#ingoldentent

It’s high time that the local feral rat takes a night out on the town.

As he’s strolling through the golden ward, he happens across a man in a cloak. ... Man, that hairstyle is fucked up. Not that Ryuu is one to judge.

Nah- more importantly than that, his instincts are telling him that this guy is radiating some serious magical energy. He looks like the real deal. A magician, maybe? He looks too chipper to be a 1,000 year old witch or something stupid.

Oh, well. He might as well introduce himself! He slides up to Battler and...

the thing about loving a piece of media so much is that i can see all the ways it could be even better im def not one of those people who are like “id not change anything about it!” there is a lot i could change... for the question i dont want to give obvious answers like “remove tasteless boob jokes” or “imrpove pacing” that doesnt seem like “ONE” thing to change anyway... 

another thign that comes to mind is adding more content and depth to my fave erika....but as much as i love her i dont think that would be right. she isnt directly relevant to the story and i dont think itd improve umineko really. she serves as a foil to multiple characters so there could be interesitng things done there but  again adding depth is such a vague thing idk if itd count as “one” thing. so im disregarding this idea. 

okay i got it. i think id change the ambiguity around beatrices death and rebirth. i talked about this with a million people and it still bugs me. it doesnt make sense to me no matter how i look at it. id just have beatrice flat out revived at the end of 6 without the “oh shes not sayos SOUL” stuff and remove the red about beatrice never returning. 

alternatively i would change sayos relationships to george and jessica. a lot of fans already intrepret her relationship with george as her basically settling for it. but i dont think thats intended in the text. id make it clearer that george was PINING AFTER A 13 YEAR OLD and the relationship was fucked up. id develop jessica and sayos relationship more instead both with shannon and kanon. AND THEYD WIN THE LOVE DUEL. 

Battler will be dropped for you!

She wondered what Ushiromiya Battler might be up to at such an hour, roaming the streets of Cotes Ward all by his lonesome. Granted, she had been doing the same thing, so who was she to judge?

“Yahoo!”

Owl’s high pitched voice was the only precursor to the sight of the petite, pink-clad woman jumped down out of thin air beside Battler.

After two hours of dancing and giving a tour to a kid who Jon was already ready to lay down his life for, the youngest Super was worn out. Emotionally and physically. The kid reminded him of Damian, and not in a good way. His heart was worn out, and even though he was tired, Jon couldn’t get comfortable in his own bed. It felt suffocatingly quiet. Too empty. So he picked up his pet rabbit and started walking around, hoping to find somewhere he could stay for the night. He walked for a while until he found himself at Battler’s house.

The first thing she felt when entering the island was fear. The fear of suddenly waking up in a place she didn’t recognize, and not knowing anybody around her. The aching loneliness she felt as a child.

Maybe she should be rejoicing. As she was writing up those message bottles, she had silently begged someone to figure it out and stop her. Being stuck in a place like this meant not carrying out those murders...

... But it also meant she’d never see Battler again, and he’d certainly never understand.

Just before she could weep at her fate, she saw a figure approaching her. That figure was...

“Ba...tt...ler...”

She choked out those words in shock. His identity didn’t need to be confirmed. He had grown, but he certainly resembled the Battler she knew six years ago.

The emotion bubbling up in her chest... Is it relief? Is it excitement? Is if fear? Is it hatred? She couldn’t tell, and she couldn’t even bring herself to touch him. If her palm connects with his, then this illusion may break- and she may be alone all over again.

“Battler... Do you remember me, from six years ago...? S-” She wanted to say her name, but stopped herself. What was her name? Does she introduce herself as Shannon, or Sayo? Who is she? “You never wrote a letter to me. You never visited me. You never took me away. You never came on a white horse. You never fulfilled your promise. You left me in Hell, Battler. I wanted to spend my life with you, so why...? Why, why why why why why why......?!!! You cruel man...!!!!”

Her breath hitched in her throat, her calm (though shaky) words turning into a mangled and ugly sob.