#edits stuff

Dakota’s writing is amazing and chapter ten really blew me away. I started highlighting & annotating the whole chapter and it ended up looking like a high school English assignment. I had so many ideas by then end that it took me about a week to start on anything!

Sometimes I have the lines and dialogue I want to use, sometimes I don’t. Usually I try to make connections between every single item I’m using so everything has meaning! From the images, to the font, even placement and layouts! Not everything has to, but I like to make sure that the smallest detail has meaning even if it only makes sense to me /hj

I (vaguely) knew from everything I had chosen I wanted to use:

“The small wobble in George’s voice grows, “and you looked right through me.” & “Whatever chance I had, he thinks. “Did I miss you?”

together and as the central lines of the edit because I thought they paralleled each other well! 

then I scrounged around for a paragraph of lines (internal dialogue?) that matched the quotes. I chose,

 “Everything you said,” George continues, “everything you did, every time you so much as talked to me or said my name. I wanted to make you laugh. I wanted to be with you, every second, of every day.”

for George because it comes right before George says, “and you looked right through me”. With the way I ended up laying things out, your eyes are drawn to the center, which means you read those words first, and then you read the paragraph. In my head it would be a bittersweet reminder that George really did want Dream.

Which ties in to Dream’s part next!

I struggled to find one for Dream. I couldn’t pick between two lines of internal dialogue. The other one I had chosen fit very well, but I wanted to use it for a potential stand alone edit! So I ended up going with the second option,

“Dream’s chest yearns. He wants to take the opportunity and run with it—drag them off of this path and hide in the tranquil underbrush of sly jokes and light normalcy.”

I thought it went well with the imagery of the edit! Hands can be very expressive! Dream’s hand looks like he’s reaching out, while George is hesitant. I hope it conveyed how Dream wanted to pull them out of the current situation they were in!

The quotes in the background are a complete happy accident that happened while editing!

So I wanted them to be recognizable, but didn’t want them to completely steal the attention away from the foreground. Your eyes were probably drawn to it last because I made them very transparent and hard to see. I did decide that I wanted to use lines from Dream on George’s edit & vice versa! (also if you noticed you can see their names on each other’s edits which sorta helps you identify who’s saying what)

The one on George says, “Chilling warmth blooms from Dream’s cheeks down his neck, and collects in his chest with vivid sensation. His lips part helplessly.”

I broke away from ch10 for Dream because I couldn’t help but try and match the imagery of, “After a moment, he quietly adds, your voice sounds like fire. It burns. His head spins. I burn you? You melt me, George murmurs.” for Dream’s since orange is most commonly associated with fire and Dream’s hand is basked in an orange glow! (I wanted to use those iconic lines at least once)