Hello! How are you? I hope youâre doing well, I love reading your prompts and was wondering if you have any advice for me. Iâm a teen writer (practicing, Iâve never actually shared anything) and i got the grand idea to put my claustrophobic OC in the Backrooms with her friend while I was playing some off-brand version of it. (prolly cringe idc) anyhoo I have a few levels outlined but Iâm still stuck on the Poolrooms. I donât really have any ideas for plot (even though itâs my favorite level design wise, itâs rlly boring and I donât know how to make it interesting enough to write) so I was wondering if you had any ideas? I havenât decided if I want one of them to almost drown or not :3 so if you have any ideas of how exploring the poolrooms could be more exciting (whether it be drowning or injury or smth) that would be great <3 (also sorry this is so long and I hope itâs not too much but if you perhaps have any advice on writing claustrophobia too plz share bc the only things I have to go off of that is some Tumblr posts that didnât rlly help and how I felt in the play-place slides when I was little) thank you 𫶠sorry for the shpeil, have a good day <3 (donât forget to drink water)
Hello! I thank you for your words! I hope you're doing good too!
I must admit i don't really know much about the backrooms and i've never played any videogame based on them eheh, so i had to watch a walkthrough just to get the idea.
My first tip is that your OC could slip on the tiled floor, and get hurt, maybe a concussion, which could happen when she is alone (because for various reasons her friend has moved away or the two have split up). The OC could have a moment of confusion, or even remain unconscious underwater, leading her to inhale water and make her almost drown (I say almost because at that moment her friend will arrive and save her ;)).
I've seen there are also dark places where the water is not visible, and therefore there could be sharp objects in the water or even cracked or broken pool tiles that obviously hurt the legs or feet of OC, preventing her from continuing her path. And here the friend will have to go around the poolrooms to find a first aid kit to save her, having to abandon OC again and leaving her exposed to further dangers. Or why not leaving her delirious from blood loss, so OC could start seeing or hearing messed up things, influenced by the particular environment in which she is.
A very whumpy aspect to consider (but I don't know if it can be applied to the game) is hypothermia. Staying in water for a long time, especially if it's cold (maybe the two are in a new pool where the water is colder than the previous ones) could lead to hypothermia for both of them, even if they don't realize it immediately, and this slows them down and compromises their decision-making abilities.
Now as for writing claustrophobia, I would personally start with a description of how the place where OC is changes by her POV, for example the walls close in on her and maybe it could seem like the water rises to the point of almost drowning her. Only then would I move on to a physical description of all the symptoms that claustrophobia can give: mainly could feel dizzy, have difficulty breathing, with an accelerated heartbeat and even nausea. Usually i write this as a progressive increase of these problems, starting from the least important discomfort (eg. OC's world starts to spin). Then this discomfort increases and OC gets an accelerated heartbeat and difficulty breathing, which becomes greater and greater the more she tries to breathe or calm down, until it is now impossible for OC to return to normal and they must either sit down, or even faint.
This is my drabble about a fainting, with an accumulation of symptoms until the character faints.
I really hope I helped you at least a little (if you have any more questions, please comment) and thank you very much for the ask! Stay safe <3
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Following the extreme weather part but mostly focused on the comfort part somehow.
Prompt: Hypothermia
Ship: Mingjue/Zonghui
Word Count: 1564
"I'm sorry." was the first thing nie mingjue said as he entered the council room and zonghui looked up from the papers, he looked tired. "The storm blocked us in the village and I wanted to keep all the strength for the return. I should have sent you a butterfly."Â
ZongHui leaped on his feet, tiredness instantly forgotten as he crossed the distance in the room and took in the general appearance of his sect leader. His outer robe, the heavy, warm one, was nowhere to be found, his clothes and hair wet, a strand of hair, in the left side toward the back, hardly hidden in the mass of black hair, was white.Â
"it's taking its toll in the end." he whispered, twisting the fine hair in his fingers.Â
"you don't like them? I can always ask Mother to teach me how she conceal them." it wasn't a big deal for him, he never made it a problem, he knew it would happen, sooner or later, it was connected to the purification rituals he had been taught. Sure, it would be strange, maybe even a bit hard to explain to others without giving it away but nie mingjue didn't mind them.Â
"No⌠I actually like them, I was just considering that now it's showing. I know it's a proof of your real strength and kindness." he moved closer and kissed him before moving back shocked.Â
"you're freezing!" he took the face in both hands, then he took his hands and held them close. "mingjue why didn't you say something sooner?" he dragged him toward his room ignoring his complaints about not being that much cold and that he had things he should take care of as soon as he could.
"you'll deal with them later. Heavens, you're so cold! How can you not feel it?" he dragged him by the bed, forcing him to sit down and stripping from the wet clothes.Â
"zonghui. Zonghui. - he called as the other man ran around the room to get dry, warmer clothes and towels. - acting sect leader Nie zonghui! you surely have more important things than undressing me." it was meant to sound joking but his voice dropped slightly, like he suddenly grew tired.Â
"part of my important thing to do is taking care of you, master, Since youâre very much neglecting it.â
âIâm not neglecting it, youâre really exaggerating ZongHui. If you wanted me on this bed to make up for not having been back last night as promised you should have justââ
âStop.â ZongHui turned, a blanket warmed up next to the fire held in his hands. âI⌠Iâm not in the mood for that, Sect Leader. Iâm not.â He crossed the room and put the blanket around his shoulders. Nie MingJue sighed briefly at the warm touch before stretching out and grabbing Nie ZongHui, forcing him to take a step closer, arms wrapped around his waist.
âI never wanted to worry you. Iâm sorry. I am, I swear.â He grasped the fabric of his robe, holding tight until he felt ZongHui's arms wrapping around his shoulders, his face resting over MingJue's hair. âIt really doesnât feel too bad, Iâm just a little cold and tired, not freezing.â
âThatâs because youâre too cold. - He moved and grabbed a robe before sliding it on him and placing the blanket back on his shoulders. - you donât realize the dangers here.â
âIf I promise to rest will you stop worrying and go check on Huaisang?â
âNo.â He helped him lay down on the bed and burrowed him in more blankets.
âZongHui. Go check on Huaisang.â It was an order, not really. His voice was too low and soft to be taken as an order, and MingJue stopped ordering him around like that in private long ago.
âFine, but I wonât stop worrying. Are we clear?â
Nie MingJue gave him a small, tired smile and breathed out letting his eyes close. ZongHui remained in the room a little longer, he quietly kneeled beside the bed and brushed some hair away from his face.
âJust because youâre not exactly human it doesnât mean you're immortal. You're not. I canât risk losing you because you're too reckless.â He brushed his lips against his forehead, feeling the skin still cold, before standing to go check on the second master, and fetch some more warm water.
"how's Da-ge?" was the first question coming out of the bundle of blankets on the bed. Nie huaisang let his head slip out, only the head, and looked at the man entering the room with a bowl of soup. "and don't say fine just because he said that." he sat up and took the bowl from him.Â
"he's stubborn, just as always." not like nie zonghui had any intention of saying anything different in truth, and out of everyone, huaisang knew what he meant by that.Â
"then run back to him before he decides to take a walk to his study chamber. He talked about making sure the villages had enough to survive this winter and he seemed really set on dealing with that immediately."Â
ZongHui sighed as he reminded Huaisang to go back to rest after the soup, which the younger nie was already going to do but it was good to have someone remind him.Â
He balanced the tray 2ith 2arm water and soup on one hand as he opened the door. Mingjue was still on the bed, seemingly asleep, for once. He lowered the tray in a table and moved closer with just the water, he could heat the soup later when he was awake.Â
That was when he noticed. That was when he knew things weren't as good as he hoped, and he didn't keep his hopes even that high.Â
His breath was slow and shallow, no shivering, but he hadn't been even before, and still his skin was cold.Â
Climbing on the bed zonghui slid next to him before changing position so that nie mingjue was now half laying on him, and he wrapped his arms around his body. Sure, he was smaller, almost like huaisang, and it had always been strange when he tried to embrace him, ever since they were younger, but he prided himself in being physically stronger, despite the difference not being excessive. - people usually didn't believe him when he said that, not even the disciples that regularly trained with him, but he needed strength to wield two sabers, and it wasn't all spiritual power. He could defeat mingjue if he wanted, and he didn't. He could definitely carry him, was it not for mingjue being bigger and making the whole ordeal harder. -Â
"if you freeze to death because you've been stubborn and gonna be mad, I warn you." he whispered, holding him a little closer. Nie mingjue didn't move and zonghui signed. It was going to be a long night and he couldn't let fear have the upper ground on him, he couldn't let his thoughts slip in his mind, little whispers telling him how he was going to fall asleep at some point, how he would wake up only to find his sect leader, his lover, dead in his arms. He couldn't let them in but they were hovering close with every slow breath he took.Â
In the end zonghui actually fell asleep at some point. He woke up startled at a rumbling sound, the door of the room rattling with the wind and the body still held in his arms shivering slightly, face red and a lot warmer than he remembered.Â
"mingjue?" he called softly, shifting their bodies in a better position, mingjue moaned, face buried against his chest before opening his eyes a little.Â
"Now I'm cold, zonghuiâŚ" he whispered, barely looking at him. Zonghui didn't have to touch his forehead to know, part of him wanted to be glad the cold hadn't been excessive as he first feared, but mingjue had never been great at dealing with fevers. They got out of control even faster. He should probably call for a healer without waiting longer, before it grew worse and worse, and zonghui saw it happen way too many times. But when he moved to get out of the bed mingjue held tighter on his robe, a soft, moaned "no, don't go." whisper coming out of his mouth. Maybe⌠MaybeMaybe he could lay there a little longer.Â
-He sent a messenger all the way to gusu only a couple of hours later, requesting their healing abilities to help their sick sect leader. When lan qiren showed up with his older nephew in tow, xichen worried about his older sworn brother, it took him only a look before turning to zonghui.Â
"Did he go roll in the snow again?" he asked, shooting the younger man a look, like that was the actual reason someone like nie mingjue would get so sick in such a short time. "I thought he would've learned by now."Â
"uncle?" Lan xichen called confused, MingJue's skin felt on fire under his hand, zonghui slipped in the bed again, holding him close.Â
"No rolling, I hope. He's a stubborn being who'd make me go gray before time."Â
"seems like he started for himself already⌠I always say he reminds me of zhenxiang but now he looks all like his mother."Â
"you won't even imagine how much." nie zonghui thought. -Â
Iâm starting a bit late! But Iâm doing my best to catch up on Inktober!! This yearâs theme is GIFT ART!!! Iâm super excited about this one~ First up is @hypotermiartâs wonderful OC Russin, who is still the best bird and i will not shut up about this.
A small comic featuring @hypotermiartâs OC Russin, who is an ostrich, and also I think is just absolutely 10/10 best bird, truly a treasure, amazing!
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a human character and a droid are really great friends. Unfortunately, for some reasons, they get lost in a forest, with no way to call somebody. Itâs really cold and itâs quite dark so itâs almost impossible to reach for a shelter somewhere. In a little time the human succumbs to the cold and the droid can do nothing but watching helplessly as his friendâs life slowly fades away
Mendaki gunung, menjadi kegiatan yang banyak digemari dalam beberapa tahun belakangan, atau bahkan menjadi lifestyle baru gak cuma dikalangan anak muda, sudah merambah ke semua usia saat ini. Seiring berkembangnya era teknologi, orang bisa dengan mudah mendapatkan informasi akses ke gunung yang ingin dituju.
Sayangnya kemudahan informasi tersebut gak dibarengi dengan hal-hal penting selama pendakian itu sendiri, misalnya pengetahuan penanganan gawat darurat ketika mendaki, atau  simpelnya yang sering ditemui selama pendakian adalah penanganan ketika diri sendiri atau teman terserang Hipotermia. Kalo gak ditangani dengan segera, bisa menyebabkan kematian bagi si penderitanya. Kan ngeri, kalo kita gatau cara menanganinya dengan cepat dan tepat
âyang gua tau sih Skin to Skin aja kalo ada yang Hipo, pokonya lepas baju masuk sleeping bag bedua ama si penderita, pelukan, beres!â
Ga gitu coy, lu mah cuma nyari kesempatan aja pengen pelukan anjir, apalagi yang hiponya cewe, beuh... ini sih pendaki cabul namanya haha. buat cewe kalo kedinginan dikit, terus kata temen lu yang cowo itu hipo, terus temen lu nyuruh skin to skin ama dia jan mao coy, Modus doang! haha
Nah kebetulan minggu kemaren gua ikutan Basic Mountaineering Course yang diselenggarain ama Komunitas Backpacker Jakarta. Acara ini udah murah bet murah, ngundang narasumber yang berkompeten pula di bidangnya, ga ada apa apanyalah dibanding sama ilmu yang kita (red:peserta) dapet dari acara itu. Yang pengen gua garis bawahi adalah tentang Pengetahuan Penanganan Gawat Darurat dari Bang Agus, gua lupa nama lengkapnya. Beliau dari Lembaga Bulan Sabit Merah Indonesia (BSMI) Lembaga yang aktif bergerak dalam kemanusiaan. Beliau memaparkan hal-hal dasar tentang penanganan gawat darurat, terutama masalah Hipotermia yang pengen gua sharing di sini.
Njut...
Sebelumnya kita kudu tau dulu nih, apa sih hipotermia? Dilansir dari situs resmi tokopedia.com wikipedia.comÂ
Hipotermia adalah suatu kondisi di mana mekanisme tubuh untuk pengaturan suhu kesulitan mengatasi tekanan suhu dingin. Hipotermia juga dapat didefinisikan sebagai suhu bagian dalam tubuh di bawah 35 °C. Tubuh manusia mampu mengatur suhu pada zona termonetral, yaitu antara 36,5-37,5 °C. Di luar suhu tersebut, respon tubuh untuk mengatur suhu akan aktif menyeimbangkan produksi panas dan kehilangan panas dalam tubuh.Â
Kampret, panjang amat wikipedia jelasinnya. Intinya, Suhu tubuh dibawah biasanya, dan ga mampu respon buat ngatur suhu standar tubuh kita, gitu lah.
Nah menurut paparan Bang Agus tersebut, hipotermia ga terjadi secara tiba-tiba cuma karena kita kedinginan, melainkan akumulasi dari proses gejala-gejala sebelumnya. Ada gejala-gejala yang dialami si penderita ketika naik gunung, tapi temennya biasanya gak peka sama gejala tersebut. Ya maklumlah ya temennya cowo semua. Sebabnya yang memunculkan gejala itu diantaranya males makan karena mendaki gunung nguras banget kalori, kalo kalori masuk ga sesuai sama yang keluar tiati tuh, bisa nyebabin hipo juga. Sebabnya lagi adalah ga jujur, malu, gengsi  buat ngomong kalo ada perubahan di tubuh yang ga enak, basah karena hujan, kedinginan berlebih, Dehidrasi dll. kebiasaan gengsi ini sih yang wajib dihindari kalo naik gunung, intinya terbuka aja, selow, paling efeknya dicengin doang, ujungnya ditolongin kok pasti, gaada apa-apanya dibanding gengsi, kena hipo, ga selamet, mati, Nah pilih mana dah.
Dari sebab-sebab itu kalo dibiarin bisa menimbulkan gejala-gejala hipo. Seperti mengantuk, menggigil, kurang respon gerakan dan panggilan, disorientasi sampai halusinasi. Dari gejala tersebut, puncaknya adalah penderita akan setengah sadar, tapi merasa tubuhnya berat, panas gerah, mulai melepas pakaian yang ia kenakan, ketika di fase ini kemungkinan selamatnya penderita adalah minim sekali. Makanya kebanyakan dari survivor yang tersesat di Gunung kemudian terserang Hipo, dan tak selamat, mereka ditemukan tak mengenakan sehelai pakaian karena fase puncak itu tadi.
Serem kan Hipo? Gimana sih antisipasi dan penanganannya? Dari pemaparan Bang Agus juga adalah, melawan rasa malas jika terjadi gejalanya pada diri sendiri dan mensugesti agar tak malas kepada teman yang tekena gejalanya, terutama untuk mencukupi kebutuhan kalori selama pendakian. Tegas, kalo bisa paksa, daripada terjadi sesuatu yang tak diinginkan. Mengganti Seluruh pakaian basah yang menempel pada tubuh, membungkus dengan thermal blanket, menyalakan perapian dalam tenda, mensuplai korban dengan makanan dan minuman hangat selain yang mengandung kafein, mengompres dengan kain hangat pada bagian tubuh yang cepet keilangan panas cem kuping, leher, telapak tangan, kaki, dan perut. dan juga terus ajak komunikasi sampai benar-benar kondisi tubuh stabil dan kembali normal. Selama belum memasuki fase puncak, proses penanganan di atas semestinya membuahkan hasil baik.
Langkah terakhir ketika yang diusahakan tak juga membuahkan hasil ialah Skin to Skin. Apasih Skin to Skin? ialah proses penempelan kulit ke kulit untuk mentransfer panas tubuh, dari orang yang sehat kepada penderita hipo yang keadaannya lambat dalam penyerapan panas. Skin to Skin memang tak ada sumber referensinya, namun bisa jadi efektif dengan cara yang benar tentunya, dan menjadi fatal jika caranya salah.Seperti yang gua tulis di awal tadi, buka baju, masuk sleeping bag bedua, pelukan, cara ini tentunya salah karena bisa jadi yang sehat bukannya mentransfer panas malah kehilangan panas, jadinya malah dua-duanya hipo kalo gitu mah. Yang mentransfer panas gak cuma sehat, wajib diiringi dengan panas tubuh yang cukup untuk di transfer, dengan mencukupi kebutuhan kalori untuk tubuhnya sendiri tentunya. Dengan segala usaha penanganan di atas dan doa kepada Yang Maha Kuasa, tentunya kita mengharapkan membuahkan hasil yang terbaik buat si penderita hipotermia, dijauhkan dari segala hal-hal yang tak diinginkan.
Bujugdah! banyak juga gua ngetik semoga yang baca kaga pada kabur gegara kebanyakan karakter ini haha. Because Sharing is Caring! mendaki bukan cuma soal kekinian, poto tulisan, poto sunrise, sunset, sunlight bersih bersinar, kebalik! bodo! karena mendaki berinteraksi langsung dengan alam yang notabene tak bisa di prediksi, yang udah ahli di bidang mendakipun bisa mati ketika berurusan dengan alam, apalagi kita yang cuma pemula yang pengen dikata kekinian, mari me-refresh lagi tujuan mendaki dan banyak mempelajari hal-hal dasar semacam ini. Tulisan di atas cuma review dari apa yang gua tangkep di materi PPGD kemaren, kalo ada yang mao tau lebih lanjut bisa langsung hubungi ahlinya di IG Bang @Agusonpapers atau di blog pribadinya www.agusonpapers.blogspot.co.id Anyway terimakasih Bang agus dan BSMI untuk materinya yang bermanfaat banget ini, terimakasih juga buat Backpacker Jakarta yang udah bikin acara keren dan bermanfaat begini, gua tunggu BMC berikutnya.Â