this case, when one of them is already in love, others start from the beginning, how did they meet and how these feelings started to appear. But I feel background stories for each characters are also important to develop a good story so if none of them don't have one, the idea doesn't work. So going back to the first questions, why is it Rui a sorcerer? and what has to do with OG Tsukasa? what is Tsukasa actually doing there? and I could make more questions about it to fill the holes.

All what I said it's said objectively, whenever I come up with a new Au, I think what role has each character and what truly motivates the character to do certain actions before setting any kind of "plot" between them so it makes sense, if you set first the plot and not the roles of each character, it feels like something isn't connecting correctly between them.

For example and this I said it on Twitter, when you want to make your audience feel something emotional or connect with the characters of your story, you can't just throw a lot of things in a bowl and expect people to get emotional with that; i.e if you make two characters cry a lot, that won't make people feel sad just because they are "crying", you need to build the emotions from 0, not from nowhere and expect people to feel sorry for them. It's more effective a story and has more impact. This is might be a very personal opinion on mine because I see most people don't care about how it's build the emotions in a story, as long the design/art style is pretty, the background doesn't matter much, unfortunately.