#doughnuts5-ever

And the match v relationship symbolism absolutely vibes IDK if im reading way to much into it but like you start and the match is pristine (first appearances) and then it becomes blackened but there's still the flame there (truths come out but there's still love), then its buffeted by the wind but refuses to die (struggles), then you get too close to the flame and it hurts (fight?) and finally the flame is out but the embers are still there (longing??? Pining??). +

"and he grants you a smile you’ve rarely seen; unique like warm rain and the smell of a vineyard." stop dude I'm... like. Rain you could dance in forever without ramifications. Walking through the vines, mountains all around, a light breeze, utter peace. DUDE YOUR WRITING IS SO EMOTIVE ITS THE MIDDLE OF WINTER AND IM IMAGINING A FRESH SPRING SCENE ITS JUST THST POWERFUL. wow 😍 I'm so exited for the other parts oOF

+ DUDEEEEE the symbolism absolutely makes sense and I'm so excited for this but also so so stressed oh no imma cry huh? anyway thank u for indulging my rambles, sorry this is so long 💕💕

"The sounds of nature are the accompaniment to your romance." plz. oof. the atmosphere is so strong in this whole thing like stripping it right back to just the bare senses... This whole thing was an absolute joy to read. "some dalliance of unease" no thoughts, I'm just a huge fan of this phrasing. Dalliance is... Great word choice. Yes. Big fan.

"The sun smiles down on the water. Flecks of light scatter off the surface. Foaming slightly, the liquid splashes as it meets lichen-covered rocks; dusting your face in chilled, pellucid freckles." u should know it's 5°C where I am rn. It's freezing. But this was such a potent mental image I could feel the warmth. I was /there/. Like I could feel the sparkle and glare of sun on the water, the cool stream, the spongy moss. In my brain theres mountains, a rolling field, big willow trees... *sigh*

"and the heart of the match glows a resilient red. For an infinitesimal second, it reignites- the flame reaching higher, grasping at the air defiantly" THIS AJHHH. again, vocab is on point. "infinitesimal"??? dude... I'm shook such a good choice. And the "defiance" of the flame is such a cool image.

"Still, it returns to blaze quietly; a small show of force despite the breeze that whisps by" I was waiting for it and it DELIVERED your descriptions for the wind were lovely too? idk if thats weird but they stood out to me. "Then- it singes. Pain shoots up your palm, and you curse- switching the matchstick to the other hand with panic" OOF yes the burn was also super cool I though using the short sentence was clever! Makes it a bit more frantic, and the "fulfilling warmth" phrasing was gorgeous

"It sways, waving to you- almost fluttering out to touch you, and you can see the undulation of its radiant figure against the grey wall." im doing a lot of excited arm movements rn cuz I AHHHH I JUST LOVE THIS BIT OK?? 'undulation' was suxh a huge brain choice and the atmosphere really comes alive with the red of the flames v the grey of the wall?? Juxtaposition babey I love it oof many feelings.